Cute start. I love the snobby pureblood character, Megan. She is definitely a person a reader would love to hate! You might think about revising the beginning of the story, I was really confused as to what the whole dorm scene was about. I understand now that it was about Lily being a mudblood, but I found myself just skimming through the first part because I just didn't understand what was happening. So, maybe think about revising it for clarity, but overall, good start. Please PM me if you can when you get the next chapter up!
Author's Response: thanx
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