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Interesting idea. The description and dialog could be better, but I like the premise and the characterization.
Gladis Gudgeon
P.S. I try to always return reviews when I can!

Author Response

Thank you so much for the review!

I loved it! i wish it wasnt a one shot though:(

Author Response

Well I am thinking about doing a short story or sequel but I don't know what it would be about though. Any ideas?

This was a really creative idea! I like how the Weasley/Potters have always been so open minded toward other species, but they shut out Rose for being a vampire. I don't think I've ever seen a story like this one before. It's so original and I love that in a fanfic! :D

There were a couple of grammar mistakes throughout, but nothing major and that's my only real critique. You say it's not very good, but I beg to differ! You're a wonderful writer and I enjoyed every minute I was reading it.

Rose seemed very real. I really loved that you had her change so much after being bitten, that even her own family was surprised by the piercings and other modifications. It felt realistic for someone who'd gone through what she went through.

It was fantastic how she told them all about what she went through at the end. That was my favorite part of the whole story. People don't often realize what others go through when they're discriminated against. I loved that they were all shocked and horrified by the marking process Rose had to undergo every two weeks at the Ministry.

Just a lovely story with such a sweet and optimistic ending! (:

Author Response

Thank you for your review! It's my first one for the story! And I'm so glad you liked it!

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