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oooh!!! a cliffie!!! you don't know how MUCH I LOVE CLIFFIES!!! anyway, FOUR HUNDRED AND SEVENTY YEARS!?!? how did she stay alive so long? wait a minute, red eyes? maybe HORCRUXES? and their all slytherins? omg, I think I know where this is going!

-brook 😘

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YE HORCRUXESSS MUAHAHAHAHAHAH   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Hi! this is really good so far, but, sadly, there is no invisibility spell in the wizarding world. BUT, wizards are not as dumb as you might now think. They DID create a charm that blends you into your surroundings: The Dilusentment (i dunno how to spell it) Charm. bye! ;)

-brook

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I know right! I kinda just *jazz hands* MaDe OnE uP XD ty for reviewing!!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

pen name: BrookTheRavenClaw (Brook)

suggestion/s: ummm...P.A.D.M. (The Pureblood Association For Dark Magic)?

Anything else: Umm...no. Actually, maybe you could send out a form so readers can be included in da story? That's always fun. Just an idea. bye! ;)

-Brook 😘💋

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OOO that's a good name! I might do that :D I'm not working on dis one right now but if I do, I might do zat UwU   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo! Once again, good job. Looking forward to reading more. 🙂

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Ty! I love seeing your reviews on here! Unfortunately, I'm taking a break from this to work on my new fanfic, A Ray of Hope ~shamelessly self-advertises~ oH yEaH bTw DeFiNiTeLy Go ChEcK tHaT oUt lol, anyways I'll probably be back to this one in a little while. 

Ty for reviewing!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo! There's so many twists and turns, I'm enjoying it. I'm curious if Mcgonagall is going to play a role like Dumbledore did, someone who seems to know everything that is happening. I look forward to reading more. 🙂

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I know right! I'm glad you like it!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo! Interested to see what's next. 🙂

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Ty! Thanks for reviewing!!!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo! I liked this chapter. Definitely curious how Alexis knows these advanced spells. I look forward to reading more. 🙂

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I'm glad you liked it! Ty for reviewing!!!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo! I'm finally back and reviewing!(At least for now. I feel like my free time is super limited lately.) Anyways I enjoyed the chapter. Is it bad I liked seeing a pissed off Neville? I liked seeing a side of him that wasn't just a kind push over, even if it's just a temporary curse.

Anyways, keep it up. 🙂

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Yay, you're back! I get it, everything's super busy rn. Lol, it's not bad. It's nice to see that side of him. It's also pretty funny XD thanks for reviewing!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Woah...this is seriously good. I love how you always end on a cliffhanger. It keeps me coming back.! Also please update soon, I really really really really really need to know what happens!
-HH :))

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I'm so glad you like it! I'm almost done with chapter 11, some stuff has been going on lately so I haven't had much time to write. Thanks for reviewing :D   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Ok ok ok! Amazing plot twist here but...why did Alexis not understand the snake hiss in the last chapter? If she was actually a parseltongue wouldn't she be able to understand what the snake was hissing? ANwyays, this as usual was an amazing chapter. Sorry for not reviewing! Please keep writing, I love this story! I am sure that Nimue (that was her name right?) tampered with serum. I love Adrian so much!!! Can't wait for the next chapter!

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Ohhh I understand why that would be confusing. No, it's the noise the sink is making. I might have to fix that. Totally fine! I'm so glad you like it!! And yeah, that's her name. Glad you like Adrian, he's one of my favorite characters! Thanks for reviewing!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

I love this. I can't believe they're going in the Chamber of Secrets! I wonder what they'll find? Write more soon please! :) This is so good.

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Aww, thank you! Glad you like it :)   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Great twist! I wonder how she's still alive? If I had to guess I would probably say she has Horcruxes, but I don't really know.

Great job, love your writing!

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Thanks! Glad you liked it!!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

This is so good. Keep writing please! :) 

I can't believe what happened!

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Thank you! Glad you like it! Thanks for reviewing!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

NONONONONONO! 

This is one of the MOST exciting fanfics ever!

Please update as soon as possible or else I will die with curiosity!

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Thank you so much! Don't worry, chapter nine is almost done!!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

oh creepy

moving on to the next chapter

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It's nice to see your reviews :)   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

NO, i dont mind alexis being in Slytherin but I thought that maybe ollie would understand and try to stay friends with her!!!

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I know right! Glad you liked it!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Alexis seems cute! Curious for the reason that her mom was so over protective so far! And I like that this story seems like it'll mostly be OCs!

Check out my story if you ever have the time :)

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Thanks! This is my first time ever writing a HP fanfic so it's awesome to know people like it :D  And I'd love to check out your fanfic   -Your Girl Fiona

She's so pretty. I can't wait to find out what happens next.

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Aww, thank you!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo! Amother fun chapter. There's a part of me that hopes you turn the house biases on their head. Like these 3 Slytherin's who are plotting are basically like Harry, Hermione and Ron and they're doing things to prevent others in a different house from doing something bad. I'd enjoy seeing Slytherins being the heros for once. (Although I also assume you're making Alli and the others heros anyways.)

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Oop, you're onto something here! Sorry though, the plotting Slytherins are the bad guys smh. Remember, though, the SEVEN DEADLY SINS and The APPARITION *spooky noises play xD* are all Slytherins, and they're the heroes. I'm excited to watch them bring honor to the Slytherin name.   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo! (I don't know why I'm starting every review that way, but not stopping now...) Anywayysss I thought it was cute how Roxanne and Alli became friends immediately. Reminds me of some of my school yard friendships from my elementary school days.

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Hehe, I use that term way too much too. I know, I wanted it to be like how it was with Harry and Ron. It was always so easy, wasn't it? Lol. Happy holidays!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo! Finally back again. Once again I enjoyed this chapter. Was surprised she ended up being a Slytherin. Curious to see how that goes. :)

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Yeah, it's a surprise, isn't it? Thanks for reviewing, happy holidays!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

OMG!!! I love it and thank you sooo much!
Happy Holidays for whatever you celebrate!

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No problem! Happy holidays!!! I celebrate Christmas *roCkiN' aRoUnD tHe cHriStmAs tReE lol*   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Oooh! Hi there, this is Nafsika and I really liked the first chapter of your book. I think the fact that she has a crush at eleven is totally normal. (I feel like we all had..) 

Nafsika!

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Hi Nafsika! Glad you like it! Also thanks for my new chapter, I love it! :D   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Cute! 

I honestly would try to keep a chocolate frog. Yes, I am that stupid.

I saw you self advertising in a review in another fanfiction. I thought, wow, nobody does that. InTreStIng. So here I am, placing a review in hopes it will be a bookmark to remember.

If you are planning on publishing this (which would be super hard since its fanfiction, and publishing any successful book is), might want to make the chapters a lil longer, ya know? Maybe make them short than combine them in the end?

My review style is constructive criticism/humor/positivity so I had to keep this short and no possibility to offend anyone considering you put only nice reviews allowed.

XoXo

Claire

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Yeah, it would be hard. My plan is to mush some of the chapters together if I do end up publishing it. Constructive criticism is fine, we all need it! No offense taken at all. Glad you liked it, and you are SO not stupid for wanting to keep a Chocolate Frog. I would want one too. (Note to self: add more scenes with Ethyl in them!) Cya!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

Heyyo, saw your review on my story asking for me check this out. So here I am. :) I enjoyed this. I think Alexis keeping the frog is adorable. Keep it up.

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Yay thanks! Glad you like it!   -Your Girl Fiona xoxo

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