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Hi - I'm here from ff.net review swap

It's so great to get a Slytherin's point of view on this matter. This is so much missing from the original books, although we do see some 'good' Slytherins, not many.

The story was a good read, interesting all the way along. Also I liked how the dark thoughts on petrified students were mixed with everyday problems like a Potions essay.

The idea that there is a student who thinks is friend with Tom Riddle and that she starts worrying and then relizes... so "this" is a very interesting concept. I was first going to say that for me it did not sound very real, but I'm reconsidering now. After all Tom was a boy most people liked, why could he not have people thinking are friends with him. The one thing I'm not sure, is why he only took the memories of Olive. He had no problem killing people, and for sure he had no friends, he had most probably no feelings for her. And obliviating is not the safest option, as one can still have accessible memories. Or was he so arrogant not to think that anyone will get the idea to question this girl precisely?

Anyway I'm glad I found this story :)

Author Response

Hello! I'm so glad you found this story interesting- background stories always intrigue me :)

Hmm...Tom could definitely have killed Olive, but that may have been a bit extreme. I suppose Obliviating just have seemed like a safer option, and I admit that I don't know anything about memories being accessible. But we all know Tom was extremely arrogant so he may have just assumed everyone would be too stupid to question Olive ;)

Anyway, thank you so much for the swap- hopefully it won't be out last! :D

Hello!  I saw that this was nominated for best one-shot in the Nargles so I just had to check it out.
 
Kudos for tackling such an underdeveloped part of Hogwarts's history.  The professors, Olive, Myrtle, Tom, and Hagrid are all we really know about from this time period so there is so much room.  There's a lot of potential, but it is intimidating.  I've been reading Harry Potter fics for a long time, at least a decade, and I only remember reading one other story that featured Olive Hornby.
 
It was deliciously dark and you kept the mysterious tone up well, which is hard to do when we obviously have known the whole time who the Heir of Slytherin was.  You showed enough development that Olive's progression from confused to maybe believing her friend to finding out that it was Tom Riddle all fit.  It also didn't seem like it was 4300 words, which is no easy feat.
 
It's a bit random, but I want to compliment your naming.  Olive's collection of names was great - Horton because I'm a Canadian so Tim Horton's and Horny because OMG what a terrible surname lol.  (I actually accidentally typed that instead of Hornby earlier though, so it definitely is a possible mistake or Slughorn!)  You also pulled some other canon stuff in, like the Greengrass surname, and used names that I could see as first names for the era like Millie.  Those are often overlooked so good job!
 
One thing - how was Tom apparating inside Hogwarts?  And how likely would Olive be to know about Horcruxes?
 
Having a) a Slytherin protagonist who is not "bad" and b) a Slytherin attacked were much appreciated.  Your comment about there not being many Slytherin muggleborns is probably right, but there surely were at least some of them.  And Olive having a Muggle mother also fits with what we know of canon - there aren't that many pureblood families after all.
 
And I know you said Myrtle is supposed to be 14 but I honestly would never have remembered that so whatever.
 
Good luck with the Nargles! :)

Author Response

No, there don't seem to be many Olive fics around, do they? So I started asking the question of "how would she feel knowing she had caused the death of a fellow student?" Which led to this story :)

Lol, thanks for the compliment on the naming; some ideas were taken from real life. I know a friend who's surname was Horton and who also happens to be called Olive...it seemed too good an opportunity to pass. Like you said, I tried hard to stick to canon: Greengrass is an obvious option and Fawley was one of the Sacred Twenty Eight (I had to look that up...)

Tom Apparating inside Hogwarts was one thing I forgot. And Olive's knowledge of Horcruxes. Hehe. But thanks for pointing it out, I'll a have to edit it later :)

Anyway...thank you so much for this kind review! Much appreciated :D

Hey it's me :) 

I thought that this was a really amazingly original idea. Since it's Olive's POV, and no one's really done that as much, you really rose to the challenge and delt with it well.

I liked how you characterised everyone- especially Slughorn, to be honest. Olive and Tom were really believable! I think that since you took the Potter books into consideration too, there isn't any clashing- you could believe that it really is cannon :)

Glad to see you used my title idea XD

Author Response

Lol hi :)

To be honest one of the main reasons I wrote this was because there didn't seem to be many Olive Hornby stories. I'm glad that the story was believable and yes, I used your title idea :D

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