It was really good. You captured her emotions really well, especially her frustration, and her needs. The song went really well with it. xx
Author's Response: Stoirm my dear! Thank you so much for reviewing my story! :D I am so pleased you thought it was good too! I think the song worked well too, I actually came up with the idea when I was listening to the song and working on another fanfic hehe
Very poetic. That's a wonderful poem that you wrote. I always did believe that poetry offers more power and at the same time brevity as compared to prose. You showed it well in this piece. The use of repetition in your poems gives it emphasis and urgency. Your use of the varying styles and rhythm makes it all so disjointed, and thus gives emphasis to her confusion.
I like that you didn't tell us readers immediately whose POV this was. Adds to the mystery and surreal feel to this piece. Kudos for a job well done :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it but...it wasn't a poem :)
I didn't want to tell anyone who it was because I wanted her emotions to tell the story.