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This was probably one of my favorite chapters, it reveals so much and contains so many lighter moments while still showing Nellie’s pain but THIS ENDING WHAT

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I can't believe it. . . I. Can. NOT. Bloody well believe it . . . you, you most EVIL of authors! Again you are the evil of evils for making me love your characters so much! I shall not forgive you . . . for about ten minutes. Yes! Ten ENTIRE minutes. Until the last chapter, I’m reminding myself that I trust you... I trust you...I trust you.If I keep saying it over and over, does it work better? You won’t break my heart too much.I believe none of them will die, I have to!! There’s a way to end this.I’m listening to Love story by Taylor Swift over and over to remind myself that there’s light at the end of this tunnel.  I’m in awww this story’s so… I don't know... impressive. You’re a goddess.

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Sorry sorry sorry!! But the last chapter is now posted so I HOPE you will still have trust in me!! Listen to sad songs it'll help (kidding!). Thank you so so much for reviewing and I hope you enjoy the last chapter!

Thank you so much for updating ! There's one side of my brain that is begging you to slow down and the other one impatient and beyond excited to read the last chapter ! It's a very disturbing feeling.

I'm really happy Flynn/Mia and Willow/Al got together, they absolutely deserve it. Every scene was perfectly set from Flynn's confession to the Extendable Ears, all the feelings were there. Nellie's selflessness shows - It's bittersweet watching Nellie be so happy for them because she deserves that too. 

I think no matter what it is, you write and handle every situation and emotion with grace, wisdom, intelligence and an undeniable talent for writing. You've written every character realistically, uniquely and with flaws and that is very rare and therefore impressive. Like Calliope, she's absolutely evil and prejudiced but she's not just that, she's smart and well she's human. She does convey a legitimate warning or we can unknowingly call it a veiled advice to Nellie and that's that "Fear is power in life". Logically, she thinks about the curse right away because as long as it terrifies her ( and that's completely okay and lawful, who wouldn't be) and she surrenders to that fear, it'll always always hold that power over her.

About that ending. Honestly, I thought about that happening a lot but it was mainly out of curiosity - i just foolishly thought Nellie almost died so many times, WHAT IF James was the one who almost died for once ? But I didn't quite expect it to be in THAT situation at THAT point in the story. I feel like you have this idea that if there are lots of chapters left, there is time to fix things but with ONE left, anything could happen. If I go over this chapter : 
- By definition, this curse requires an equal sacrifice interpreted for years as death. Nature DOES always require a balance but "sacrifice" is a rather loose term, what could you "trade" for someone's life - magic ? There's definitely going to be a price to pay. The original text should definitely hold some answers if translated correctly but we're running out of time here and that's the biggest issue. And there’s no certitude about the outcome of the flashes ? Like Katria’s father, maybe he wasn’t hurt at all (well James clearly will be) but the flashes are scary and convincing nonetheless. 
- Celeste is indeed a Seer, and she seems to be convinced that Nellie's going to die, she even says "the curse will end with you"(I mean it potentially could be interpreted differently too) BUT she hasn't seen potential changes to the future that Nellie could make. 
- You said to remember that "the After isn't set in its course without her". For me ( I might be completely wrong) the loophole is there, the Woman is part of reality and " creates a future" but once there's the sacrifice ( death in all the previous cases but maybe not in Nellie's, we can only pray), she purposefully creates a gap in her own reality/visions that allows the future to change. Potentially, if you could replicate that gap in any way, you can allow it to change.If the Unspeakables believe there's a way to tweak the flashes, it might be time to try that out but they don't seem like the nicest bunch and again we're fighting against time here. Just thinking about it gives me anxiety.  
- I both love and hate the "nous nous retrouverons dans les étoiles" part, yes indeed the stars are nice but Earth is not that bad too. 

I've said it in a previous review, but I'll say it again, I have no idea what's going to happen but I sincerely wish that if, God forbid, Nellie dies, she doesn't leave her loved ones too confused, and not understanding why she did it because I often forget about it but only Scorpius knows about the condition of the curse. Especially James, there would be nothing worse than him being left again without any explanation permanently this time.You've brushed on this subject often and the guilt would be too much to handle. Everyone goes through loss differently but guilt always comes with grief, the intensity'll differ considering the situation but it'll always be there especially in Nellie's situation. Moreover, I think it's different when a lover does that for you, love is love but you don't love your family and a partner the same, and chapter 28 kind of hinted at this particular chapter ending, come on "I whispered what he had said to me earlier - something that somehow held the value of forgiveness and sacrifice and commitment", I was blissfully unaware back then haha. That's true love that you wrote about so beautifully, it goes beyond 'teenage' love or simple infatuation. 

I am from France. That's so cool that you're from Marseille, I've been there a few times but I lived in Paris before moving, some of my family is still there so I visit often. I had a hunch that you at least spoke french, when I read how well the french references and passages were done

I sound very depressing and I don't even know what I wrote in this review, sorry (I've been sick for a few days and fell asleep in the middle of writing this haha ). It contains every element to be an extraordinary Shakespearean tragedy because you’re that good, but I still have hope it’ll be a tragicomedy - I’m bringing back my fading high school memories just for you. Regardless the level of tragedy and sadness the last chapter holds, it's undeniable that this story is an absolute masterpiece, it practically vibrates with powerful emotions and lessons  about- love, fear, determination, loss, friendship, love, pain, more love. Everything rings true in vivid color and poetic words. Thank you, thank you, thank you, I'll never say it enough ! xx

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Just to start -SORRY I did NOT slow down since I'll be travelling soon so yes - the final chapter is POSTED (how weird is that?!). 

As usual here's the response list:

1. SO bittersweet watching everyone that belongs together get together and seeing Nellie off to the side suffering unnecessarily (like at the Cup party)
2. Calliope IS human just as every other character (Esmeralda, Andrew Burke, Katria etc). All of the disliked characters still have stories and compassion is a powerful thing!
3. The cliffhanger is SUCH a difficult point to be in - are there any ways out??? With one chapter there aren't too many options. 
4. Sacrifice is definitely a loose term - but the flashes do indeed come true (that is, until they don't...you were really close on one of your previous reviews)
5. Ahhh."The curse will end with you" COULD be interpreted differently!
6. You're so so so close with the "creates the future" stuff!!
7. Hahah I agree the Earth is wonderful; Nellie Burke should stay far away from the stars
8. Nellie would try her best not to leave everyone confused or hurt but she knows that hurt better than anyone; there will be inevitable pain if she passes and warns people and that idea alone makes it almost easier for her to make a decision about her own life
9. Guilt is a huge part of grief and you better believe that James would feel it so so so heavily
10. My mum actually grew up in Paris (the rest of her family from Marseille) so I've lived in both for a time! Woohoo! 
11. I hope you feel better!!! And thank you so so so much again - your reviews have seriously made all the difference not only in this story but truly in my confidence as a writer. thank you thank YOU - I will never say it enough! 

xx Ella

dun-duh-dun! 

i've been reading your story for quite some time now... and I always berate myself for never leaving you a review, I'm awful I know.. so, i'm doing it now. Just wanted to tell you that i think your story is the best. I have a great time reading it, every time, and i always wait anxiously for your updates. Its pretty evident that its very well thought too. And I really like your writing style, it's amazing. 

Now now, I have that awful feeling in my gut, a wonderful installment in a wonderful tale. It only saddens me that the story must end so soon, your reference to Romeo and Juliet is terrifying me.. I can only beg you for mercy now and anxiously wait for the next. Would it help my case if I said that James is absolutely my favorite character in this story and Nellie's a close second?! 

Sel

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Ah - thank you so much for taking the time to write a review!! Your words truly mean so so much to me and I'm so glad you've liked my writing style and the story! I'm also sad that the story has ended (yes, HAS - the final chapter is up now) but I am excited for everyone to read it! It would help your case...but James is also my favourite and I just sentenced them both to death so I'm not sure how much that'll do!

Thank you again for such a lovely review!

That was absolutely perfect and beautiful and I hate you for cutting off there. You're like the Voldemort of fanfiction. Wicked and evil and laughing at our suffering. *sob sob sob* My poor James and Nellie. 

You have me sitting here with tears raining down my cheeks. It's raining again, but worse.I'm so nervous and freaked out. I hope you update soon and at the same time I don’t cuz I don’t want it to end.I want Jellie to survive SO bad. I want them to be okay. I want them to live. Someone else mentioned they needed therapy, well i’m IN, GROUP THERAPY, we’re ALL going cause clearly we all need it!

I'm blown away by your story! Please post the epilogue, post your grocery list, ANYTHING to keep this story going and for us to read your beautiful writing again and again!

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Weirdly enough this is not the first time someone has called me Voldemort on this site! I HAVE updated soon so you can see what happens to the characters you are rooting for! I can't believe this is the final chapter of this story but I am SORRY you need therapy from it! I hope you enjoy what's to come and thank you so so much for reviewing!
xx Ella

You’re clearly on a roll, your story is ALL i’ve been thinking about all week! I check it everyday! It’s 3 am and I currently can’t sleep, I’ve been through every possible emotions! You are so eloquent and I commend you. The way you describe love and pain and sacrifice and every scene is heart-wrenching poetry.I'm terrified. Nothing has even happened yet regarding the last flash of the After and I'm already on the verge of crying because this feels like the onset of tragedy. Who gives a vial of whatever that is to commit suicide to someone, couldn’t she help her find another way instead of giving her the means to pull something like that? Again it absolutely is the setting of tragedy, there’s always something-someone tragically ruining all potential for a happy ending. Anyway, it’s as great as ever, another beautiful and heartbreaking chapter in your amazing story! I’m now really anxious for the next one!

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Ah I'm so glad! Thank you so so much - your words truly mean so much to me! Maybe it's the onset of a tragedy, but there is beauty in tragedy so I guess you'll just have to read the last chapter, which is now posted (sob!). Thank you again for your incredible reviews every time and I hope you enjoy the ending of the story!
xx Ella

Again, it's hard to form a coherent thought right now so I'm just going to go into things in order : 

- Her dad has really been protecting her all along.I’m so glad she knows that now!

- You never introduced a purely unexplainable evil character and that’s really great and Calliope is part of that, ultimately I hope she takes care of herself.

- As always, love Nellie’s scenes with her friends and how not to love Mia and Flynn and Willow and Al, they’re delightful, so so glad they’re together.

- James part one! It’s hard to see both James and Nellie hurting so much, they’re really messed up at the moment! Of course, James would be much better if he knew the whole truth but it’s clearly not over. You've definitely got a great handle on expressing emotion in your writing

- Ultimately Kato is a really nice friend and that’s a fact.

- I keep imagining the scene with Celeste "spreading her arms out, palms up to the night sky like a prayer" and that freaked me out so much. She gives me the creeps. There’s clearly another way to break the curse but it still seems to be a sacrifice.. She’s a Seer so she knows what’s going to happen and that alone is terrifying 

- James part two! I swear my heart is still racing, I’m not gonna think about possible deaths right now. All i know that was an awesome chapter! And I stand by what I said when I said I’m sure it would be an epic conclusion and it’s clearly heading that way. 

- Noah

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Wow thank you so much for this intricate review! Nellie's dad has definitely been protecting her and I'm sure that knowledge will give her some closure and understanding about the quality of her childhood. No one is truly truly evil (besides like Voldemort lol) so I thought it was an important point to make in this story! I love Nellie's friends and especially James, and as for the sacrifice...the last chapter is up so you're free to find out if your theories are correct!

Thank you so so much for reviewing again! xx Ella

This may be stupid but couldn’t Nel obliviate her visions? If she doesn’t remember.. but I’m not sure it’s a good idea idk,i'm sure the curse is stronger than that but I'm DESPERATE over here. Whatever this last one contains, I’m NOT ready for it. But. Seriously.
Amazing job. I keep going back to chapter ONE and it’s all coming back full circle : the book, the mystery woman, the purebloods, her father’s work, Nellie’s mother. Everything slowly unfolded BUT ALL the hints were THERE packed in the FIRST CHAPTER.This isn’t over yet but it's so rare to find a fic where you actually CANNOT GUESS who the key members to a plot are going to be, or even WHAT that plot might be.I CANNOT WAIT for the last chapter  of this story!You're cruel to save THIS for the last chapter.But.Ingenious. Seriously, applause.

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Hm, I'd never thought of that...but once they happen they happen (all of this is answered in the last chapter which is up now!). Thank you so so much for reviewing and I'm glad you found all of the Easter Egg's in the first chapter!! Thank you again!!

So..Remember when I said I would be in therapy by the time this story ends? Do you know when the last chapter is gonna be posted so I can schedule my appointment now? I gotta be prepared.

All I can say is, Oh My God!NOT JAMES! OH GOD! (wail cry) NOT NELLIE NO! HE HAS TO LIVE AND SHE HAS TO LIVE AND GET MARRIED IN A BIG OBNOXIOUS CEREMONY AND LIVE FOREVER! OH GOD NO! THEY ARE TOO YOUNG FOR THIS! I KNOW ROMEO AND JULIET WERE LIKE FOURTEEN BUT STILL THAT IS NOT AN EXCUSE!

I should've know, I was warned but it was a story of "Shakespearean INSULTS" not of tragedies! I can't wait for this epic ending! I still love you and your story! I need to take a deep breath and calm down

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Please invoice your therapy bills to me as I feel responsible!! The next chapter is now so I hope you have someone good lined up! Thank you SO SO much for reading and I really hope you enjoy it!!!

Ps : Idk what witchcraft this is but my MANY exclamation points don’t appear and I NEED you to know I put them to emphasize my pleading and begging!! Love this heartbreaking story

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Haha I'm glad!!

I’m sorry ..WHAT WAS THAT?! 

You have NO right to mix all those new couples getting together and this ending! 

Please don’t kill either of them!! I’ll give you anything you want! This CANNOT end like Romeo and Juliet. I mean if one dies, it’ll be Nellie she won’t let James die if she can do something about it but there HAS to be another way, Celeste hinted at it! You can’t do THAT PLEASE! Your name should be Ella Shakespeare, because you’re so good! BUT don’t TORTURE us PLEASE!

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I guess you'll have to wait and see what the final chapter holds...and it's up now! (But of course Nellie would never let James die...) Maybe I will change my name to Ella Shakespeare! Thank you for reviewing sORRY about the torture!

I cannot believe this. Are both James and Nellie going to die? Is that what’s you mean by Romeo and Juliet? But then electromagnets will save them? Either way, I cannot wait to find out what happens. Your writing was just as perfect as usual!

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I guess you'll have to ready the final chapter (UP NOW)! Thanks for reviewing!

I will just have to tell you how unimaginablely horrible it is to read your story. Every time I check if there is a new chapter, and I hope with all my heart that there isn't (well..deep down not really). For if there is one; oh, I must read it right away, I must travel into this world of suspense and love and friendship again, there is no choice in the matter. It is killing me. Not the suspense in waiting, that is the bliss in between with no new agonising turns and discoveries, but the bit pent up in every chapter. And in spite of it - I can not bloody stop.

Why am I talking like that?! What’s wrong with me?! I don’t believe you when you say you didn’t cast an imperio on this! Remember they are Unforgivables! Azkaban's waiting for you girl.Sorceress.Just kidding. I don't want you to go there darling.Your words are magical and so is your talent.

This chapter had me sitting on the edge of my seat. All the tension and the intensity and lighter moments. evil cliffhanger. Can you hear my heart pumping? My poor nerves! You just can’t let them catch a break can you?!

I always think of chapter 22 as the depressing-go cry on the kitchen floor-hauntingly beautiful chapter.The last chapter is number 32 so 10 chapters after chapter 22. That alone has me breathing in a paper bag.

A reference to Romeo and Juliet. My favorite play. In the last chapter. UNEXPECTED! - WOW! - BRILLIANT!

Just imagining James’s family having to lose him…

Just imagining Scorpius, Adam,Mia having to lose Nellie…

Whatever happens, I have faith in you, my dear author! I shall be waiting for the next chapter. I'm going to DIE waiting. (you’ll have one more death on your conscience)

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Despite the fact that I am about to be heartbroken I am in love with this chapter! The way you continue to slowly reveal the darker aspects of the plot line while pacing it with the cute romantic side stories of Albus/Willow and Mia/Flynn (one of my favorite parts of this chapter by far was watching them finally admit feelings for each other!) works really well and gives me too many emotions! Right as everything is coming together perfectly it seems that everything will break. I’m not ready! I guess I will have to be ready for my two favorite characters to die…I have to admit the “Romeo and Juliette” ending that I’m expecting fits the tone and content of this story perfectly but it still breaks my heart! It’s a true testament to the ability of your writing that I can still enjoy the story so much when its making me so sad. xoxo

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OH HELL NO! Please please please please no! Fight Nels! Fight for love and for life and for James! She can't end up like her mother it'll be too sad!!! She's the best character ever, she deserves better! 

I think i'm going to cry. this is horrible (but wonderfully written)

now, you'd better post the next chapter soon, because there has to be a way around this and i don't know how long i can wait without knowing

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Probably the best written, best plot-ed (?), most moving bunch of wonderfulness ever seen in a fanfic. Besides the fact that I love James/OC stories, and you wrote one in an actual believable interesting way, You have suspense (by the way, I am crying they better not die, and if they do the next review will more closely resembled a flame than the raving obsession it is currently showing). I’ll cry again next chapter just because this story’s over (I have tissues prepared).

Yeah, I know, I'm a wimp.

But I love it! I have a lot of love in me and it's currently all focusing on your ultra amazing story! This is one of the first story in a very long time that does what a story is suppose to do- what can be surmised in a quote by Anton Checkov:

"Don’t tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass."

But you've done more than create amazing physical descriptions, but emotional ones as well. It is difficult to play on the characters emotion's as well as the reader, making your characters relatable but you have. And I have nothing but praise for your story. I don't know what else I can say.

Oh my god! sorry for all this rambling, i’m jet-lagged, but it's just so refreshing to find a next gen story that actually has a plot with a beginning middle and end... and makes sense! And involves my favorite character James!

I'm a sap, I know

You’re wonderful

Jules

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