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glad you liked it.

I love this series.

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really? it's great to know that someone likes it cause i haven't been getting a lot of feedback for this story and i've been thinking about dicontinuing it. thanks for your review! it was very much appreciated!!

don't continue this story!!!!!!!!!!!!   no offence to kim, i mean she's 1 of my best friends and all but, this story is booooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooring!!!!!  : l

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> kim didn't like this story either, but she was writing it.</i></font>

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Good work. Please continue! I can make you a banner if you like, that is if you want me to. If you do, tell me how you want it to look like. You can check my banners at my account.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks for reading! I have no idea what to do with this story since it was Kim that was mostly writing it, but I'll try to continue it.</i></font>

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You guys are on my favorite list.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> thanks!</i></font>

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great work....keep going...or else ;)

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Okay, we'll try. We where thinking about deleting it, though.</i></font>

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HI! I didn't get to finish reading the story yet but I like the way you guys (girls) write!  HAGS!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> thanks. HAGS to you too!</i></font>

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I just wanted to ask, what does a banner would Be nice if anyone wants to make one mean?*!*?*!*?*!*? i would want to make one if i knew what to make it of tell me tomorrow @ school of is u r reading this after school is over tell me @ your party or some other time!*!wow this was probably the shortest thing i've ever wrote as a review actually i didn't even read this chapter let me do it now and then maybe this review won't be so short.... actually, after looking @ my review it really isn't that short!*!.....  anyway let me read the chapter and maybe this will be my longest review yet!*!*!Now that i've read the chapter i've realized a few things that i hadn't before.... well i kinda couldn't before cause i never read the chapter.... but anyway i just have to say i didn't really get this part because it refers to many things that are in the harry potter books which i haven't really read before!!*!*!* anyway first of all what are the O.W.L.S.? and why are his scores letters? and who are the people at the door, (the only people i kinda recognize are the weasley brothers)? and where are they going? and why are they traveling by a fork? and what is portkey? and what and where is Grimmauld Place?*!*?*!*?*!*?*!*?*!*?   Seeeeee, .....  I told u i had a lot of questions and also after reading the other story about lily and james i feel like i got to know them and now it seems that it is so sad that Voldemort killed them..........    WOW!*!*!*!*!*!*!*!*!*!*!*!*!**!*!*! now that i've actually read the chapter i definitley think that this review is definetly the longest one yet!!!!  and to think that i thought that this was going to be my shortest!*!*!*!*!*!   Well let me go and see how long this review actually is        **********BYE**********Oh, P.S.      i expect all my questions to be answered so you may want to write them down and tell me later well**********BYE**********          (AGAIN)!  

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> We have a question for you: Why are you reading this if you have not read any of the books except one?</i></font>

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I completely understand about the whole American-magic-isn't-as-advanced-as-British-magic thing. No problem. But the thing that startled me most, and I was afraid to admit that Dumbledore hadn't said anything on it, was Catherine being a Legilimens. It's obvious. She said that she was well practiced at hiding her emotions right after Harry wished [mentally] that he could hide his emotions as well. Hmm... strange, yet very suspenseful. I must continue reading.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks. Please keep reading.</i></font>

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Even better, even better. I love how you put more description in this one, especially in the profile of Catherine Parker. I can tell, from what you have written, that she is not just an ordinary girl -- but I may be wrong. Heck, it's your fanfic after all. You control what happens. And might I add that some of the dialogue you have placed in this chapter were originated in other books, such as the Sorceror's Stone and Prisoner of Azkaban. We aren't that thick not to notice, mind you! Oh, and another great impression -- this time of Ron and Hermione. Simply amazing.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks for your compliments. We were wondering if anyone would catch those lines from POA and SS; glad someone did!</i></font>

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ExcellentÃ©. You are really getting better. I love your impression of Mrs. Weasley in this chapter -- very likely. I don't have any negative comments to throw into this review except the fact that Malfoy wouldn't say "Pot-Head Potter" because, quite frankly, that's a bit too American, but other than that, fantastic.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks. We decided to change "Pot-Head Potter" to just "Potter". We didn't like it very much after we read it over again.</i></font>

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This one was a lot better grammar wise, but I think you are rushing a bit. Slow down and let things happen. And what was that up in the room with Ron and Hermione? How could Harry just recite the prophecy, and automatically, they understand it? Even Hermione, intellegent as she is for her age, might need time to think about what he had just told them, and not jump directly into his arms as though he were some sort of Gilderoy Lockhart. Be real. Oh, and I think you should've saved that line "Come on, let's open your presents" for Molly, seeing as it would seem just like her to say such a thing. Good chapter though. Keep up the good work. I'll continue reading.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> For this chapter, we really wanted to let the readers know that Harry was ready to tell Ron and Hermione about the prophecy. We just realised, after reading your review, that it really doesn't seem very realistic about the prophecy thing. Thanks for your reviews!</i></font>

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Good concept, but I think you need to get more in depth with your writing. For example, you said "Lupin then made the fork into a portkey and handed it to Harry." Would the great J.K. Rowling say something as awkward as that? No. She would explain every ounce of detail that she could. For example, a proper way to say it would be "Lupin tampered the fork with his wand for a few moments, muttering a few words underneath his breath as he finished." Oh, and also, spell check couldn't kill you. Typos do happen, but seriously, check and revise them frequently.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks so much for your thoughts. It was our forst ever chapter on our first ever story, and we were a little nervous about it. The story will get better, though!</i></font>

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IM ON THE TEAM! thx!!!!! really exelent!!!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Your welcome. </i></font>

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really good!!!! love it

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Knew you would.</i></font>

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thanx 4 usin my name! i wish u put me on the quditch team tho. really awesoome so far!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Wait until the next chapter.</i></font>

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HI JENNIE! HI MEAGAN! I DIDN'T READ THE STORY YET BUT I HAD TO SAY HELLO! 

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Please read the story.</i></font>

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cold Water, hahaha. cat is cruel but im sure u wouldnt make her that was without a good reason. i like it

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> We made her that way for a reason.</i></font>

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u used acosta and zebiac! u must have been desprate 4 names!!!  i liked the part with the ziti. Mmmm.u were really mean to ron!! saying he was oblivious!!! how rude!!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> We were NOT desperate. What is it with you and the word "desperate"?! Sorry about being mean to Ron, but he kind of is oblivious. Just like someone else we all know. LOL</i></font>

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u spelled trolly w/ an x-tra o, but aside from that, very kool

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanx</i></font>

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when are you does the lilly and james I am so mad at you (just kidding) Try to find out how I am 

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Let's see, who are you? Never mind, I do know. The other story is coming up, so don't worry.</i></font>

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hi jenny great starting page talk to you at lunchfellow modern marauder  

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> thanx. see you tomorrow.</i></font>

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pretty kool. keep them coming.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> We will. Keep reading!</i></font>

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hey this rox out loud! this story is way kool so far!!! :)

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks, more chapters are on the way. Two chapters are in limbo right now.</i></font>

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omg thats rele good...u should write more

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks, it's good to know that we can write stories. Please keep reading, the next few chapters should be up soon.</i></font>

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