2011-11-12 08:55:10
Hi there!

I thought that this was a really interesting opening chapter. I am excited to find out where it is going to go from here. I liked the way that you pulled me in with how creepy it is. You did a great job with describing what was going on even though the chapter is short.

I only saw one area that I would consider fixing up at the end you accidently hit the space button and the sentence is broken up. Just figured I would point it out.

Keep up the great writing!


Recenseo 2012


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