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I like the storyline, you just need to make the chapters longer, If you like I can help you out. I've been looking to beta a story and if you like I'll beta yours.

I'll add this one to my favorites and if you would like some help writing, my email is mistressmalfoy18(at)yahoo(dot)com

10/10

=) Laura
2008-03-29 6:04pm
THAT WAS AWESOME! I'm going to die if you don't write more. I don't want hear any excuses just plz write more. P.S. If you couldn't tell I really liked the story.

Author's Response: babe I have had NO time!! (allowed any way) T_T
in my own and ginnys words
"daum"
lol
great story!

Author's Response: THANKS
i read ur best friends story and im going to say the same thing.

ah! why.why.why.? I hate clifhangers anyways 10/10

Author's Response: because they cause suspence and I don't want you to get bored w/ the story now do I?
wow okay um hunny you need to work on how you annouce things! before she started throwing words out of her mouth make sure it makes sense dont just throw it in there okay!

Mrs. Weasley

Author's Response: i know it kinda made no sence but hay i hav my way u hav urs
my warning didn't fit the plot sorry!
Wow! This is pretty good! I like it! Can't wait fo rthe next chapter! Keep up the good work and update ASAP. Thankz.

PS 10/10

Author's Response: thanks!
2007-08-23 5:43pm
Intersting please do continue

Author's Response: Warning: next chap. may hit home a lil hard for ppl who go through this evryday like moi
It's really short, but it sounds interesting. Please update soon!!!

Author's Response: Warning: next chap. may hit home a lil hard for ppl who go through this evryday like moi
2007-08-22 7:33pm
this is good so far just hurry up and update soon

Author's Response: Warning: next chap. may hit home a lil hard for ppl who go through this evryday like moi
2007-08-22 3:04pm
Let me guess, it's Malfoy watching? Hmmm, I'm confused - if they're witches and wizards, wouldn't they still use wands? (Instead of pistols?) Anyways, this is a great start and I hope you update soon! =) 9/10

Author's Response: lol youll hav to see Warning: next chap. may hit home a lil hard for ppl who go through this evryday like moi
2007-08-22 2:42pm
i hate cliffies, but i love this story so far so keep writing and update soon!
ps i love fob! inifinity on high rules!



Author's Response: LOL THATS THE POINT evryone hates cliffies but they r still apart of life thats y i use em' Warning: next chap. may hit home a lil hard for ppl who go through this evryday like moi

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