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Hai!

I really like your story, and I can't wait for the next chapter! 

My favorite part is where you wrote, ""Valentine's Day and whatnot," Alice repeated. "That's how you ask me out for our Valentine's Day date?"  "What did you want me to do, bring in a church choir?"" It's hilarious! 

xoxo Penny <3

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Ahaha thanks!

YAAAS THEY FINALLY DID IT

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I KNOW RIGHT

You must be REALLY insecure if you think bad reviews can only be jelousy xD

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you got me

Hello, messenger of love/home baked pie,

I am very obsessed with your story! I read this story here, and I read stories on fanfiction dot net too, and found yours, and I observed the details of both, and the one on fanfiction dot net has 30 pages and this one has 22. Why don't you add the other 8 pages here? It is so exciting and sad! 

I do know that you are going to 'iron out typos' though. So no rush! Well actually there is a rush, but not for you, I'M the one in the rush. A rush to find out whatever is next in your story, because I am proud to announce I am a total Jily fan! I'll keep tabs on this! ;)

Keep it up,

Tourmaline

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Hi Tourmaline! I'll be catching up those excess chapters soon, but yeah, first I want to make sure there are no typos transferring over haha. I'm glad you like the story! Knowing you're waiting is genuinely making me want to work faster!

Wow, what was the ‘rare silky white concoction’ though? Amazing.

Tourmaline

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A special poison known best for it's mouth-watering scent and rather sweet taste. Of course, all those who can attest to its sweet taste have since died, but before they dropped dead they all made sure to smack their lips once and say, "Mmm."

This would've been so much more fun if Marlene had an actual personality and wasn't just a prop in Lily's story ...

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boom, roasted

Just a question are you messenger of home baked pie ???

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I am indeed! Safe to assume you found this story on fanfiction dot net too? Glad to see you ahaha!

I am in LOVE with this story!! I'm also in awe of your passion and dedication! As a fellow fic writer, you inspire me! I'm always so excited when I see you've updated! I check almost every day!

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Thanks so much!!

The people that give bad reviews on these chapters are just jealous they dont have great imagination like the author does

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Aw thanks! That's what I like to think too haha

OOOooh, I need more of this! I WILL DIE IF YOU STOP WRITING THIS

THIS IS AMAZINGG!!

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Oh wow, thanks! There's plenty more to come!

YOU DESERVE A NOBEL PEACE PRIZE

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HA thanks so much!!

this is one of the few stories i keep open in a tab and refresh daily, and it never disappoints

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Oh my God! You're making me want to upload faster for you now haha

I'm sorry but this one wasn't good at all. Dumbledore comes out as plain stupid in this chapter. Ther are going to vote for the Minister position and still he doesn't remember the rules? Seriously? 
And for another thing, how come no one knows that this Fawles (or whatevet) guy is the traitor? It is silo obvious him being the only one who entered Minister's office before she did.

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I hope it's not a spoiler for me to tell you your theory is wrong, but seeing as your criticism is based off your theory... I don't know what to tell you lol. Thanks... I guess?? Ahaha

Me again... I really like this story, otherwise I wouldn't read it but I just can't help myslef. I'm getting the impression that the author is man. First of all, the "punching on the face" being like the dfinition of manhood... And the other thing, the complete lack of personality for female characters. Maybe Lily hac a HINT of personality but the test not so much.

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If you never wanted to punch everyone in sight at any point as a teenager, you must have been blessed ahaha. I'll give the girls more people to punch, in the name of equality

First of all, I really like your fanfic, you're a good writer. But being a writer myself I like to give constructive criticism to others sometimes, I hope it doesn't bother you.
One- the fight scenes are too long. It's a lot of "He jumped, he jinxed, he jumped he jinxed" and over and over... Few times I had to skip over it. It's better to keep ot short and intense.
Two- that is morw of a HP fan complaint- that "Merlin" thing is really annoying. Merlin was a famous wizard, not GOD. And sure, they used his name sometimes but not on this way.

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I feel like wizard fights in general involve a whole lot of jumping and jinxing haha, but I appreciate the feedback. Also I'm pretty sure Remus just said the word "Merlin," in place of like... "woah," or something, I don't know lol. I do agree with you tho

I liked this one. I was afraid you were to make Lily and James relationship all sweet and candy and I' m glad you didn't. It was very teenagers-like even though with a lot of artistic license.

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Thanks, I try to make them talk as moody and awkward like as I found teenager-hood lol

You're doing that thing where all the good guys are handsome and all the bad ones ugly. It's not professional and certainly not realistic.

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hugs and kisses haha

This is so good. The best fan fiction I have read by far!!

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Wow! Thank you so much that really means a lot!

How often do you release these chapters cuz i need them every 30 minutes🕠

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Haha I love to hear that! In theory I could upload weekly, as I do have a backlog of them saved up now...  but I might be evil and spread them out.. Nahh I'll probably upload them weekly ahaha

So good i love the romance in the story this should be published as a companion book the the 7 books😍

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Thjs is one of my favorite reviews ever, that means so much to hear!!

Is there any more of this, I am so ready to find out who Blithe is.

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Either tonight or tomorrow night, on my own honor be it

omg when's the next?? PLZZZ!!!

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A couple days away ahaha

Well that took a while XD!!

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There's a long way to go still hahaha

OH MAH GAWWDD!!*Gets on to knees and starts applauding you*

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Ahahaha, thanks!

yet again, AMAZING!! But I have a quick question, didn't James play Seeker?? Because I always thought he did as he was always seen with a snitch and he drew the letters "L.E" on a snitch too..
Nevertheless this story is amazing

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Common misconception, in the movies he played Seeker. In the books he played Chaser, and would play around with a Snitch only because it looked impressive. Perhaps he dabbled in both positions, but only his Chaser position is canon.

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