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That's so adorable

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I loved this chapter! I love how you're slowly adding in more characters, more plot, more background, and more personality. Excellent!

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A very nice and sweet start to a story! I like how you have given both background and personality to James and Lily. I can't wait to see where this story leads. :)

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Loved it even though it was short. I just finished your other one today as well. I was looking for Reason to Live, but couldn't find it. I really like your writing style, and I hope you continue to write!

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Just to let you know! I

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Brilliant job! I really love how you had them get together while James was spying on her; although, I'll have to admit I don't think I would've snogged a guy that had just admitted he stared through my bedroom window often. Anyways, I love the ending and how you tied it all up nicely. Great job!
Happy reading,
classicblack

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The 'make sure your tongue isn't poking out' conversation made me smile. And I'm glad that they've finally figured out that they both want to snog each other (well, James already knew that...) Anyway, brilliant job. This is just too cute!
Until next chapter,
classicblack

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Well darn it. Why won't Lily just let James kiss her?! And James really is being pretty stupid with the whole failing Charms act. I still think it's adorable, though. Anways, I love that I know they get together in the end. Wonderful job!
Until next chapter,
classicblack

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Oh James and his desperate attempt to get Lily to like him by using Charms tutoring- too cute ") I loved Sirius trying to talk him out of it. I also love that Lily and Lannie are becoming friends. One thing I don't like is that Lily and James's Heads duties aren't really explained all too clearly. All around, though, great job!
Until next chapter,
classicblack

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This was just great! Well done! I just thought I'd like to say that all my reviews for this story might seem a bit dry and not really full of reaction, but that's because I've read this story so much I don't remember what my initial reaction was. Now I just think: aww this is so adorable ") Anyway, I like the whole Map-stealing-Marauder-disappointment thing with Lily. Nice chapter!
Until next chapter,
classicblack

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"So-I-can-change!" What any girl wouldn't do to have a guy change just so he could be with her. Great chapter! I liked the Lannie-James conversation; I always like when authors put characters that the protagonist doesn't know very well into conversations with said protagonists just so they can slap some sense into them. Well done!
Until next chapter,
classicblack

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It kind of annoys me that Lily doesn't have any friends. I mean, in Snape's Worst Memory it clearly states that she has plenty of people to talk to and laugh with after the OWLS, ergo, she has friends. Ah well, I still love this story ")
Until next chapter,
classicblack

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I love how they both wish 'if only life was so kind' but about two totally different things- adorable ") Although I love this story (this is, I think, the third time I've read it and I've finally decided to review), I do still think it's a bit creepy how James watches her get ready for bed. Flattering, but still... Anyways, I love how you began this story. Well done! It's nice to see another perspective of yours of how things could have gone down between James and Lily.
Until next chapter,
classicblack

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james is slightly too stalkerish in this.

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it's very different than living life. but good.

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I loved this chapter, it was really well-written.  It was a little strange to read the part about a guy named Stebbins, because I have a character named that in a story I'm writing... I love how the Marauder's seem so real.  They seem like guys you could find at my school.

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This chapter was great!  I'm a huge Living Life fan, and I was really excited when I saw that you had another Lily/James pairing.  I can't want to continue reading.  I think you're a really excellent writer!

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Adorable! :D me likey very, VERY much.

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Really nice story! Cute! Very different from Living Life, but in a good way, both stories are brilliant :)
I really enjoy reading your stories, keep it up! 
The only suggestion I have about this story is that maybe you should try to make James seem more like..more like anguy? I don't know if you understand what I'm saying... There's something that reminds me that it's a girl trying to write in a boy's point of view.. I really liked hpw you portrayed him, but that's just the only sugestion I have.

Besides that, everything was great! 10/10

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I didn't know you wrote another story.
It is wonderful.
I thoroughly enjoyed it :) 
I am also a follower of your other story so in your spare time update?
Groovy, lovely chapter keep writing :)

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And they lived happily ever after...well, almost. But wait! So, it was pretty much LANNIE'S fault that they ended up together, which means its HER fault that Harry was born. YAY LANNIE! Except, I know that she is fake and everything but you know. . . .
*Sighs and trails off*

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Your ending was beautiful!!!

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I love this chapter but when will you update living life? I cant wait to read it again if you posted another chapter of it.

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I love your writing and your characters! My fave quotes from the story are probably, '“Sure you do.” Sirius said easily, sliding the bowl of roasted potatoes towards him and dumping some on his plate. “Potatoes are good for the soul.”' I LOVE SIRIUS SO MUCH!

Aaand, Lannie has her awesome moments too, 'Oh, and if you and Snape ever do get married, I hope your kids get his filthy hair.'

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this story and living life are my two personal faves i dunno why but ive always kinda understood why lily was so harsh with james... eh well love is cruel ey
p.s i cant find reason to live i looked EVERYWHERE did u delet it or somethin pps im writin my first story called clueless and im not sure wether its good so if u see it gimme ur opinion thnx yorkgal xx

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