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hey!this is really gd! u should update im really intrigued to what happens next =DDD

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wow. I really like your story, how you depict what happened in Hogwarts during the year of the Battle, through a Slytherin's eyes... I have to say I think it's quite original the way you wrote it so far :) can't wait to read more!

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aw
Its almost like Romeo and Juliet
Tragic
Love this story...liking the friendships building between the other houses and her.really awesome

keep it up!!
Emily
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I thought a bit of house unity was needed

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:O:O:O:O:O:O:O

Loved it!!
That last tagline.nice!!!

awesome peice of writing

keep up the good work

yours Emily 
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thank you my dear nice to see another review from you!

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amzing
so touching
lol
well update soon

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thank you!!
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AWESOME CHAPPY!
I know its been a while since i've reviewed...not been on the site for a while...but o me o my look what i've come back too!
Amazing chapter.the fact she's in the DA and then Draco tell her he loves her...its tragic! Great writing! Just one comment...the last line...'My heart almost broke at that moment as I realised that I was never to have him as my own. He was going to be someone else's, someone that didn't deserve him.' which i love! is repeated three times..wasn't sure if that was a computer error or there for effect.
What an awesome story! Update soon
Yours Emily xx xx xx xx
p.s. i'll be sure to check out your new story!
xxx

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ah yeah thats an error! nevermind! lol thanks for the review it's good to see you and your lovely comments. thanks hun

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wow.
that was so elegant
so beautiful
left me wanting more of this fan fic
you are blessed
to write this you know
pleaz update

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awww thank you so much i'm glad you enjoy my writing.

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Awesome chapter.
Can't believe Auria did that infront of the whole common room
I hope Marianna fights in the DA...i dunno why it just seems right for her.
Some amazing writing...
Update soon
Yours Emily xx xx xx

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thanks my dear, i've got another story i've just posted up so the next chapter might now be up for awhile but when the first chapter of my first fic is posted up you've got to check it out hunni!

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Oh wow, its good. Please keep updating!

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thanks my dear! i'm currently in the middle of writing another fic which i've just posted up the first chapter, so i'm going to seperate the time between posting both fics up so it may be a little longer for you all to wait for the next chapter, but you must read my new fic when the first chapter gets validated!

thanks for reading and reviewing my dear!

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Hey Another awesome chapter!
I can't believe Caleb died!!
N they kissed n Auria saw! Its crazy!
Loved it!
N loved the dedication, Thank you so much =D
keep up the good work with your amazing writing
Yours Emily
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ah it's always good to recieve reviews from you! there is more to come just keep your eyes peeled for more updates.

thanks again hun!

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aw
As much as this chapter was sad...i kinda liked it.
She finally let out all her pent up feelings.
N to Neville.
Awesome Job on the chapter.
Keep it up!
Yours Emily
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I think Neville is a great character so I knew straight away that I had to include him!

thanks for reviews!

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Wow, i absoultly love this story. So please update soon. I saw like no grammar or spelling mistakes. Please update ASAP. 10/10

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thank you new chapter will be up soon!

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Awww no!
Can't believe it...and she's in love with Draco and Draco's in love with her but he's sworn to marry her best friend.o what tales they weave!!
Love the chapter.another twist added into the fold!
Awesome writing
Update son
yours Emily x x x

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hehe hey ems! there is a lot more to come your way! i've posted up the next chapter waiting for it to be validated! but the one after that will be dedicated to you hun cause you're my number one reader!

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I really like this story =D i love that it is in the view of a Slytherin that doesn't know which side she's on.
Write more plz
XxXx

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Thanks for the review! I'm really glad that you like it!

there is more to come don't worry!

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I really liked this chapter it was really sweet.

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thank you! keep your eyes peeled for the next chapter i've just posted it up, it should be validated in the next few days!

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Once again, a well written chappie! Again, a few errors. This time you have some commas where there could be periods or you are missing them. 

[ What side do I join now the war is raging on? ]
I would add 'that' after 'now'. (helps with flow)

[ Professor Snape was now successor of Dumbledore, to many this was a bad thing but for our house this was a time of celebration. ]
This is an example. Instead of having a comma after Dumbledore, there should probably be a period, and then a comma should be after 'thing'.

But other than that, it's brilliant! I still love the descriptions and how you detail and write everything!

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thanks for you reviews.

I'll keep an eye out on the gramma lol

First off, I love your writing style! I love the clever way that you slide comments in to describe everything. One problem I have with this chapter is that you have several comma and apostrophe mistakes. 

for instance:
[ 'Nevermind that lets get on!' called Draco ]
This would be better written as {'Nevermind that, let's get on!' called Draco. }

There was also a spelling mistake realised=realized. (I went back and read over so I could find you a quote/location, but am unable to find it now. ) :  )

Overall, good job! I'll be sure to check back when you get more chapters up!

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I'm glad you like my writing!

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