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More please! Its so good

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Hey love this story so much please write more. I must know what happens next.

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This is actually my favorite Sirius/oc fanfic! Please continue! I can’t wait to see how their storylines develop and I applaud you on your use of the names Yaxley and Lestrange and the subtle mentions of the canon character! This is a great fanfic and I am so excited to see it develop!

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I'm back!! This was such a good chapter. I like how you showed us a bit of the traditional Marauder OC storyline, with mischief and parties and flirting, but brought it back to reality with the ending. It's a perfect way to describe how those times must have felt, being a kid and wanting a normal life while all the horrors of the first war are starting around you. 

Emme and Lily accepting Pyra was great. I also loved the touch about how the Marauders made up a stupid nickname when they were younger and now it's something they're teased for as Seventh Years. I'd never really thought about it but that's probably exactly what would have happened! Cassie and Sophie's relationship is really complex and interesting as well. I can't wait to read more! This is the first fic I've read in a long time that's made me want to read on. I'm hooked!

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Your fight scene was so well done!  I like that this fic is a little AU, with Mary Macdonald's death and James being Crucio'd by Regulus.  It's so much more interesting than just reading a retelling of what we already know happened.  I'm loving this so far.  Great work, as always!

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All of the minor characters in this story are so good. I loved the scene with Pyra (amazing name, btw) and Eddie.  It's a really great way to subtly point out that Cassie was probably totally expected to be in Slytherin, but wasn't--again, here's something you really could have turned into a trope and totally didn't.  Her strong friendship with them, and the characters' likability, is heartwarming and sets up Cassie to have to make some difficult choices later on.  

I also loved the scene with James and how he essentially set Cassie up with the Magpies recruiter to make Lily happy.  The only thing that felt a bit jarring was that we weren't aware of how talented she was until that moment.  Maybe I missed it, and you definitely mention her with a broom in the past, but I felt like I didn't even realize she was a Quidditch prodigy until this chapter and would have liked to see a little build up to it.  Also--entirely possible that I just missed something earlier on, haha!

Either way, it's great to see her with a bit of hope for her future.  Everything else is looking so bleak for her.  Another lovely job, can't wait to read more!

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"Everything is easy, Yaxley."  

Is this not the most Sirius Black line to have ever been Sirius Black'd?  Perfect.  I like that you're showing us his bullying side.  It's often ignored in Sirius/OC fics where people tend to portray him as a fun troublemaker--but the dude was kind of terrible.  The snake trick, and the comment he made about her being in with Lord Snakey, was so cruel as well.  

I'm curious why he decided to follow her out.  It almost seemed like he was going to apologize, but was too proud?  I enjoyed the dueling scene as well.  There was an opportunity to go the sexual tension fighting trope and you didn't take it.  Love that you're turning so many things on their heads with this fic.  Another job well done!

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Hey hey! I've been meaning to read this story for a long, long time and am so glad I finally did.  Cassie at first comes across as a headstrong, collected heroine, but especially in this chapter we see how much more three-dimensional she is.  

I love the way you've set up her relationship with Sirius.  There is absolutely a reason for there to be tension, with their roles and the current war, and Cassie seems almost frightened of him.  I thought the way that she stepped aside to let him pass on the train was very telling.  It's a refreshing take on the enemies-to-lovers (maybe?) story and I really enjoy their dynamic.  

The kestrels were also interesting.  I loved the descriptions of them all watching her--how creepy!  It definitely has me wondering what happened so that she can see them.

You've also done an excellent job at sprinkling in minor characters without bogging down the story.  I'm particularly interested in Eddie--loved that scene--and her uncle, I believe it was, from the first chapter.  The way she bolted when she saw him was very interesting. 

Anyway, excellent job!  So glad I finally took the time to read this.  I'm going to binge the rest of it now :)  Best of luck writing!

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I love love love this story! Cassie is such a great and interesting OC, she’s so well developed and I love the whole premise- particularly like how we’re starting to delve into her slightly darker past. Big twist with the ‘beaten blonde girl’ she was woken up to see in the summer as well- and can’t wait to see where things go moving forward! I’m assuming it will eventually develop into a romance with sirius, but wow I love how slow burn it is and how incredibly subtly their relationship is developing. Most fic writers attempt the whole ‘two characters hate each other’ thing but they’re together by chapter three, I love how natural this is and focuses on the friendship first. Please keep writing!

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Hi hun! Thank you so much that’s so kind! Haha yeah I was so aware of not falling into the trap of enemies to lovers over night, that had to take like at least 50k words to achieve ;) 

Thanks for reading and the lovely review, chapters are usually up on another fanfiction site a lot sooner but I’ll try be a bit quicker with updates here! 

Deni x

Love this story! I really really like Cass — she is smart, quick, witty & she is also sensitive enough without being too much. And this Sirius is exactly how i picture him!

I am so excited to see how their relationship will develop. I am really into the fact that they come from pretty much the same backgrounds & they can totally get each other more than anyone else.

Also, Slytherin love!! Yey!! I like the fact that a Zabini is not necessarily a bad girl just bc she is Slytherin. I enjoy seeing the characters with their layers.

Please keep writing! I am really thankful for this story & really intrigued to read the rest. Much love xxx

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Ahh! Thank you!! Yes I love layered characters too, that was always a massive influence on this story and the plot though it. 

Thank you so much for the review! Updates hopefully coming sooner now! 

Deni xx

Wow!! I'm looking forward to the next update! 
You're story is wonderfully written and I can't get enough of it! Please update soon!!!

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Oh wow thank you so much! I’ve been a bit slow at updating on this site but more chapters coming soon. Thank you for the review! 

D x

Love this story so much!

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Oh my gosh that’s very kind!  Thank you for reading and the review. 

D x

This is the best! I can’t wait to read what happens next!

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Thank you so much! Updates coming a bit faster now hopefully 

D x

The thestral patronus is so interesting! I’m really enjoying this.

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Hello! Thank you so much for the review!
I'm really glad you're enjoying it. 
If you read on please let me know what you think! 
S x

Oh my word! I am sure this is old news to you already but CONGRATULATIONS! Wow! This is so wonderful! Featured Story and TA status! I am so happy for you! Your story is incredible, your description and consistency amazing and quite frankly, you have some of the best characters I have met so far! 
Your description here is fantastic. The story carries so naturally, like water, there is always such an excellent ebb and flow. 
There are so many elements developing, I am so curious about what happens. 
Once again, congratulations. You deserve it and without being too much of a fangirl and in an attempt to stop squealing in excitement, I’m just going to say keep it up and I love it and I love you! 

xxx

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Ahhh! Thank you so much!
I'm blushing so much right now, you are so so kind! Especially coming from a writer like you it's such an unbelievably huge complement. 
Never stop fangirling... If you do then I'll have to stop too and that will just get boring!
Thank you so much again! And it's always nice to hear, even if it was a wee while ago.
As always I'm looking forward to your thoughts. 
S xxx

What a lovely and throughly mischievous day! I love the boys. And the fight scene- hell yeah! Go Cassie! Eddie is such a jealous creep!  Things are really starting to hot up now, the tension palpable. I can’t wait to see how it develops. I’m actually just so excited by your story, it’s amazing and you’re an amazing writer and I’m gushing now so I’m going to stop :P 

xxx

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Ahaha I love it so much! You are so good for my confidence and awful for my writing ego! 
Things are definitely heating up but there's still a little time for a prank or two. The boys are wee devilish-angels. 
I love your thoughts on these chapters. I can't wait to hear what you think of the next one!
All my love 
S (aka Deni) 
Xx

What a chapter. I haven’t had a chance to read in so long and it was great to get back into the story. 
I totally love/hate Sirius. I don’t actually even know what to do with these feelings :P 
Your description is absolutely fantastic. I find myself almost there with them (I mean, of course I want to be there but for a moment or two, I really am) 
As always, keep up the excellent work and I hope you’re well! 
All my love! 
xxx

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Ahhh this is incredible! Thank you so much!
Sirius is totally one way then the other. I've definitely got a soft spot for him but at the same time damn he can be annoying!
All my love!
S xxx

Congratulations on the Featured story! Very much deserved! So bravo! Trusted Author too! I can't say I'm surprised as this story is just brilliant!

Two pronged chapter here! I loved Pyra's introduction to the girls. It's great to see the Slytherin and the girls mix and show it's not all animosity between the groups.

Again, girls being girls. A good bottle of fire whiskey and Lily being a bit of a rebel. I love the idea Lily having a bit of a dark side. 

But in contrast, the underlying dread that Cassie doesn't have much time before she'll be forced to choose, and that she'll have to grab every opportunity to enjoy herself before this time comes. And then the knowledge of Mary, everything that she knew, now coming out in the open and Sophie's reaction.

It's a very complex chapter and I love how you weave it all together! Brilliant stuff.

:D xx

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Thank you so much! Gosh, I don't know where to start here. 
The girls were always going to meet Pyra. She's too nice and they just always would have gotten on.
I know that Lily's always shown to be sensible but at the end of the day... She married James Potter. There must have been a bit of a dark side there! 
Cassie is certainly aware that shes running out of time. Everything will catch up to her eventually... and that's all I can say about that at the moment! ;)
Emmy, your reviews are always so encouraging! 
I hope you enjoy the next chapter. 
xxx

Love the birthday card!! Haha. And loving that you're building the relationship with the girls.

Look forward to more Sirius and Cass scenes. Can't wait to see what happens with them.

Good chapter, once again. Look forward to the next one. Keep up the great work 

Xx

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I couldn't help myself with the birthday card!
The next chapter should be up soonish and this time I do promise more Cassie ans Sirius scenes. 
Thank you so much for reviewing. I'm so glad you're enjoying it!
S xx

I adore this chapter because it's them being kids again. Enjoying life! Getting into fights, causing mischief, giggling and gossip. After everything that's going off.. life still goes on and you show this brilliantly without losingany of those underlying feelings or emotions! 

Great stuff! 

Em xx

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YES!!! 
I'm so glad you liked it! This exactly what I was going for. A lighter (somewhat plot advancing...) chapter with teenagers being teenagers.
Fancying a boy, gossiping and arguing don't just stop dead.
As always, thank you for reviewing!
S xx

Great chapter!!

I don't think any good is going to come from Cassie's friendship with Eddie. Especially if they both seem to be on slightly different pages. Look forward to seeing where it goes nonetheless. 

Liked the small amount of Sirius in this chapter, and can't wait to see more scenes between him and Cassie. I really can't wait to see how you develop their relationship.

xx

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That friendship is a difficult one. It might have started off well but they've grown up to be very different. We'll see! 
Thank you do much for reviewing again! They are really the best inspiration when writing.
The next chapter will be up shortly and there will be LOTS of Cassie and Sirius. 
S Xxx

Bludgering hell. What a chapter to dissect. 

Cassie really has her hands physically and emotionally full!

What impact will there be of her denying Eddie's advances so defiantly?! 

A true Gryffindor that Cass! Little connections, however weak/feeble with Sirius too. 

Brill foreshadow of Remua too!

Awesome stuff!

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Tell me about it! Writing became a game of "Is that TOO mean?"
She's definitely carrying all of the burden herself, maybe that will change quite soon... We'll see! 
Cassie's really the definition of a Gryffindor. Even if she doesn't shout about it. No arguing with the hat on that one. 
As always, thank you so much! 
Xxx

Oh my word! There is so much going on here. Things are really beginning to heat up! Great fight scene and a little bit of mysterious history! Your writing really is so juicy and multifaceted. On top of it, your characterisation really carries the story. 
Of course you know, but it's nice to hear it again! I love it! I may just have to reread everything tonight ;) 

xxx

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Gaaahh! Thank you so much. You are right, it's always nice to hear it again.
(I've started dancing around my kitchen when I read it)
Fight scenes give me the fear to write so I'm glad you enjoyed it. There's hope for the next one...
You're reviews are always a highlight. 
I hope you enjoy the reread and there is a strong possibility that I just finished submiting the next chapter to the  queue... ;)
Xxx

I just stumbled on this and am in love! Cassie seems like a great character, from her friendships in both Gryffindor and Slytherin to the pieces of backstory you've weaved in so far. I'm hooked! Keep up the great work!

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She's definitely not the most straightforward of characters, I'm glad you like her so far! 
Thank you so much for the review. It means a lot to get all the feedback!
The next chapter won't be long, I hope you enjoy it.
S x

Just found this little gem and loving it already. 

Really liking Cassie as a character and how you've developed her so far and am really looking forward to what's going to happen next :) 

xxx

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Thank you so much! 
I'm so glad you've enjoyed it so far and thank you for the review. They really keep me going. 
The next chapter won't be long now, I'm just editing wee bits. 
S xxx

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