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I feel so bad for Sirius. I never thought id say that, to tell the truth. This story is so sad, but so beautifully written.  Good job!

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This is HILARIOUS! Its a bit sad with lilys parents, but her a d james love is awesome. You captured it PERFECTLY

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Oh my! This is so, so, SO GOOD. I love this story so much

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I have just finished your story. It has made me laugh, smile and cry. Brilliant. Cannot wait to read the next one.

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i LOVED it! great job! now i am off to read the sequel

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this is so sad but i think Jo had to die because of sirus, it would explain so much

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i loved this chapter, yes it was too much fluff and love but I  am a girl and my girly side comes out when i read this kind of stuff

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this is the saddest part i love it even though my eyes filled with tears :(

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it was a very passionate chapter, I loved it! graet job with the story

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Aw! That's so sweet! I love this story!

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i love this and the sequel

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That was my favorite chapter.  I totally sobbed.  I love it.  It had touching moment and romantic ones too. Love it great job.

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Ok, you're about to get a long list of things. Here goes:
1. Loved the whole Jo/Dan/Emma thing.
2. Jo's funeral was the best fanfic chapter I've ever read.
3. I love Amelia Bones and it's really cool that you included her.
4. Sirius's reaction to Jo's death was so perfect to set up how he acts in the actual books, humorous but sad and bittersweet.
5. I love the Sirius/serious thing, as I do it endlessly to annoy my sister.
6. Everything stays true to the cannon! I love things that could have happened with the actual books.
7. Nice excuse with Wormail; one wants to get him out of the picture, and the whole mysterious (Death Eater?) thing worked well.
8. I really want to read your sequel, which I have no doubt will be as good as this story.
9. Thanks for writing this story and reading this way-too-long comment.
10. It's just SO GOOD!

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Oh my gosh! I cried so hard in this chapter! It was like Dumbledore all over again. This really explains Sirius, and whenever I think of him I will now think of Jo. Thanks for writing.

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I love Jo's name! Is it after J.KR.? Anyway, this is really good.

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Oh, you've done it again. Shown Sirius at his wekest moments, written a beutiful songfic that is so sad, yet so truthful. Opened a window into his thoughts. And those thoughts are so sad, so beutiful, so terrible. Thank you.

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You are so wonderful at writing sad chapters, this one was so real, so heartfelt. Oh, poor Sirius. Poor Lily, Alice, James and Remus. But, mostly, poor Sirius. And Peter! Ah! he is just making everything worse, for them, for him. Ah!

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How dare he! That little evil piece of elephant poo ruined her life! I am going to kill him. Wait, cross that out. JAMES is going to kill him when he finds out. That little idiot. AH

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I agree, that was so sad. It was beautiful, like a poem, and brought tear to my eyes. I loved it.

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I love what you did at this story it made me sad in some places but happy in others and it also made me laugh alot also you used my favorite joke I love when Sirius says he is serious! :)

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I am very confused when you have someone think something - I never know if someone said it or merely thought it. Maybe you should put thoughts in italics or only use single instead of double quotation marks. 

That would lower the confusion level for a lot of people, I think. 

:) and awww and the rest of the chapter

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When someone is thinking something, either use ' instead of " , put it in italics, or include that they are thinking something. If they have multiple thoughts, space them out into different lines or only use of set of ' ' instead of putting quote marks around every separate thought and meshing them all together in one sentence.

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maybe put a bit more emotion in. are her parents even dead? If they are, Lily did not seem at all upset about it.

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this is good keep writing

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You say Mooney. 
No. 
It is Moony. No e.

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