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Really good!
I love how Bella knows she's taken the wrong path
but perseveres anyway. 
Very much her own choice too. 
It really showed a lot of courage I never figured 
was in her. 
Anyway, 
great story!

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Thank you very much

i have kind of forgotten about this story, but you reminded me :)

Very interesting, I felt intrigued by Bella.

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i really like thiss.
ive never been a fan of bella but this is really good.
i love the descrptiveness of it.
i really like her dad to he isnt what i pictured him to be but i like him.

but love itt (:

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Oh brilliant. A bella review Yay! lol xxx Thank you I wanted her to have a good father to show that her descent into the darkness was purely her own weakness and not a pre disposition xxxxx

That was really good. Immense descriptions, very graphic and they set the scene amazingly. A lot of dialogue in parts, but everything's kept in charactarization so it doesn't lose the feel to it. Very good, 10/10. :)

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Oh you angel xx you read the one that could be easily picked up, you are such a darling thank you. And thank you for your glowing report on my writing, it is very kind of you considering the story hasnt been to much acclaim, thank you so much xx

I really, genuinely liked this. It is a bit darker than your other writing, or atleast what I have read of it by now; and dark/horror type things are typically not my thing, but this was nice. It relaxed me, in some odd way. I like how it actually has a bit of a plot, and a problem that must be resolved- more story format than most one-shots I have read.
Off to read another one of your stories,
Chianna

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Chianna I love you. Hardly anyone likes my Bella story, but it ties with all my other ones. It isnt all too dark it's more peaceful angst if you know what I mean xx 

Thanks very much. 

Go on read children of the revolution xx

I really enjoyed this story. It gives insight into her background, and a bit of of glimpse into her marriage. I'd interested to read more about her life at Hogwarts.

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Oh thankyou xx I'm glad you enjoyed it, not many people have xx

Wow, you have given a real insight into Bellatrix's life with just a few thousand words. Well, well written. I like it how Bella's dad is neither good, nor evil. Just something in between? 

...Ginny Skywalker 10/10

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Aw thanks Ginny, glad you read it, Bella is the most intriguing character as noone is born evil, at least I dont believe so, life changes us all, sometimes for the good and sometimes for the bad, Bella made a few choice decisions, which may have been right or wrong, but they were right for her.

nice, its dark and a good story, but I think it feels un-finished you know?

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I feel so too ... this one shot could very easily be a story in its own right and I had considered doing this, like Bellatrix's point of view on what happened during seventh year at Hogwarts ... my other story places Bella ages with the Marauders ... I did this before I knew it was wrong. I decided against developing this story because a) I have a story which is an ongoing story and has a readership I need to keep up with that and I cant do both and b) The less read of Bellas mind set the better lol xx thank you xx

I enjoyed your insight to Bellatrix's world. What I love about your writing is that it seems like you can see everything you write! Which makes the stories very much alive. When I read your stories, I understand, and almost feel, how they feel. That is not something alot of authors can do ( i do read LOADS of books). I think this might have been some of what was going on in your action scenes. The contents were excellent, it just wasnt written down as clearly, insightful etc. as the rest of the topic. Not that your action scene was bad, it just wasnt up to the standard of the rest of your work (not trying to bring you down!) I found that when I wrote my first aciton sequences for my english class, one thing that helped a lot was talking about what i envisioned. This was a problem for me, as I am EXTREMLY shy when it comes to my own work and imagination, but I had some peole online whom I corrosponded with, and I got everything down the way I wanted in the end.

Right! *stops rambling* All the work you have done has been first class, and the only reason I brought up the action sequence is that I love to see you develope your writing skills. I know that your mind is up to it, so dont tell yourself otherwise! Take your time with them. They may be the parts read the fastest, but it is really where your writing skills are easiest to promote.
*stops rambling again* I really need to get a hold of myself!! Anyways, I hope what I have said has brought some benefit to you, if not I apologise for wasting your time! Keep writing, keep writing, keep writing!! 10/10

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It really has ... you must be some sort of teacher I have decided ... I am going to go and practise writing some really full blown action sequences ... SCARED !! lol xx thank you very very much xx

hey, JUst saw that you had something new up-- really good! the sentences were a bit bumby in some places, but otherwise i really liked it. her train of thought was really well done, and it was an interesting twist that you made her dad so nice...ish. :-) i loved the part where they talked about their family. it was cool to see how unhappy she really is, and how insecure...though that was already clear from 'i want that life'. anyway, great job!
xoxxmoira
PS when are you gonna update 'i have that life'? cant wait!

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It is safe to say that I am obsessed with Bellatrix Black, all we have seen of her is this one sided bitter woman and no one is ever one sided, there is always more, I have always had a sympathy with her. I wanted to write her as a girl on the edge of making a choice in her life, she seemed like the type who would completely stick to the choice which she would take, she made the wrong choice and she probably knows that too. Always thought that the Black sisters had a neurotic mother and a resonable father, a man Sirius would not have liked because of her essential views, but a man who was ultimately a good man. I always had the impression that Bellatrix would have been heavily influenced by her father ... I have rambled on again xx thanks xx

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