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Interesting twist, making Lily a Chaser.. I've seen it a couple times before, but I always picture her completely uninterested in Quidditch, and scared of heights. 
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okay answers my question... i always liked remus better than james romantically, so thats good... he must feel worried though in case james hates him...
and the song was awesome and really suited this chapter!!! thanks for that!

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thanks! :)

Oh.  My.  I hope Lily gets it through her head that James is head over heels in love with her.  And this new thing with Remus, interesting, very interesting.

Loved it.

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Thanks!! Keep reading and reviewing!!

wow! i think this chapter was my favorite so far! 
i also think that if you do revise just little areas seem to need revision in the first chapter

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Thanks!  Though I'm surprised you think so. I think the beginning of this fic is embarrassingly bad, looking back on it now. But I did start it over two years ago so I guess that's natural.  Please keep reading and reviewing! Thanks again.

If you want reviews, you shouldn't write a story that makes people want to keep reading!!! ;) nice story

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Ah, but then no one would read it and I wouldn't get reviews anyway.  Haha...Thanks!!!</i></font>

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LOVELY!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Merci!</i></font>

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So far, this chapter is my favorite.  It seems like Lily is becoming a bit more fond of James.  I feel bad for her, because if she does decide to be James' friend, of course that will escalalte to more then a friendship, and that would hurt Remus, who's feeling seem to be a bit more fragile then James'.  I can't wait to see what will happen with the Remus/James/Lily Love Triangle.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thank you, though I can't really remember what went on in this chapter.  The Quidditch match, right?  Yes, then, Lily is letting herself see him in a different light, I guess.  Wait and see with the triangle....Though we all know who really gets together, it's still fun.  Thanks, your reviews are but better this time.  : )</i></font>

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AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH I LOVE IT! This whole Remus Lily thing. Do you know what your doing.. well of course you do and i think it's brilliant! This is great! Oh man!  I love the game! It got me all excited and emotional (in a good way, not like crying or anything, tee hee).    "Then Sirius, Remus, and Peter found her and Sirius, taking her by surprise, lifted her up and spun her around. She laughed, too happy to mind. Peter shyly commended her and when Remus hugged her lightly and gave her his congratulations, she blushed deeply." I love that it's so cute. You are an awesome writter  Until next chapter!    

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Aww, THANKS!  The match was fun to write.  I like making Lily a little less uptight sometimes...especially when she's happy like after the match.  Thank you!!</i></font>

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Another good chapter!! I must say you did a good job describing the Quidditch game! It sounded like an actual game. It seemed pretty intense for only the first game. I like the talk Lily and James have in the locker rooms. I liked how James leaves Lily hanging with the " It still dosn't leave me much hope..." It makes me excited for when James just confesses his love to Lily. Haha. Of course I can't wait to see what happens with Remus though. I imagined James would be mad at Remus though for going after Lily. Is it just because they're best friends? It'd be kind of fun reading about a fight between those two, I think. Well we'll see what happens...NEXT CHAPTER!!!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Haha...Thank you!  Glad you liked the Quidditch game and the conversation afterward.  As for Remus....well, a lot of people think that James would be mad a him but I don't think James would be too worried.  I get the impression that he's extremely loyal to his friends but don't get down....there will be plenty of fights between the characters throughout the fic.  THANKS for the review!!!!</i></font>

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loved it! I thought it was wonderful.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Aw, wow. Thanks for reviewing!!</i></font>

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I didn't think it could get better then the third! WOW!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> WOW! I think I love you! ....so what am I so afraid of? Oh, sorry.  Gotta love the partridges!!</i></font>

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hehe...good job!!  it gets better each chapter!!  eh, please don't pair each marauder w/ lily's friends b/c it's cliched.  though, i don't have much say do i? ^ ^  onwards and upwards! ~Pomie

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Don't worry. I definitely wasn't going to pair all Lily's friends with each Marauder...that would be so... BLAH, eh? THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ALL YOUR REVIEWS!!!</i></font>

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i think your story is good but mbye you should make couples.like; lily&james sirius&summer tara&remus di&peter

<i><font color=#000080>Author's Response: Yes, yes but I'm not going to hurry things! And Di and Peter...well, I hate Peter to say the least so don't count on that pairing.  Have you noticed the lack of Peter dialogue? I just can't stand to even write about him.  Thanks for reviewing!!!!!!</i></font>

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"you were incredible today." :-)

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your story is great! please keep writing it!! you very talented writer and the last chapter i just read was awsome so please hurry with the next one:D

<i><font color=#000080>Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! I'll update as soon as possible...it makes me feel like it's worth it thanks to your reviews!</i></font>

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plz update!!!!!!!

<i><font color=#000080>Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing!!  I love to hear from you!!</i></font>

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