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By the way: I love your stories, for me they are comparable to The Summer ..and winter after the war by Mrs. Granger!

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Thank you!  I think I have fixed it.  I am trying to catch up on HPFF and Wattpad while contusing my story on Fanfiction.  

I have become friends with CPStabell (on Wattpad,)  Mrs_Granger on HPFF.

Jet

Just a polite reeminder about character names and making sure your spelling them right. Charlie Weasley is spelt like this not Charley.

Author Response

I tried to find the misspelling in chapter 35, but Charlie is not mentioned in that chapter. I know it is Charlie, and that I have occasionally misspelled it. I do try to correct misspellings when they are pointed out.  

There are other problems I have found.  I need to capitalize spells and things like Floo,  consistently.  Good beta readers have helped me.

Thank you for the review.

Jet

Hi, 

Just to let you know your leaving your beta's stuff in. It's kind of distracting to read when its constantly changing colours and we can see the work of your beta/editors.

Also what those British/American differences like words such a thru. Maybe get an English dictionary to double check the UK/USA spelling differences. 

To help you out here are some differents. The UK on the right. 

Thru - through
Color - colour
Pants - trousers
Button down top - buttoned shirt

I've also noticed that your still swapping between Harriet Twinkie/Twinky for Hermione's elf. Can you please pick a name and stick with it or maybe go back through and make sure all those changes are done.

Author Response

I have switched to trousers instead of pants, which I understand is an off color (colour) expression in Great Britain.  Cot instead of crib.  I have not changed my dictionary to a British dictionary, although I could.  

I have just posted another chapter on this site. You can only post a chapter a day, but I am going to try and catch up.

Jet

Did I miss something somehow? How did Cleo come to live with the Malfoys? I know she has a major part in the future books, but I couldn't remember how she came to be there and hoped by reading this again I would remember it but I guess I must have skipped it somehow. Where in the series does it explain this?  Loving it still and Ginny finally grew up, for the most part.

Author Response

Cleo comes when she is about five, left there to be Scorpius's bride. Of course that is not going to happen.  

Jet

Is this story posted elsewhere with more content?

Author Response

Fanfiction dot com.  I need to update it on this site, but without reviews there has not been much incentive to do it.

Thank you.

Jet

Domestic violence unit. That's what it is  that's what it should be called. NYPD  calls it that   I was never so happy when my office moved away from Dvu. It was a constant stream of tragedy

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Thank you.

Excellent.   Can't wait for more

Author Response

I have more written.  With reviews  like this I will try to start posting it here.  Reviews really make a difference.

Jet

Excellent. Disturbed by Charlie's injuries. But.   S. Happens. Written well I felt it  and believed it

Author Response

Since HPFF has put me back on line I have received very few reviews.  This and another one have convinced me to keep posting, and to catch up with what is now a story into Albus's second year at Hogwarts.  Thank you!

I read a story on this site where Ginny and Hermione won Witches Weekly's best looking witch twenty years in a row.  I wanted to throw up.  There is a reason why my series is called "Almost Happily Ever After."  Harry and Ginny are generally happy, and I do not portray a dysfunctional Weasley/Potter family.  That does not mean everything is perfect, as you will see as the Albus story continues.

Thank you for reviewing.  

Jet LaBarge

Excellent.   Please keep writing

Author Response

You are welcome.  

Jet

Would you mind telling me what site toy are moving to? As a Christian I love your stories and writing style.

Author Response

I am trying to write a story that is compatable with being a Christian.  If you Google me you should find me.  Just make sure to mention Harry Potter in the subject line.  There are a number of FanFiction sites out there, not all exclusive to Harry Potter.

I have to be careful how specific I am when answering.  The site did not allow me to refer directly to other sites.

Thank you for your question.  

Jet LaBarge

Jet,
  Thank you for allowing me to be your Beta. I will always look forward to being the Net for your words.
 FoM

Author Response

Thank you for being a fan of my fiction, and for your Beta work.

Jet LaBarge

Its a shame you are leaving.
witch site are you leaving to if i may ask?

Author Response

I have to be a little careful about promoting other sites.  It took several tries to get the ending paragraph right.  If you google my name, Jet LaBarge, you should find me rather easily.  If you need to contact me via e-mail or g-mail please refer to HPFF or Harry Potter.  I get a lot of e-mail.  

There are generic Fanfiction sites as well as dedicated Harry Potter sites.  I am on 2 other sites.

Jet LaBarge

Hi Jet it really is a shame that you will not post here anymore. With luck I found your story on another site. I'm going to read it there. But you will not read my reviews there, because I don't like to have to register to just review a story. I also noticed the differences in the story here and on the other site. The way you develop the story there is better than here.
With regards Alex

Author Response

I understand.  It is a pain to register.  

So far the changes have been minor, if frustrating.  Name changes and the like, plus a few paragraphs just omitted.  Thank you for letting me know.

Jet LaBarge

Hey Jet, when are you planning to release a new chapter? I hope you will make it soon. With regards Alex

Author Response

One working through validation right now, and more in the works.  Once 9 is posted 10 should follow quickly.  I am still working on some of 11, and everything after that needs work.

Sometimes the chapters come together easily, and other times it is a lot harder.  Plus between working and travel and a busy personal life sometimes real life gets in the way of the writing.

I promise you I will finish all the way past Albus's Hogwarts days.  

Jet

Hi, first of all thanks for the new chapter. It was okay, also I don't have to do much with church. 
I also have to point out a little mistake. The really bad hurt women: Her name is Lavender Brown not Viollett. Maybe you can change that, because you named her right a few chapters before this one and in you're other stories.
With regards Alex

Author Response

My Beta and I both missed that one.  I post on two other sites, and will fix it there as well.  Thank you so much for pointing out the mistake!

Jet

Hi Jet, the part about finding Timothys Lily was just beautiful. I have to admit I had a little tear in my eyes. The Last bit was a bit confusing though.
It is not really clear to me, why they build the second burrow.

Author Response

Because the cousing wanted to be able to spend chuncks of the holidays and summer together, and as large as the first New Burrow is, with five married couples, Charley, and twelve cousins it was getting very crowded.  As children bring friends over there will be more and more people spending parts of the holidays on the New Burrow property.

Thank you for the review!

Jet

Ah the next chapter. Now I have a question: Are you planning to go over a year of time in every chapter until Albus goes to Hogwarts? I think at times it would be god in this way, but for some storylines you may write it in real time. But I have enough trust in you as an author to do the right thing. 
With regards and looking forward to the next chapter Alex

Author Response

No.  It there may be some quick years, but as Albus grows and develops there will be some involved chapters where a lot happens in a few days.

hey I just found thi story and though i'd revei it fo you

I iethe story although it dd tae mea wile to get used to the characterand time changes.
you hae a good plot although not all thwriting is brilliant th majority of it has a good standard and it migt be good to go back ot=ver the first few chapters and change them slightly, but othe tha that is great
I hope you continue with this story as iit has great potential

from me x

ps. I have a new story and it would mean a lot to me if you read and reviewed it and if you do  what position do you think James will play in quidditch because I can't decide x

Author Response

This the fourth of four stories taking the Harry Potter story up to the epilogue.  Although the stories are long it would help to read all of them, starting with "The First Year."  Forget the abondoned first attempt.  

In my story James is the Quidditch fanatic,  seeker first year like his father.  Albus is by far the more interesting character, and the one that will have adventures.  

If I have a long review and am having troubles with spelling I type it first in Word (or some other program with a spell checker) and then copy and paste it into the review.  The extra time it takes is well worth it.

Thank you for the review!  

Jet

A a new chapter thank you for that. This time I have a bit to criticize because it is a bit of a shame that you just got so quick offer Teddy's first time on the Hogwarts Express and the good byes with the family and his sorting. But that is just a minor thing. I'm looking forward to the next chapter anyway.

Author Response

Albus is the focus of this story, more than Teddy.  There is more of the Teddy story, but the next one I have written is midway through his time at Hogwarts.  

I am trying to post the next chapter this weekend,but it is Easter weekend.  Church this evening was three hours long, and we have family coming over tomorrow.

Thank you for the review.  It is good to know some people are still reading.

Jet

Please continue as this is interesting story

Author Response

I have a rough draft all the way to the 19 year point, when Albus starts Hogwarts.  The Albus story is in rough shape, and I may have to take a break of a few months to put it in better order and get a rough draft from beginning to end.

I really appreciate reviews.  It keeps me writing.  Thank you.

Jet LaBarge

What a cliffhanger! Can't wait for the next chapter. I also read the rest of the stories they were nice to read. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!

Author Response

I am sort of on vacation, and should post a few chapters reasonably quickly.  Thank you for making it through all my wordy writing.

This was ment to be a cliff hanger.  Don't worry too much.  At least Harry and his family have to survive if I am to stay true to canon.

Reviews are always appreciated.  Thank you.

Jet

Hi, that was an interesting start for a story. But I also got the feeling that I missed something. Is there a predecessor to this storry?

Author Response

This is the fourth book in my "Almost Happily Ever After" series.  Start with "The First Year," then "Bad Guys and Broomsticks."  The third story is "Birth of the Potter Children."  There are a couple of one shots, plus my first attempt at the Happily Ever After story which I abandon.

It is hard to start in the middle.

Thank you for asking and for the review.  

Jet

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