This story definitely has a really unique concept! It's quite cool how you've based it around a real world happening, and especially cool that it's not a super well-known event. It's a truly novel idea and I've definitely never read anything like it!
I really enjoyed the idea that Hogwarts castle (and by extension, all magic) is not invincible to the natural forces. I think it's a very realistic take on it that nature would have power beyond magic, or maybe it's own form of strong magic.
As for Arthur Weasley, I quite like how you've characterized him as very paternal and caring, even when he was young. I love how much he cares about the other students and how he considers them to be family. It's quite sweet of him and I can definitely see Arthur Weasley behaving this way.
The other characters were also quite delightful. The way they spoke seemed like they were all quite young though (at least the Gryffindor students). And it seemed strange to me that Arthur would refer to them as kids. In my head, they were all 11 and 12-years-old, and I would certainly consider them kids, I don't think Arthur would refer to them as such. I think he'd call them students, or Gryffindors if he was just addressing them.
Anyway, I thought this was a lovely story still showing a really creative idea. I especially love the song in the end and the idea that they could all still be happy and joyful on this strange Christmas. I do wonder how the people in Hogsmeade fared though. I do hope they're all alright!
Thanks for sharing this piece!
Author's Response: Hi, Stefi!
I'm glad that you thought that the focus on the hurricane was cool. I wrote the story to a prompt about some kind of disaster disrupting a Christmas celebration, so I was looking for a disaster so profound that a mere wave of the wand could not repair it. And it does seem reasonable that a mere human skill, such as magical spells, could not stand up to the forces of nature. (This same principle also underlies my story "Dark Enough To See The Stars," which even references this story slightly, so maybe you would enjoy it also.)
Of the ten students, other than Arthur, who remained at Hogwarts during this Christmas, most of them were young, as you detected: Rupert was third-year, Sophie and Evan younger; the Ravenclaw girls were first and second year; two of the four Puffs were also in that range. Only the Slytherin Edward and the Puffs Liam and Eleanor were fourth year or above, and they had virtually no speaking roles.
Interesting that you do not think that Arthur would have referred to them as kids. Perhaps, as you suggest, he would have referred to them as students, or by their Houses, but he probably did think of them as kids. High school seniors (age 17) often remark that the freshmen (age 14) seem so young and immature, and the majority of the students in this story were younger than that. Perhaps Arthur focused more on the younger students and allowed the older three more leeway to take care of themselves.
I'm glad you liked the song at the end. It's not really a plotty story, just an account of an unusual experience, but it was fun to write something different.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
I come with flame and sword to render judgement upon the houses of Hogwarts.
And Lo there shall come ten plagues visited upon the stories of HPFF; behold the seventh plague a most grievous storm of thunder and hail, such as hath not been in the land since the foundation thereof even until now.
… I didn’t have to stretch the definition of the plague much this time to include a story's title/theme, there is no hail, but...
The eye of judgement has fallen upon:
The Hogwarts Storm
The plague did not know what to expect when going into this tale. Confronted with Arthur Weasley as a Head Boy was something new. I cannot say I have seen it before, but that is to say it was not unwelcome. I am a believer that Arthur Weasley has more than just hidden talents and is not the figure of slight ridicule that he becomes in the books. He has a depth of ability which is not oft seen by his children, and therefore Harry, but must be there for the obvious respect his colleagues hold him in. This story serves as a potent reminder of his basic and intrinsic worth.
It is good that you exile Molly from the castle at the time of the storm, her presence would have been an unwelcome distraction from what you needed to achieve. It is the storm that rages outside, you do not need to add to it with raging hormones inside.
The only thing the voice of the Plague wondered was where in all of this was Tom Riddle? He would have been in Second or Third year when Arthur was in Seventh and he spent every Christmas at the castle, according to the books. It could have added a much needed element of personal drama that would not have gone amiss in the wider scope of the story.
The description of the storm is powerfully written. The storm is very real, as too it’s impact upon the castle and the inhabitants therein. From your comments in your response, I see that you have chosen to include some of the accounts from the time that this actual, original storm was from. This is a good choice and adds an amazing level of verisimilitude.
The characterisation is well done. All the teachers are spot on and only Arthur is not as he appears in the books, but this is fitting because the younger Arthur would be a different person than he becomes decades later.
A fairly straightforward narrative about a calamitous event that allows the main protagonist, one who is not given much glory in most fan-fictions, a chance to shine.
Review done for the Ravenclaw, spread the Easter Cheer challenge.
Author's Response: I am honored, Ten Plagues, that you think my story worthy to be recognized as such a powerful force. I am left wondering, first, whether you are reviewing all the ten plagues in order, or as you find them, and what you are doing about the flies, gnats, and locusts. You have set yourself quite a task! I hope you are having fun.
I too believe that there is a lot more to Arthur Weasley's character than people might give him credit for. Obviously the Order of the Phoenix could see the depth of his abilities. But what we notice first is his avid interest in Muggle technology, which is actually more intelligent than the stiff-backed dismissal of everything Muggle, so typically displayed by the wizarding elite. Were it not for their blind prejudice, he would have had a better job than the one he did, a job that would utilize his talents to the fullest.
JKR has said, in some interview somewhere, that Arthur had two brothers, so I chose to make them younger brothers whom Arthur had had some responsibility for, in the family setting, so that he would repeat that kind of role at Hogwarts. I customarily use the Harry Potter Wiki as my reference source for details likes dates and ages, so that is why I did not include Tom Riddle in this story. I hope that most of what is in the Harry Potter Wiki is accurate.
It's nice to know that you thought that the description of the storm was powerful. Of course the storm itself is powerful, and one would wish to be able to convey that power in the writing.
Thank you for saying that the characterizations of the teachers were spot on. As for Arthur's character, his avid engagement in Muggle technology is something he would have been more involved in during his adulthood, when he had his own house and could fill his shed with Muggle artifacts, but in this story he is speculating about how Muggles predict weather. Weather satellites were just beginning to become useful and common around the time of this storm, so that nowadays we can see hurricanes coming from far off and days away, but I don't think that was true at the time of the Scottish Storm.
Your judgment is congruent with my own opinion. I wrote the story for a Christmas challenge, using the prompt 'Holiday Hell', and it was a puzzle to come up with a type of holiday disaster that the wizards could not rectify with just a wave of a wand (such as dropping the roasted turkey on the floor). So I went with a 'natural disaster' theme, found a hurricane that devastated Scotland near Christmas time, and the date fit with Arthur's last year at school, so Voila! We really should write more about Arthur, don't you think? He's a natural for Head Boy.
Thank you so much for your long and thoughtful review. It brought a smile to my face, especially since this story doesn't get many reviews, but I got a lot of satisfaction from writing it.
P.S. This story is slightly referenced in my story "Dark Enough To See The Stars", also located in these archives.
That's a sweet story. You did a good job keeping the characters...well, in character. I especially like Dumbledore. My favorite line in the story is "Well, we won't have to worry about running out of firewood for a long, long time." :) Always the optimist. I totally read that in his voice. McGonagall also retained her classic dry sarcasm, which I enjoy very much. Nice job writing about a storm -- those are always exciting. :)
Never stop writing!
Author's Response: Hi, fwoopersong8. Yes, this is a slight, lightweight story, but I'm glad you thought it was sweet. This hurricane actually occurred, as I said in the story summary, but it was referred to as the Scottish Storm or the Glasgow Storm in real life because it did its greatest damage in Glasgow, a city of many rickety tenement buildings, supposedly the worst infrastructure of any city in Europe. But of course Hogwarts Castle was strong enough to withstand the storm with non-critical damage. The description of the weather before the storm, and all the descriptions of the events of the storm, such as the windows bulging inward before they shattered, the wind rattling the doors as if an angry mob were pounding on them, and the damage to the trees and landscape afterwards, were taken from eyewitness descriptions of the effects of the storm in Glasgow.
Did you notice that this story was referenced slightly by Scorpius and Rose in the story Dark Enough To See The Stars ?
Thanks for reading and reviewing this story. It doesn't get many reviews. (Not much of a plot, just a description of an event.)