This was an interesting start to what I'm sure will be a great story!

(Fair warning, I tend to jump around in the story a bit whilst reviewing!)

Before I get started with the sweets and cookies, I'd just like to point out that to be a 'hatstall' you have to be up there at least five minutes. But Rose could've been a near hatstall.

Okay, now the goodies!

I loved how Scorpius paid for Rose, I can see either a friendship or hateship forming. You set that up real nice.

Next, I loved Rose's letter to her parents, it was so sweet and kind.

Also, I love how Rose likes muggle books (a good thing!) and how she made friends with some other first years, and how you explained their personalities quickly.

I like how Scorpius is resilient and intelligent in his response on the train, about how he isn't like his father. And I also liked how you described his sorting a bit too!

Anyway, I think that's about it. I wish you luck with the rest, and will definitely keep reading!

Yours sincerely, ImaRavenclaw

Author's Response: Hi ImaRavenclaw! Thank you so much for reviewing! You have truly made my day! Thank you for the Hatstall tip, i like it when true potterheads read my stories! You are the reason i keep writing. I Love you SO much! - RedXx
Well, let's see where you will take us on this adventure.

Author's Response: I hope you enjoy being on this journey as much as I do!

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