wow, you havea way with words and i love the personality you've given Gabriel with out really discribing him, like you can sort of picture him sitting there writting something loking down at hermione as she sleeps
Author's Response: I have always had a small problem with describing people. This way I can tell the story while leaving him "out", lol. Beisdes, I have never really had a clear vision of his looks...
Awww...That was...Sad and brilliant. I like the way that you made Gab. to tell the story after she died, its a really good idea.
I think if you add more feelings in there will be great, not just descriptions about her life, well, surely we know she felt depressed about what she was and the sad descriptions, but if you can just add some specific descriptions about her feelings will make this even better.
Red Slipper! 9/10
Author's Response: Thank you for your excellent review.
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