Wow. I can't really say anything else, I'm totally stunned!
So amazing writing, and the fact that you didn't just focus on one character, but you filled the story with how the war looked like through different eyes. The part when Fred, Molly, Percy, Harry and when Harry saw that the last of the marauders were dead, made me cry. I love the marauders and Fred and George, and Fred's dead, through Percy's and Molly's eyes, were so beautiful they also made me cry.
Amazing! 10/10 points, should've wished I could give you 20/10 points.
Author's Response: wow thank you so much thats really high praise. I'm glad that you enjoyed the different points of view. Sorry I made you cry though :( - i've been there with several stories like this one. Thanks for your feedback :) - Kirsty xxx
I decided to return the favour! This was stunningly beautiful, and some of the imagery left me momentarily speechless. It may have seemed choppy in places, but that was only because you were including so many different characters so it was unavoidable, really.
"The night was black with only the stars and moon to provide light. The stars twinkled bright in the sky, as though willing for the right side to win, as though they knew what was happening billions of miles below. "
That was genius. I loved that description more than anything. Well done, and thank you!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing this (it was a spur of the moment inspiration thing) and I was worried that it was a little bit choppy- but then that kinda goes with the whole idea of it. Its war and mourning after all!
I'm glad that you liked the whole stars bit! I always like to think the stars mean more than we give them credit for!
I'm glad I got the whole description thing down! Merlin bless my 3rd year English teacher! :P
I also really liked how you didn't just focus on one person
Watch the third/ first person switches though - it can make it difficult to read
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! This was my first one shot/song fic so thankyou for the warning about whiching narrative styles! :D And I thought that so many people were effected by the battle that focusing on one person wouldnt get the full scope- Kirsty xxx
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