This was excellent for a first chapter, and I cannot wait for the next chapter. It was extremely well written, and it has a very interesting plot. I hope you continue, and all goes well for your next few chapters.
Author's Response: Thanks for you review. :] I don't think I'll continue with the story though. The story I had in mind ended up being rather cliche and it doesn't seem to go anywhere. But thanks for reviewing!
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