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Reading Reviews for Because She Stays
9 Reviews Found

Review #1, by krazyboutharryginny 1.

1st June 2015:
Hiya! I'm here on behalf of LastMinuteLuna :D

When I saw this on your AP, I HAD to read it. I love stories about gay girls so much - being one myself. The werewolf element just made me even more interested.

I just want to write the gushiest review right now! Like Sarah, I am the biggest sucker for love stories! The relationship between the two girls is so adorable and seems like it could really last. It's so awesome how the girl doesn't run away when Sarah confesses that she's a werewolf, just thanks her for telling her. I just... I LOVE THIS!!

I do have a couple of teeny tiny criticisms. One is that there seem to be some grammatical errors - maybe you could look through and try to find them? For example, right at the beginning - "I found (and fell) in love more times than I can count" - "I found in love" doesn't make any sense, so "in" should be inside the brackets too. The other thing is that I really wish we were told the other girl's name.

Oh wait I just thought of something else I loved! I loved Sarah's reaction to becoming a werewolf - how she ran away from her parents. I can't say it made me happy or I thought it was a good idea, but it was so unique - I don't think I've ever seen it done in another story!

Great job!


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Review #2, by Emma Swan 1.

15th April 2015:
Hi Mary.

I'm Emma Swan, and I'm here because we have a bit of a werewolf problem in Storybrooke. Ruby has lost her red cloak, and we can't seem to find it anywhere. So we were hoping your story might help us find a way to stop the werewolf-transition.

Since I'm already here, I might as well leave a little review. This was a very interesting story. I like that she reads books. I'm sure she'd get along well with Henry... or Belle. Yeah, she would be a good friend for Belle, I think. Both love books and they are adventerous people. Hmm.. maybe I should mention this story to Belle, so she can meet her.

Anyway, I think it was very reckless of her to go out on a full moon, but I would probably do the same.. not for the same reason, though. I suppose you could call me a non-believer, but I'm getting closer to believing now. It's just a little too much you know. 27 year being an orphan that had to steal to survive, and now I have Snow White and Prince Charming as my parents. Who would've thought that could happen?

It was great she found love in the end. I'm all for loving whoever you want, no matter gender, race or religion. And I know a lot of people seem to think somethings going on between Regina and I, but we're just friends. I'm not seeing anyone, not even Hook although everyone seems to think otherwise.

And you know what, I think love might be the answer. Love is what can help us stop the werewolf-transition (or at least make sure it's under control). Thanks for the help, really. I wish I could stick around longer, but I have to hurry back to Storybrooke and tell them about what I found. Would you say hi to my friend over at the forums if you should meet her? I don't feel comfortable giving her name to a stranger, but I can tell you she is there very often (like every day). She also wanted me to tell you that "the key is the name". Hope that was of any help if you wish to find her.

Thanks for the help!

Emma Swan

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Review #3, by lightthecandle 1.

4th August 2014:
Hey! Here for the challenge review!
I just love the beginning, describing her love for books just made it seem really realistic and not obsessive at all :) It was kind of sad and beautiful the way you wrote it!
I am literally left speechless, it's such a lovely, sweet story for Storge and I love the way that she's taken such a bad situation (in the beginning) and turned it out. And she eventually did get her romance in the end, it's perfect and adorable!
~Aimee xxx

Author's Response: Yeah, her obsession with books is one of my favorite characteristics about her :P Yay, I'm so glad you liked it. I just love the ending too. It just puts a little smile on your face, you know ^.^
Thanks for the review!

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Review #4, by Gladis Gudgeon 1.

31st July 2014:
That was so cute. The whole living through books thing is a bit over done because most people obsessed enough to write fan fiction are like that, but you made it work. Your story made me smile. 9/10
Gladis Gudgeon

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review! It made me smile :P

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Review #5, by UnluckyStar57 1.

11th July 2014:
I like all the background on Sarah's life that you gave at the beginning. It set up the pattern for loneliness and solitude that she encountered before she met the other girl. (Did the other girl have a name? Did I miss it by accident?)

I find it interesting that this was written for prompt one because the main focus was not on a magical creature. It was on Sarah and her new friend. But that's okay, because you're really showing the reader that werewolves are people, too, and they aren't necessarily creatures of darkness and decay. :)

Really good story!

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Author's Response: No, you didn't miss it. I both purposely left her name out so it could have been a anybody person while at the same time it was just never needed haha. Yeah, it wasn't your typical showing of how werewolves are not monsters, but it was showing how they can even be the main part of a love story or whatever and it wouldn't be any different just because she is a werewolf. Thank you!

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Review #6, by evil little devil 1.

11th July 2014:
I love that you examined more about how much of a stigma lycanthropy has in the wizarding world. It's so horrible, it's really sad having to watch people struggle through something that isn't their fault, without the help of others. You really highlighted how detached she had to become from the world to survive through her not knowing about the war that was going on.
I'm so happy she found someone who would love her no matter what. This was such a dark story, but also a very sweet story at the same time. It was an enjoyable read :)

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Author's Response: It is really sad but believable as we have so many things like it in this world that people are so prejudiced against (re: the HIV victims who Rowling modeled werewolves after). I'm glad you liked that, its hard writing something that you have had no real experience with. Ah, yes, it just makes me smile. They are adorable together :P Thank you so much!

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Review #7, by EnigmaticEyes16 1.

7th July 2014:
Hi! This is a HOUSE CUP 2014 REVIEW!

I thought this was a super cute little story. It was very brief and easy to read, but at the same time, a lot happened in that short amount of text.

I thought it was kind of weird how her parents would be so worried about werewolf bites as to not let their daughter go out on any night there's a full moon, but then again, some parents are very overprotective, maybe their neighborhood has a werewolf problem, I don't know. But it also seems cold of them that they would just disown her for becoming a werewolf, but she broke they're rules and she paid the consequences, I guess. And people typically seem to be terrified of werewolves.

It's sad that the main character is on her own though, for several years, and completely unaware as to what is going on in the wizarding world. I like that she saved the girl though, and the girl stayed with her, obviously having nowhere else to go if she's running through the woods by herself, wanted by snatchers. I wonder who she is. I thought it was nice how Sarah taught her how to live off the land, and how she finally had someone's company to enjoy for once.

I especially loved the ending where she finally tells the girl her secret, and she just smiles and hugs her, not caring and not being afraid. I would have liked there to have been more to this story maybe, but sadly it is a one-shot.

Anyway, I think you did a fabulous job with this. I only really saw one tiny little typo, at the very beginning, I think you say "bite" when you mean "bit." But you know, close enough.


Author's Response: Yeah, I view her parents as very overprotective, and I would think that more parents would do that- especially with younger children- just as most have either seen or heard bad stories about werewolves. I kind of just wanted to keep her as an anonymous wizard so she could really be anyone- though, if she was being chased by snatchers she would have to be muggleborn. Yes, the ending always gives me the feels :P Thanks again!

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Review #8, by Infinityx 1.

6th July 2014:

This was such a cute one-shot! I've always been really sad about the way lycanthropics are treated in the wizarding world, even by their own parents. The way you started this off was so powerful, and I love the way you've used short phrases and clauses to describe each moment. They add greatly to the effect of the story.

Poor kid. I can't believe her parents left her like that. I never really understood that. Parents are supposed to unconditionally love their children, especially the mother. She did give birth to the child after all. This is just heartbreaking.

I wonder who that mystery donor is. :o

There's a typo in the fourth paragraph. You've typed hunger where I think you mean hunter.

In the fifth paragraph, you changed the tense to future, using "will". In the rest of the following parts, you've used simple present. I suggest you change that future bit to simple present as well to make it flow better. :)

Wow, so this was during the peak of Voldemort's power, and she didn't know about anything that was happening. Just eating, and pickpocketing every day and transforming once a month. That seems like such a frustrating schedule!

The other girl, she's so nice! It must be lovely for Sarah to have someone love her after being shunned by her parents and living on her own for so long. And I think that girl knew that Sarah's a werewolf already! Aw, the ending is just the cutest. :')

I loved this, great job!


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Author's Response: Thanks, Erin! I think the wizarding world is really messed up in the fact that it is so behind in it's was of thinking. We see Lupin, shunned his whole life, scared for his own child, and, based off that, I would find it very probably that parent's would (unfortunately) leave their children after they turned. Thanks for pointing those out! I will change them now :P I know, I could never live that way! I need at least my computer and a strong wifi signal to survive ;) Thanks again for the lovely review :D

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Review #9, by maskedmuggle 1.

6th July 2014:

Aw, this was such a beautiful story, despite the small moments of sadness within it. I really loved how you did something quite different from usual werewolf stories and instead, through Sarah's eyes, didn't portray them as beasts. The relationship between Sarah and the guy developed at the right pace in your story and I just loved the way they interacted with each other. The moment that was particularly thought-provoking for me was Sarah's "Thank you for telling me" as that truly embodies a real relationship - unconditional love.

I really liked the plot of this. I thought the way you started it off was really great as it gave me, the reader some background before going into the main part of the story. It also really gave me a different insight into the life of a werewolf, which I thought you wrote about really realistically so that it was all extremely believable. I particularly liked that bit about him taking books to read to live life through the characters there, because I think that's something we can all relate to in some extent. I also found that the story was quite emotion-provoking at different moments. Honestly, I really enjoyed your story and thought it was written brilliantly.

- Charlotte/maskedmuggle
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Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Well the prompt was to show how these beasts, aren't monsters and I thought it would be cool (and different) to show it from the 'beast's' POV. Hehe, it was with a girl ;) I probably should have given her a name to make it more clear, but oh well :P I almost wanted the whole 'show that these magical beings aren't monsters' to be done as the human being the monster- as they so often as so prejudice- and that, I agree, embodies a real relationship. Thanks again for this wonderful review :)

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