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wow. it was a heartbreaking chapter! Just wonderfully written! Never expected to full on sob for a character but Nel is my only exception and the best one i’ve ever seen

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I’m— my heart is broken for nellie :( 
i love how you’ve managed to unveil the truth, it really speaks for how good your writing is

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Thank you so much!

What an amazing story , I can’t wait for more ! I didn’t expect such a turn of events but it struck deep , it was beautifully written in all its tragic glory, I hope Nellie makes it through , she’s stronger than she realizes ! All the litterary references are spot on , I am so so so excited for the rest, it feels like a new beginning or like the after before haha in this chapter !

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Wow - thank you so so much! Hmm, maybe it does feel like the after before...the new chapter is up now so you can find out for yourself!

Love this fic soo much. Very intriguing I can’t wait to hear more about Nellie and her fam. Love the relationships - want more scorose!!! Xx can’t wait for the new chapter!

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Thank you so much! All that family information will be leaking its way out over the rest of the story, and the new chapter is up now! But while scorose won't really make much of an appearance in this one, stay tuned for chapter 24 - you'll get heaps of it!

Wow! I haven't reviewed before but I thought that I should let you know that I really love this story and that it's so well done! Nellie makes me so mad sometimes that she pushes everyone away but I'm glad that she has James even if he drives her crazy mad half of the time. I was surprised about Nellie's mom for sure! I had thought previously that she just left them, but no she did the whole thing! Hopefully you will shed more light on Nellie's family and the significance of her birthday and the cryptic message her dad gave her! Great job!

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Thank you so so much! Nellie is definitely frustrating sometimes but hopefully over the next few chapters (new chapter out now!) she'll get better at it. Thank you again!!

2 chapters in 1 day, whoohoo! And now that you're delving into the crux of the story and Nell, it brings up so many questions. Is Nellie supposed to inherit her mother's powers of sight and why only when she comes of age? Clearly Adam and Annabelle know. Looks like she has visions of the future but doesn't make prophecies. And was the book her dad referred to the same one Adam picked up in chapter 1? Did her dad not wish her because his accident is terminal and he knew he wouldn't be alive on her birthday? Hopefully she trusts at least some of her friends because she can't do this alone. Did her mom die on her birthday and is it she who Scorp is referring to when he says he misses her too or is he still talking about Astoria? Were Astoria and Veronica sisters? Did Veronica kill herself because her visions were being used by the bad guys who will now be after her daughter? And is the mysterious lady in chapter 1 waiting for Nellie's sight to manifest? Is James a legilimens and can he help Nellie with her visions? And TG for the map or she'd be a goner if he hadn't found her. Would you say we are at 50% of the story or less? I'm sure there's more questions but that's a start for now, lol. Thanks and looking forward to more!

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Wow - this is an allstar review and I'll try to answer as many questions as I can without giving too much away.
1. That will be revealed shortly!
2. The significance of the book HAS been revealed in chapter 23 which has just been posted!
3. Nellie's father IS alive - he only landed himself in the hospital so he could speak with her, and the reason why will come up later.
4. Her mother's death is all answered in chapter 23!
5. Astoria and Veronica were NOT sisters - in the first chapter, I explain that they met at a Hogwarts Beaubaxton event and became best friends. Scorpius and Nellie are technically cousins through their fathers, not mothers, but Astoria and Veronica are so close that they are basically sisters.
6. Reasons why Veronica died will be revealed later!
7. The mysterious lady will also return in due time!
8. James is NOT a legilimens but that would be cool if he were
9. I think we are at actually more than 50% of the story!

Thank you for all your questions and I hope I answered what I could for you!

literally can't wait for the rest of this story! We're 22 chapters in and it feels like we've only just broken the surface on Cornelia's journey. So unbelievably excited for what's to come, I hope all the next chapters come out just as fast as the rest have been! I have to say though, I did have a feeling that her mother committed suicide. I just felt that to a Pureblood, leaving wouldn't be as much of a disgrace because they could find her in a heartbeat and kill her, closing the ordeal and sweeping it under the rug. But I also have a feeling that there is more to Veronica's story than there seems, and that the headaches and Pureblood lifestyle she led were not the only contributing factors. Thank you so much for blessing us with your amazing work, so looking forward to the rest and hopefully you'll have more out this week(?)!!(or ASAP)

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The chapters might slow down a little since I have to go back to university, but a couple of them have already been written so I'll try to get those out. There is definitely more to Veronica's story, which will all be revealed in due time. Thank you SO much for reviewing and the new chapter is out now!

Wow, what a chapter ! It was painful to read in a beautiful way when you’ve grown so attached to Nellie’s character and your story. I was quite naive to think that they would reunite and that her mother would help her accept her power but put in perspective it makes sense that she was dead. To live such a tragedy at such a young age is unbelievable , her friends try to push her to accept it but it’s hard , and i think they don’t give her enough credit, everyone deals with things differently , do they all know that her mom is dead if not the circumstances ? Or just Mia and Scorpius ? 
Thanks for the update , can’t wait for more , it’s a beautiful story !

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Thank you so so much! Your question is actually directly addressed in chapter 23, which is out now! Thanks again for reviewing!

Thank you for updating ! I have to say this chapter was tragically beautiful, worthy of the world's best tragedies, that's how good you are. 

I really didn't expect it. In my head, her mother just left or was driven by something/someone to leave her family, I guess that's true in a way, did her gift drive her to suicide or was it just ruled as one ? I'd like to think that otherwise she was murdered but if someone wants to use your ability, it wouldn't make much sense for them to kill you. But also, Annabelle said " your mother handled it" to Adam, doesn't she know the story or she just didn't mean it this way ? And are Nellie's maternal grandparents just not in the picture or are they deceased ? 

Somehow, the fact that Nellie and Adam's father is so ignorant and uncaring is even harder to swallow, because how do you not support your traumatized children in their grief  and act as a parent should ? Maybe he has his reasons, he did try to sort of explain himself in the previous chapter ? And, let's not even bring up, Esmeralda, I mean the pureblood community is pretty insane and toxic. 

I really feel for Nellie, I hope she learns to be more in touch with her feelings with time and that she'll get through this. I don't know how you can accept a gift that maybe drove your mother to commit suicide ? I'm genuinely curious to know the extent of this gift and is it girls only ? Adam will never have such an ability ? 

Thank you again for this story, it's out of this world !

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Wow - thank you so much for your kind words! The way and reason Nellie's mother died is revealed in chapter 23 (OUT NOW!) and then chapter, like, 30 or something lol. Nellie's maternal grandparents - particularly her grandmother - are deceased, which will ALSO be addressed a bit later (also around that chapter 30ish). But Annabelle's statement will be sort of important a little later when the whole picture starts to come together. And perhaps Nellie's father isn't the villain we think he is. Thank you so much for your review and I hope the next chapter answers a few of your questions!

Well, I can't say I'm surprised, though I have to say I wasn't certain until the end of the chapter. Though if we had know her name earlier the connection with the play would have make it even more obvious.

The way you were always speaking about the weight, the difficulty, the bearing of the power let me though that the power could be intolerable. Being, when I was younger, afflicted with chronic headache it's not that hard to imagine that someone who experienced them even stronger and with "magic" could look at dead as an escape.

Especially if your life is also threatened by group wanting to abuse your ability.

Now, I wonder if their power has something to do about communicating with dead peoples, after all everything begin with the sight of a ghost in the play. That would explain the dream and "hallucination" but it's a really wide guess. I'm just persuade that it has to do with death, being in a way the main theme of Hamlet.

I wonder if Cornelia's dad did marry her mother for investigation at first. Could explain his disabused parental acting. Though I wouldn't bet on it.

The way you handle James through these last chapters is particularly good. If Cornelia becomes darker through the days leading to her birthday she was still in a bright mood the days before. James clearly lacking information on Cornelia' situation, is obviously a bit lost. He still shows some real caring for Cornelia, and I believe it's a really smart way to show us how strong their feeling at getting for each other, without fluff (not that I don't like it sometimes). Nicely done.

Now that we got some light about the Burke family, I have to say I wonder about James' role. If it's not much the case now, at the beginning of the story I really got the feeling that he had some kind of ability too. And the way he's so different from all the others Wotter was for me a proof of a special situation. Or maybe his father gave him some knowledge, after all Harry Potter has to know about mysteries in the magical world, through his position. Also being the descendant of Peverel could have some meaning.

I don't really know but I am quite curious, I guess you may have left some indices in the story that didn't make sense at the time.

I'm really a great fan of your story, I will need to reread it before the next chapter comes out to see all the elements I missed at this point !

Thanks a lot for your wonderful story ! I am going to try to post review from now on, it is such a great work that you are offering us.

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Thank you so much for such an intricate review! To clarify, Nellie's mother's name is Veronica - Ophelia was just a metaphor. The Hamlet focus was also just a metaphor mainly for this chapter and most likely won't be brought up in the same way again! The reasons for Nellie's father marrying her mother will be revealed later but good guess...and while James isn't technically "different" magically, his unique knowledge will come in handy much much later! Thank you again for reviewing and the new chapter is out!

This chapter was heartbreakingly beautiful. Nellie’s jumbled emotions about her mom now make perfect sense. Before, I had always had the impression that she left them. Just walked out one day and never came back. But I guess that was because we’re reading this whole story from Nellie’s POV. It was easier to acknowledge that her mother just left, because she did. Even if that was by taking her own life. The imagery was beautiful and my heart is breaking for Nellie. Based on the description at the end, it even sounds like Nellie was the one to find her and that must have been such a traumatic moment. I’m still unsure as to what Nellie’s gift is, but she almost acted as if she was possessed on that rooftop. As soon as James pulled her back she seemed to understand what she was doing. I’m just left wondering if she was lost in memory or if it had something to do with this gift now that she’s 17. And of course, James. I have to say he truely redeemed himself in this chapter. Not that it excuses his past actions but he truely cares about her and is absolutely heartbroken for her. I can’t help but wonder about the part where Nellie claims she sees all three of them in the stars. That sounds a little ominous to me, now that we know Astoria and Nellie’s mom are both dead. I just want to wrap Nellie up and make her pain go away. But this is something she’s going to have to get through on her own. This was a stunningly gut wrenching chapter and I can’t wait to see what else you have in store for us.

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Wow - thank you for such an amazing and kind review, I appreciate it so so much. I really worked hard on the imagery and to create an almost dreamlike state for Nellie (reasons for that revealed in chapter 23, which is out now), and I did try to make her almost act possessed. James is definitely heartbroken for Nellie and will continue to be more redeeming (I think)! Thank you again for reviewing and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

Wow. Just wow. I never would have guessed, but it definitely explains a lot about Nellie's character. I'm so heartbroken for Nellie and I hope she can get through this in a healthier way. This chapter is the most beautiful and haunting thing I've read, the metaphors and details really shined and conveyed the emotion of the scene so much, and at the same time subtly revealing the plot. I really like the symbolism of the sky and the stars, the imagery was amazing, and the way it came together with the flashback at the beginning of the story was incredible and heartbreaking. I'm so excited for the rest of this story!

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Thank you so so much for your kind words, they really mean so so much. The new chapter is out and I hope you enjoy it! THANK YOU!

Right. So I had a pretty good idea of how this review was going to go until I read that last scene. I think I'm just going to spew out whatever I'm thinking about it now, and then I'll review the rest of the chapter a little later. You're right. I would never have guessed that Nellie's mom took her own life. Obviously we don't know exactly how or why, but this is still a huge revelation. A tragedy of this magnitude can really fu¢k up your life. Poor, poor Nellie. It explains so much about her personality. (I'm going to go through some of the previous chapters to read her reactions again.) I genuinely felt so bad for her, and I wanted to give her a hug (I know that that seems like such a naive, inadequate response but I'm not capable of being more articulate right now). Honestly. What a gut punch. I think I'll leave a couple more  reviews for this chapter once I reread it (sorry if I'm spamming you!) This review is kind of all over the place, but what can I say. It's all Chapter 22's fault.

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Nellie has definitely been messed up by this tragedy even if she doesn't want to admit it! This chapter is the literal definition of a gut punch so take all the time you need! Thank you for reviewing though and I'm sure some of your questions will be answered in chapter 23 which has just been published!

Oh my God. I have no words. Perhaps one of the most beautiful, intricate, well done chapters I've ever read. My mind is blown and holy mother of God I didn't see that coming. Don't even know what to say. Brilliant - you are brilliant. Please write an actual book. Thank you.

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Omg, THANK YOU and thank you for reviewing!! New chapter out now!

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