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mmm chain eh? wonder what that was! I thought the scene with Snape and the Dursley's was well done, though I had hoped for a little more action :p.

I seriously thought Snape was going to curse Harry when he asked him for food. Snape cooking, LOL!

great chapter, onto the next!

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My first impressions from this chapter were that Snape is such a fantastic character both to write and to read.  From him can come everything from the most introspective, thought provoking statements, to his infamous and hilarious sarcasm.  Some of my favorite examples of it in this chapter were: 
"with all the patience of an irate hippogriff"
"a patented Iâ€™m-better-than-you-why-must-I-waste-my-precious-time-in-your-presence glare.
and 
"â€˜A cup of tea never hurt anyone.â€™ Judging by the noises coming from Snape he heartily disagreed with that comment."

Next, I wanted to wring Harry's neck when he was at Grimmauld Place.  Lets see, Snape tells you, in very specific terms NOT to go looking for Lupin, and what does Harry do? Of course, he ends up finding Lupin.  Arghhh
I'm not angry with you, but at the character, because that is exactly what canon Harry would do in that situation, and that frustrates me to no end.  Finally, "Queen of Cliffhangers", that was quite a good one there with the timeturner.  I wonder.

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You have hit the proverbial nail right on the head with your observations on Snape. He is an intriguing character to write and read. Most of my favourite pieces of fanfiction have him as the main character. I love writing him too, as although he can be difficult, there is something satisfying about venting through him.

And I often want to wring Harryâ€™s neck. The hardest part of writing this fic is that I do not like Harry, but didnâ€™t want that to reflect too obviously in my story. I find myself constantly questioning whether he truly is that much of an idiot in canon, or on the flipside, if I am over compensating and making him too intelligent/mature than he actually is. It is wonderful to hear you say canon Harry would do the same thing, as that is exactly what I wanted to hear =)

And Queen? Do I get a Crown, and if so can it be sparkly ^^.

o.O what the hell? who did the footsteps belong to?? :O

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Ah, you will just have to wait and see =P

You seem to have Snape down to perfection. I can practically hear him snapping and sneering these lines - poor Harry! At least you show that he can irritate his tyrranical professor in return. Good stuff!

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I am so pleased you like Snape, as he is the main focus of this story. To know that you can actually hear him is wonderful, and exactly the sort of thing I was aiming for. And we couldn't have anything else from Harry =)

Again, just amazing. Great job. The interaction between Snape and Harry is perfect. Good job.

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*blushes* Snape and Harry are great fun to write. Thank you very much.

Yes! I finally got to read a scene between Vernon and Snape. I've always wanted to read/write a scene like that and this one was exactly how I imagined it! I felt kinda bad for Harry, I think even in our world there are situations where you feel kinda odd asking knowing someone is going to react like that.

I know this is totally going to contradict what I said earlier about chapter length but due to the fact that it is not as noticable in this fic I would have liked to see perhaps inside Snape's head as he's talking to Vernon.

As stated before chapter length does not scare me, so I will be back, though I will be taking a break. My younger brother wanted me to read him some of my fan fiction(He's so cute  like that) Till later on, Adieu -Valhalla Adonis-Snape

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There are so many overdone scenes involving Vernon and Snape which I really didn't want to recreate, so I am pleased to know you liked this one. The whole thing was something of a lose/lose situation for Harry though.

The first two chapters of this fic were actually written almost a year before the rest of it. I started it, and then abandoned it for a while before picking up again on chapter 3. There is a lot more stuff inside people's heads as you go on.

I'm incredibly happy to know chapter length doesn't scare you, since it does so many. And I can't deny you the occasional break (although I am plotting ways to attach you to your PC until you've finished this). Cute younger brothers are an allowable excuse though =). Thank you again for your thoughts and comments.

Youâ€™ve done really well here capturing Snapeâ€™s character.  There is something so distinctive about his speech and mannerisms, and you really managed to reflect that in your writing of him.  I also liked the added humor in this chapterâ€¦there are some really great one-liners tucked away here.  My favorite has to be about the family pet and the ball.  Great job with those.  And the endingâ€¦got to keep those readers wanting more!  You have a good sense for when and how to conclude chapters, something I know from personal experience isnâ€™t as easy at it sounds.  On to chapter 3!

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Thank you, thank you, thank you. I love the character of Snape, and it is always nice to hear that I have written him well. I agree, his speech is distinctive, and I do try to reflect that. With a lot of my other fics I have stuck to one genre, so I have tried to even it out a bit more in this one, hence the snippets of humour. I amhoping to achieve something a little more balanced than a outright angst or action fic. And chapter endings are something that always just seem right to me...I get to a point where it wants to end, so it does. I do sometimes have to fiddle with it though to get it just right, and I agree, sometimes striking that perfect balance can be a nightmare. Thank you again for another wonderful review =)

i really enjoyed this chapter - it was comical (harry's boredom had me grinning stupidly), dark and mysterious (i'm looking forward to finding out who put the chain around his neck).  i'm fond of snape, the way you've portrayed him.  his annoyance at harry is almost cute, and i love how aggravated he got when mrs figg offered him tea!  i'm not sure how in character it was for him to be so open about how he felt superior to muggles and squibs, though.  i feel like he would keep that to himself.  

everything is great, as it was in your first chapter.  i just have one piece of constructive criticism, and it's that you could benefit from going over your writing to make sure that your punctuation makes sense and that you're not confusing homonyms.  :)  you use often "all right" instead of "alright", and "to" instead of "too".

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This is gthe first novel length fic I've written where I've really tried to mix in all genres at some point. Normally I write straight out angst, so trying to work in humour without it turning out stupid was new for me and I am glad it worked. As to keeping the bit about his feeling to himself, I don't really konw how to phrase my counter-arguement. Yes, I agree, he does keep things to himself, but I never really saw this so much as a declaration of feelings as I did just a simple comment to shut Harry up and stop him asking annoying questions.

I shall endeavour to check over my punctuation ( I like to think it gets better as I go on, but that may just be wishful thinking.) As to the all right thing, I have come to the conclusion that this is a British thing. I was always taught at school that the word alright does not exist, and is purely laziness on the part of writers. It is a lesson I have held on to even until now. I shall kep an eye on those too's though. Thank you for taking the time to review.

Again, fantastic work.  It's good to see that Harry is stupid enough to test the room of a werewolf, and I do love reading great exchanges between he and Snape.

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I am so relieved you still like this. I am anxious (and excited) to know whether you think the storyline is original, and glad you enjoy the characters. Thank you for taking the time to read and review.

Snape seems pretty annoyed and irritated in this chapter. Nonetheless, I like him. Onto the next chapter.... :)

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I am glad you like him. Thank you very much.

"Were he any other man Snape would swear that his sweet tooth would be his ultimate undoing, as he chuckled emptily; Dumbledore, the greatest Wizard known to the Wizarding World felled by a Lemon Sherbet. An obviously most evil and malevolent Lemon Sherbet, but a Lemon Sherbet nonetheless." Hahahahahahahahahahahahhaha this quote just made my day. =D Very excellent beginning so far, I hope it continues. yayay *goes off to read next chapter*

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*giggles* I am so pleased you liked that line, as it is one of my favourites too. Thank you for taking the time to review.

One of the things I always thought striking about Snape was his conservation of speech -- how he could speak volumes in very, very few words. You must think that too, 'cause I just love the dialogue you've given him. Very succinct and oh so subtle, even his little barbs. It usually has one getting his jokes about 10 beats after they're said. Very cool.

I just crowed when you had Harry spending many moments feeling dreadful about invading Lupin's privacy. I love that little guy to death, but he's such a twerp sometimes; seems to have missed out on the 'caution/common sense' gene, isn't he? The sentence where you have him being frozen in place because of the guilt was lovely; haven't we all felt that way at one time or another??

Again, your writing astounds me. I'm having a ball reading this!

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Oh yes, I definately feel that way about him too. His humour lies in his subtle sarcasm, his way of insulting people that can leave them not even sure he really has. I am so pleased you think I have managed it.

And Harry a complete twerp sometimes. I'm not overly fond of him myself, and he definately lacks that gene...along with the one for foresight and consequences. I am incredibly pleased you are enjoying this so far, as I am kind of proud of this fic so far, and its nice to know others are also enjoying it.

Siren, I really enjoyed the mild humour that is hidden throughout this chapter.  Such as: "Snape muttered with all the patience of an irate hippogriff" I had to laugh out loud.  As well as Harry craving the conversational skills of a blast ended skrewt.  I really liked this chapter and I was exicted to read that Lupin was there.  But, then I was disappointed that he was a werewolf and would not be speaking to Harry.  See what you've done??  You've gone and involved the reader in the story.  I was really getting into it.  =)   

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> I am incredibly pleased that you enjoyed the humour in this, as I was worried it was too mild and perhaps just tedious to read. And I'm sorry about Lupin, but he had to be a wolf. He will, no doubt, get the chance to talk to Harry again at some point though =). I am honoured you are getting into it though...I find that to be very high praise indeed *blushes*</i></font>

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Aw, too bad it won't be updated until after the release. You're leaving us on a cliffhanger for 2 1/2 months x_X Oh well, enjoyed this chapter, and Snape had to cook =D But I wonder who that mysterious man was...great job.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> I know, it was a very long time to have left it. I feel rather guilty about doing so now, since it is following the original story anyway, but HBP kind of surprised (and disappointed) me. Hope you enjoy the rest also.</i></font>

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Oh wow, this was great. I really love the way your write. It's so rich and detailed. I was afraid to move when Harry entered the master bedroom -I was so anxious to know what would happen, even though at the same time I wanted to slap Harry for being so damn irresponsible! Several of Snape's comments made me giggle. Sometimes he's just so much like a little, angry child that's feeling misunderstood. It's nice to know that he can do a little cooking, though. And that cliffhanger... Chilling! By the way, I just noticed that you haven't updated this story for quite a while and I wonder if you'll continue this? I would like to know how it ends ;).

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thankyou very much for both your lovely reviews. I am so glad you are enjoying it. I do most definately plan to continue, since I have the whole fic mapped out and sitting in a happy little file on my computer. Unfortunately I have come to accept the fact that there is no way I could hope to finish before the release of HBP. So before I got too immersed in the whole thing I made the decision to postpone the rest until after the release with the hope that what I have written so far will be easy to alter to fit a seventh year fic, and I won't have to worry about any canon issues for a while. Unless, of course, she kills Snape. *clutches heart and faints* but she would never do that to me...I have faith, and a pitchfork standing by just in case. Thankyou again.</i></font>

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oh my god. WRITE, WRITE ,WRITE!!!that was bloody brilliant.!!!

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Wow, I luv ur story. u r so talented at riting angst!! update plz!!

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now that, my friend, is a cliff hanger!!!! bloody interesting though, and really well written, it flows exceptionally well, good job

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Wow, this was simply amazing!  The scene where Harry explores the house and finds Remus kept me on the edge of my seat, wondering what would happen.  I also really liked when Snape made the soup for Harry, it's amusing to think that Snape knows a spell to make a bowl of soup.  This is a great story, and I hope you continue it soon!  :-)

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I thought this was a good attempt but and it is a big but  ( bearing in mind I know how hard it is to write a story and with you having such a great response to your previous chapter ),I think you would off either being better kept as a one shot or take this off and review this  chapters .I found it hard to get thought o be honest .I hope you understand I am not trying to put you down because you writing skill are very good but simply give my view  on the chapter ,if you have any problems please feel free to contact me though I am sure you wonâ€™t; thanks

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Darn you and your cliff hangers!!!....Amazingly good! Please update soon!

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Wow -- that was amazing.  I loved the description of the intruder.  I'm dying to know who it is!  Thanks for this brilliant chapter.  I hope more will be up soon!

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I am throughly enjoying this. Once again extremely well written, characters all spot on canon. I particularly liked the  "Not some family pet you can throw a ball for" comment, made me chuckle. I look forward to your next update.

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Brilliant chapter!! Can't wait for the next and to see what happend at the end of the chapter there! Update again asap! 10/10! :D

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