Ooh! This seems like a really intriguing idea and I'm excited to see where it goes. For the most part it seems realistic and something that totally could have happened. The only thing I saw that seemed a little off was the line in the beginning where Harry called the Dursleys his family (" ...deserted streets of Surrey, the anger at his family was beginning to wear off and be replaced by dread.") In my opinion, Harry wouldn't, especially at this point, refer to the Dursleys as his family. Overall, good beginning.
I just wanted to say wow love i it what a great start and would love to see were you take this and i hope you carry on with it be a shame not too after that start.
Good luck with it and you defo have a fan here so take care and i hope to read more soon ? so by for now i hope ?.
Author's Response: Thank you. The next chapter will be up soon. =]
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