2015-09-15 12:56:02
Okay, I loved the opening! It's unique and sort of anti-heroine, but it descalates through the chapter. The correspondence between Ivy and James seemed slightly forced, and of course Mcgonagall is spelt wrong. Not to mention, I don't think She would force Harry to call her Minnie when that was just a stupid nickname James and Sirius gave her 50 years before. Anyways, I'm going to keep reading and hope these problems sort themselves out.

Author's Response: Critique noted. Thanks!
2017-04-27 10:48:09
I shall add this story to my watch list. Really great so far. I'm loving the way you're building the story and am enjoying the humorous tone immensely:) Definitely a fun read. Hope you and yours are well. I look forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! More coming!
2015-10-18 08:31:57
I want more!!! This is absolutely amazing.

Author's Response: More coming! Thanks for the support!
2015-10-18 08:31:57
I really like this story!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much!
2015-09-15 12:56:02
First of all, I'm horrendously sorry for my english skills, as you may be guessing it is not my 1st language.
ok, about the story now:
This is effin.g perfect. Seriously, you've made my day(night would be more accurate, I think) with your story! Ivy is sooo badas.s, but I guess George Thorogood says it all. That, and she's pretty much like a reflection of me, except for the naked strolls through magical villages, green eyes and having a James Potter-like boy attracted to her. Can you feel the jealousy? It's the size of Jupiter. Moreover she is not a dramaqueen and potions is her best clas.s, like, dude - if I was lesbian I would definitely be into you. I know, the reasoning behind that might be hard to understand but who cares? Potions is for awesome toast-soul sucking people, so I'm signing up for the club. Meetings on Tuesdays? Sound good.
Do you want to hear all of the fangirling over your writing style? no? ok, so to keep it short and simple: you rule. It could be said that your writing is compact, so free of dwelling over the whiteness of the snowflakes but also imagination stymulating. My favorite and the one I tend to use. Also, the manner in which you have started the story is lovely. Attention drawing thoughts of the main character.
To sum it up a mix of your writing and Ivy North is my soulmate, so if that's how you are then I hope you've got a cat, as they keep it cool in lifestyle and warm in the winter. Ha ha, funny me.
Hope you'll write more soon!

Author's Response: I love you immensely.
2015-09-21 09:24:03
Completely and utterly in love with this story. Hope you update soon!

Author's Response: Your wish is my command. Thanks for the sweet review!


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