2016-02-28 05:24:06
OK, I am not at all familiar with Criminal Minds, but as a lover of mysteries, I'll give this a go and just hope I'm not missing too much.

LOVE the way you begin the story. It gives us an insight into Lucy's character, gives us the background of the organisation she's involved in and makes us wonder why she joined and all without sounding contrived, which stories with a lot of background to them can.

I really like the part about Emily pulling more strings than any politician or diplomat. Gives us a bit of insight into who SHE is too. You're really good at getting information across naturally and succinctly.

*grins at the computers* One of the characters in my next gen series has a father who's a policeman and he and Harry were discussing methods of law enforcement.

I like the part about the standard issue wands. I can see a lot of witches and wizards finding that quite difficult as they are used to their own wands and Ollivander did say you'd never get as good a result with a wand that hadn't chosen you, but you can see why the organisation would want to ensure wands were standardised.

These wands sound a little like guns. I mean wands DO sort of perform that function anyway, but the fact that these are specifically TO be used in law enforcement make them seem more specifically for those kind of tasks.

Slightly random comment, but comparing stories to Irish history seems to be my thing: in World War II, some members of the Irish army deserted to join the British army and go to fight in the war. Deserting TO fight in a war sounds kind of odd, doesn't it? Anyway, they were essentially blacklisted for government jobs afterwards, which a lot of people consider to have been quite harsh. The warning Lucy got just reminded me of that.

Profiling sounds like a pretty interesting job actually.

And hmm, I really wonder why Lucy was recruited. I've a feeling there's more to this than is immediately apparent.

*grins at her looking at pictures of kittens*

Lucy's workmates seem helpful and supportive anyway.
2016-02-28 05:24:06
Hello there!

I hope you're enjoying your Chocolate Frog and my presence. I'm afraid I can't stick around long though, I'm expecting a visit from some debt collectors - mates. I mean mates. Good, chummy mates, with whom I happen to enjoy discussing the subtleties of debt collection with.

SO. You've got a story here, eh? And it's about a Muggle television show no less! There's been a time or two when I found it convenient to lie low in Mugggle motel rooms, and the entret]prising spirit of Muggle television never ceased to amuse me. I haven't spent any time with this Emily Prentiss character, but next time I have the opportunity I'll have to check her show out!

From what you've shown here, I can see that Miss. Prentiss is incredibly intelligent, and has an eye both for catching criminals and catching potential.

Huh, that's quite an interesting concept that this department uses standard issue wands. to my knowledge Aurors don't observe this practice - I wonder what the differences are, and what these special spells are that need standard issue wands.

Oh wow, I expect there's a story behind that last line! And the decapitation! This is sure piquing my interest in this show and characters!

This was such an engaging chapter, it makes me really want to read the rest of the story - I hope you are able to continue with it soon!

Good luck in this challenge of yours! If I were a betting man, my money'd be on you.

Ludo Bagman.
2016-02-28 05:24:06
This is glorious. I love how you write Garcia.
I have been wanting to read/write a Criminal Minds/HP crossover and then you did and I'm just so happy right now oh my goodness.
I can't wait to read more.
2016-02-28 05:24:06
I'm loving this so far. I've just found Criminal Minds and spent January binge watching it too. However I have to admit I'm no where near as fast as you as I'm currently nearing the end of season 4, but loving every minute. So I'm very happy to have found this story. Especially as Lucy is one of my favourite next gen characters. So I'm really looking forward to see where you go with it, and meeting the rest of the team. I can't wait to read your version of them as your Penelope seemed spot on. Loving it!
I was so skeptical at first. Crossovers are hardly ever done well. I have to say that this is the first crossover I've liked so far. First of all, you completely captured the essence of the majestic Penelope Garcia. I'm so thrilled because I came in more defensive of my favorite show than I realized. I cannot wait for some Derek Morgan or Reid. Or any of them really. I love the concept of a special issued wand. That makes completely sense to me after you explained it. Please update soon!


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