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U need to fix a few grammatical errors in this chapter.

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The one thing that's bothered me and doesn't ring true is when Sirius refers to Lily as a mudblood. If he cares so much for her as a friend/love he would never even think of her like that.

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The kiss was definitely hot and reckless! The rest of the conversation was just ok for me, I think it could be polished a bit more to not sound too childish.

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You need to make a James and lily one with there wedding and son

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NOOO! You can't end if like this! You must continue!!
I absolutely loved your story. I really enjoyed how you portrayed Sirius, along with his relationship to Voldermort and his family. 
Throughout the story I could not figure out whether his relationship with Cat was one of an old friend, a mother, or a lover. 
Overall wonderful story, and I look forward to reading other story's of yours :)

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Congrats on winning a Dobby for this! I give you an 8/10 for the first chap.

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That was just amazing. But I really want it to continue!

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bloody brilliant omfg. x

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i don't normally read marauders era fics, but after reading some of your other works i had to give this one a chance :) im glad i did because i have really enjoyed reading it!

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Magnificent, absolutely wonderful! To be truthful I actually read halfway through the sequel before I realized that i was supposed to read this first. WHOOPSIES!!

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That was a lovely ending to the story. I feel sad for Sirius poor guy :(

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So who is the mysterious girl?

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This chapter nearly made me cry :(

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The last line.. "James nodded and the Marauders each raised their wands and softly, in unison, they murmured “mischief managed,” before slipping out the doorway." was a lovely way to finish it off.

I like the idea that the Marauders came up with the moving staircases.. pretty cool.

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ewww Lily and Snape gross

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I don't know if i like the whole 'Dumbledore has a motive behind everything he does'...

Poor Lily, the way Sirius treated her made me sad :(

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This chapter was great, your point of view about Sirius's childhood, family and how Regulus was recruited was interesting and well though out.

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This chapter made me feel so emotional, poor Lily and Sirius :( what happened to his chest? I'm sure there wasn't another person in the room.. I guess I'll find out in the next chapter.. by the way this chapter was great :)

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Poor Sirius :( Looks like Peter is already close with the death eaters hmm..

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This chapter was amazing! It got me hooked from the first sentence, the characters are well written and the chapter flowed very nicely.

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Hmm.why is it.that, everytime I have read your stories, I feel just a tad bit more grown-up than before?

It must have benn more than four year since I discovered you. God, I cannot believe it; my old reviews are still up here, hidden on some page, for all the world to see.

Four years.I will be forever grateful.

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I've just read the whole story in one go and I must say I loved it! I actually felt as though it was part of J.K. Rowling's story giving information on what life was like before Harry. All I can say is well done :) x

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A very evocative piece of writing, that held me throughout the chapter. This is the first of your stories I have read, but I have no doubt I will be reading more.

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Beautiful and Tragic. Everything about this story send shiver down my spine. Your words create such a powerful imagery, absolutely fascinating. 

I am relative new to Sirius/Lily but this just sealed the deal. You write them so real, powerful and not to mention sexy... I really envy you and your talent. Hoping for more.

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This is good introductory chapter, cider is alcoholic though...

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