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your move from one situation to another is very sudden and it leaves a reader confused. you can use dividers in between pov's to mark the difference. 
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the plot is good and if you make more efforts it can turn to a good story

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thank you. i havent really read through much of my stuff in a long time, so i probably should! :P

you say it wasnt your best well then your wrong because i really liked and i think it was great!

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well, it was kind of a filler chappy... i really didn't know what to put and i think i was trying to lead myself to something, but now i am at a road block... ^_^ thanks!

that was great! keep up the good work:)

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^_^ thanks!

that was amazing and sad

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Thanks! ^_^

that is so sad and voldemort as 'orrble

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... yeah...

that is jst so sad that hermione died and that malfoy was proud and i thin was a great chapter and im going to read more as soon as im done with this review.

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yeah... i have a think for killing people off... currently, i think you think that i hate Hermione cuz i keep killing her... ^_^

oh-my-god that was amazing

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^_^ thanks!

I like this story so far! Definately one of your better written ones, even with the occasional spelling error. I love the drama and the darkness. It's all. dramatic and dark! :P Update soon!

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^_^ thanks! yes, well, that is cause it is one of my newer... newest one. well, you know i can't spell! if you didn't know that, then clearly, you wouldn't know me, but i know you know that and i am gonna shut up now. lol. yeah, i like the darkness too. hehehe. ^_^ i am trying to update, but with band camp and dance and school starting in a week, i need to get on my feet a bit, you know? of course you know. you are with me durring most of it! lol. see ya in band camp tomorrow! ^_^

Short. Nice. I liked it a lot. UPDATE SOON!!!

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thanks! update will come when i am done reading the book! ^_^

i like it so far, keep going

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^_^ YEY! SOMEONE LIKES IT!!!! lol! sorry. i have had it up for a while with only a few reviews. lol. ^_^ thanks!

PMS MUCH!! She's got problems. Good chapter. UPDATE SOON!!!

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well, the war to her is a very testy subject becuse without her, it would be pretty much over already. ^_^ thanks!

Not bad. I liked it soo much. UPDATE SOON!!!

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^_^ thanks! 
update on the way... soon.

Loving this story so far. its super interesting. and far from your normal, lets obsess totally about hermione/ ron, storys. loving it, again. UPDATE SOON!!!

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thanks! lol. yeah, well, ron/hermione is my fave ship, but this idea popped into my head. ^_^

I like it. Pretty good job. Good Work! It would be better if it was a bit longer, but I like it all the same. If u ever need any help, u should ask Amortentia757 for fanfic advice. I hear she's really good. U can contact her on the guestbook. She may be a big help to ur story.

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thanks! ^_^ yeah, i know. i try to work on leanth, but when a chapter ends, it ends, you know? glad you like it though! ^_^

Haha, I'd really love to know her name. And awww about her and Draco talking. He sort of seems a little out of character, but I think I like him better this way. Lol. (: Anyway, this was a really good chapter. Update soon. (:

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lol. yeah. don't worry. you will find that out in the next chapter. OOC... well, i know, but that should change sometime soon. you'll see. lol! ^_^ thanks! update will be around soon!

that was really good.  You have great descriptions that make the reader feel like there acutally there .. keep up the good work

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thanks! ^_^

Okay, so I think I'm the first review for the story. So I thought I should start of this review by saying that you are a very talented writer. I'm really liking this story so far, even though it's only one chapter in. But yeah, this story is really good so far, and I think it's probably just going to get better. I can't wait for the next chapter. (: Update soon.

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yep! ^_^ thank you! lol. i hope it will! lol. next chapter coming soon!

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