It's only the first chapter but I'm already really interested. Philippa is a character very different from me but at the same time I love how direct and slightly sarcastic she is. And I really can't wait to find out about what happened with her in the past that she keeps referring to. It must have been bad since she is risking expulsion.
Roxanne seems like the opposite of Philippa right now. While Philippa seems kind of careless and kind of lost, Roxanne still had her head in the game. I can't wait to see more interactions between them. It would be great to see more of how their friendship is.
And Hugo is in this story! It's kind of odd that he always had a notebook and quill with him but I'm sure he has his reasons. Is it his journal or does he just love writing? And he has to go to the Headmaster's office too... I wonder what he did to warrant a visit there. Is it the same incident as Philippa or something different?
Anyway, I think this is a lovely start to a story! I'm already very intrigued on how things are going to pan out. And Philippa seems like a different but still tough heroine!
This is some really nice writing. Your MC is perfectly self-deprecating with humor, and you've given us just enough information into the story to keep us informed, but so little that I certainly want to know more. The relationship between Roxanne and Philippa, in particular, is intriguing. And I'm excited to see what Hugo and Philippa have gotten themselves into. Very nicely done! I hope you decide to continue :)
Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks for reading! Philippa is very self-deprecating. She feels inadequate and lost - kind of just drifting along on the waves of life and struggling to accept herself. I'm very pleased you found her engaging. I'm also pleased it's kept you interested enough to continue! There's multiple secrets in the plot, and while it perhaps isn't completely indeterminable what happened, things will of course become clearer as this progresses. Her relationship with Roxanne will definitely be covered, and as for Philippa and Hugo - well, they've gotten themselves into a situation. Whether it's good or bad is up to them.
i read this before, and i just wanted to pop in to say that i absolutely love this! philippa's internal monologue is just so good, if you can get what i'm saying. i know this is super super short but i just wanted to tell you how good i think this story is! i'm adding this to my reading list and can't wait for the next chapter ♥︎
Author's Response: Ah! I'm so, so glad you like Philippa's voice! That was something I was kind of struggling with when writing; because she's so critical of others and herself, I hoped she wouldn't be taken as annoying. But then I realized that I should just portray her as she appears to me, and that allowed to stop thinking about how she would be perceived by others. Still, I'm really stoked by this positive reception. There's a lot coming up in the story as I wrestle everything I want to include into words. Again, thanks so much for stopping by!
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