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Great chapter as well. I can't wait to find out what happens next? What are they all going to do? How will the others react? Is he going to meet their kids? Teddy?

Author Response

Feel free to write some of your ideas in a review, because I don't have the rest of the story planned out, so I will almost certainly use some of your ideas. :)

-Kate

This is a brilliant start to the story! I love it! You've written Sirius' character really well and his reaction to finding himself alive is incredibly realistic :) I had tears in my eyes at the ending! 

If I honestly had to criticise anything, it would be the paragraphing. It's a tiny bit bunched up. 

Possibly try double line spacing? It's what helps me. 

I had trouble with the format on this site for a bit, before I realised that pressing 'Enter' twice for each paragraph made things look much clearer. XD 

Please update this soon. Maybe you could have a scene where Hermione and Harry react to Sirius'... un-deadness, I guess? I don't know what to call it XD ... And explain to him how things have been since he died. 

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Oh, no, as I was typing this, I realised that all of Sirius' friends are dead... :(   Wow, that's a pretty sad thought. 

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Thanks for posting this story - it's amazing and I can't wait to read more. 

Thank you for all your support on my own story, by the way. It made my day... or maybe even my week!

Author Response

Aww, I love posting reviews, so no problem!

Thanks for the tip about the spacing, will do. Thanks again for the ideas!

-Kate

This is a very good start, and I think you very well portrayed the Auror's. I still see some of Sirius's sarcastic personality, and some deep caring for Harry. I'm not sure Harry would have enveloped Sirius if he had come back from the dead... Harry was hurt a lot because of Sirius's death, and e tends to push people away, so I think first he wouldn't have believed it, and as an Auror it would be the correct procedure. Then when he would realize it's actually Sirius, he would think that Sirius left him or something until someone like Ginny would knock some sense into him. That's how I would imagine his reaction. Maybe he could hug him, then when he gets over the initial shock his 'sense' kicks in?

Stay safe and healthy!

Author Response

Thank you again for the feedback! You really know the characters well :)

-Kate

:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D I. LOVE. THIS. STORY. SO. MUCH. It's really well written and I can't wait to read more. Pleassse update soon.

Author Response

Oh wow! I literally wrote all of this chapter super quick in one day, so I'm surprised you liked it! I don't have a written plot line, so it might take a while for me to post the next chapter, but I'm really glad you like it! :)

-Kate

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