Hey there, Princess :D.

Oh my gosh, this is so sad :(, but you did a lovely job writing it. Obviously there are some more close-to-home issues in this, and I applaud you for being able to power through any emotional disposition in order to write it. From the very beginning, you've managed to create a void in the character's emotions, something is missing, and something is wrong (for the characters, I mean).

Contemplating if things would have been different if (insert all existing variables in the world) is a dangerous road to take, but obviously these sorts of thoughts will naturally come to be in the wake of loss :(.

James and Evalin have a lot of emotional baggage to sort through after losing their baby, so I think that you very appropriately placed the theme of 'just breathe'.

You know, this was probably a story that I shouldn't have read *sniffles* ^.^, but it was lovely.


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Author's Response: Hey hon!
I LOVE THAT YOU CALL ME PRINCESS. I'm glad that you liked this story. It was something that was tough to write, but important. And I hold it very near and dear to me. Thanks so much for the review!
xoxo Sarah
2014-04-17 12:19:19

Are you trying to break my heart? Man this story is just full of feels.

I loved 'In Love With Your Laugh' and I'm super glad you wrote more Evalin/James. I just had to listen to the songs you used and my heart broke a little more, they're so beautiful and I cried once again.

James' devotion to her is just... I can't find the words but it shows his true love for her and I think it reflects part of what he said when he was proposing to her as well. He well and truly loves her and you can see it so much.

"if I had chosen a different name. Would you still be here if I had chosen a different name?" - This hit me so much, because I relate to it in a way but for different reasons. There's always that doubt, that what if I had... It's horrible because things happen and your powerless to stop it yet you try and come up with a reason as to why it happened.

Yet again you've reduced me to tears by one of your stories. It's such a heartbreaking story but you've written it beautifully ♥

Evalin standing outside the nursery, it's horrible having to clean or go through a person's house when they've passed but to have to do it to a little nursery is overwhelming

I love the fact Evalin goes outside and finds comfort in lying down in the dew covered grass. Before looking up at star, wondering if her baby girl is up. I myself find myself doing the same, wondering if my loved ones are up there shining down on me.

Naming her after Ginny shows just how close her and Evalin are

I think the ending where James finds her and they unite is just perfect. They need one another and whilst Evalin may be unsure, they are both grieving parents who have three things: the memory of their little one, the love for one another and hope. ♥

I love this, it truly is beautiful and heart felt and you've done a fab job of writing it ♥

Soph x

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm sorry. ♥

I just, how do you even reply to a review like this? I just don't even have words. Soph you're so sweet to me and so nice, and I'm so glad that this story touched you. There will be more of James and Evalin to come, and they'll be much happier! I promise!

I'm sorry for reducing you to tears, but it kind of makes me happy because I know I was successful in my writing. ♥

I'm glad you loved this, and I'm glad it touched you and I'm sorry I took so long to reply and that my reply is so lame. I just don't know HOW to reply. This is just. ♥

Thank you ♥

xoxo Sarah ♥
2014-04-17 12:19:19
Okay but like why do you keep doing this to me. I am not supposed to cry at work okay. That's not okay. You need to stahp. (But not really because it's all so good).

The emotions are so real here. I think some people would go over the top and get super descriptive, and use big words, and try to be all fancy in their writing. That wouldn't work here. Here what works is simplicity. Because when this happens, you're not thinking straight. You might not even know how to express all you're feeling. But all you know is that you are feeling, you're feeling pain. And it's a very raw pain, a very straightforward pain. It's very direct. This happened, and I feel super crappy about it. And you capture that perfectly here. I feel exactly how she feels, and I want to lay and look at the stars, and find Ginny. And I want to tell her I miss her, and that I wish she was here.

I know it's cold here but the goosebumps are definitely from your story.

Keep doing what you're doing. But maybe not too often. Because a flood of your readers' tears might be imminent.

Author's Response: Okay, but like, because I like making you cry. ;) Just kidding, I don't like making you cry (maliciously). (well thats good because i don't plan on stopping).

I don't think I could've gotten super descriptive. It was really tough to write it as it was. I'm glad you liked this story, and woah that it gave you goosebumps and just wow. How do I even reply to this review.

♥ ♥ ♥ I'm okay with a flood of my readers' tears if it means I get reviews like this ♥ ♥ ♥

xoxo Sarah ♥
2014-04-17 12:19:19
Wow, Sarah, this is absolutely heartbreakingly beautiful. I'm a bit teary myself at how earnest your writing is, how desperate but at the same time, composed. You've managed to take a difficult subject and craft such a moving story with this. To lose a child, even an unborn child, is such an awful thing that can happen to any parent, and you really portrayed James' and Evalin's devastation and grief so sympathetically. I like that James remains such a supportive figure for Evalin; this is indeed a time when they need each other both. It's a hard thing to recover from, but with two people grieving together, they'll seek solace in each other and learn to live and hope again. At least that's how I'd like to see them.

I love that moment when Evalin lays down on the grass in the early morning, watching the stars twinkle out and the dawn break. It's such a serene image, and I think it's just the kind of moment that she needs - acceptance, solitude, and perhaps with all the quiet around her, it will be the nearest she'll ever be to her unborn daughter. And James coming out to find her was the perfect way to end the story.

This was an absolutely gorgeous one-shot, Sarah, and gah your writing is fabulous. You're incredibly talented! ♥


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Author's Response: Nicole! You're so sweet!!! It was very hard to write, I cried like the entire time. I'm so glad that you liked this story and enjoyed it. I really wanted to show that James was super supportive too, and didn't slink away from Evalin and withdraw.

That was my favourite moment to write. I really felt like it was the best way to end the story. Thank you so much for this absolutely lovely review. I appreciate it so much! I'm literally blushing ♥

xoxo Sarah ♥
Hi Sarah,

You caught me off guard with this one, and I don't know why I am surprised because your writing is always moving.

Again, you've created such a beautiful work of art here. You have a wonderful touch for piecing beauty out of sadness and letting the reader experience all of the emotions at the same time. This story hit home for me and I don't know if I've ever read something that has been an accurate depiction of the jumbled series of emotions that can occur. Wanting to not be sad, but the pain just overwhelms you.

You've depicted James beautifully here, as a grieving parent and a supportive husband at the same time. Also, the bit where Evalin thinks that if she had chosen a different name there would have been a different outcome. It is so true to real life when we can't cope and need to come up with an explanation or reason when there is none.


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Author's Response: Hi Beth!

Thanks, that really does mean a lot to me. ♥

Thank you. This was probably the hardest thing for me to write, so far. I was trying to put raw emotions in, but had to pull myself out to actually be able to write the piece. So I'm glad you liked it, and that you enjoyed it. I'm glad you like my characterization, and the way I highlighted the not-so-rational thoughts we have when we try to cope. Thanks for this lovely review hon!

xoxo Sarah ♥
2014-04-17 12:19:19
Hello darling!

You just have to rub it in that you're a TA, don't you :p.

I'm a little jealous that you're no longer at the mercy of the queue. But also congrats, again.

This was sad. You can really feel the emotion behind it, and I hope it helped you along with the healing process. I love you, sweetheart!

The way that James has this devotion to her is... I don't know how I feel about it. It's almost like because she almost had a family, only his love doesn't fulfill her anymore. It's very tragic. But I'm glad that she has him, though. He seems very loving and loyal.

It's really heartbreaking to think about the nursery. I can totally see how it would be nearly impossible to go in and do anything with it...

Another thing that was really sad, more because of what was implied, was the line about how Ginny told her to call her Mum. Even though I know that Ginny would never be angry with Evalin for losing the pregnancy, there's that feeling of "do you still want me to be your daughter if I'm not giving you a granddaughter"?

I mean, they're obviously close if they were planning on naming their daughter after her. But I imagine that that moment has given Evalin some insecurities in their relationship.

Yeah, it was when she said that she sighed in relief when James rolled over. His touch doesn't have that smae comforting feeling that I'm assuming it used to have. Even beyond the fact that she wanted to go outside, I felt a disconnect.

This also really made me think about how James felt when he woke up and she wasn't next to him any more. I feel like from his POV, he feels just as sad by the loss, but then he also feels his wife slipping away from him, and it's all very sad.

But then at the end, there's this sense of unity, and this sense of family.

This was a really beautiful story, Sarah. I love you!


Author's Response: Hi hon!

You're so sweet, leaving this review for me. And duh, ;) thanks though.

It was really sad, and it was really very hard to write. I'm glad you feel the emotion, and I think it did help me. Love you too! ♥

I think that she was so close to having that family she never experienced she was overcome with joy, and it just kind of consumed her, the joy. You know? She was really basking in it, and enjoying it, and she doesn't really get the ins and outs of family. Like that they love you even in the bad. So she pushes James away because she doesn't know how to depend on him. Just like she feels like maybe she isn't close to Ginny because of what she's gone through. It isn't that she can't be filled by their love anymore, she just doesn't understand. I don't think she knows how to deal with it herself, let alone deal with it with a family.

I'm glad you liked it. I wanted there to be a unity at the end. I sort of solidity and reassurance that everything will be okay. I think both songs really instill that in you when you're listening to them, so I wanted the story to make you feel that way to. Youre broken, hurt, torn apart, and then you realize that you'll be okay eventually and everything will slowly start to piece itself together. That's what I keep telling myself.

Thanks for this really beautiful review. I'm glad you liked it, and I love that you reviewed the second I posted it and then told others to read it. Thank you. ♥ I love you too!!!

xoxo Sarah ♥ ♥ ♥


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