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Chapter: The Third Task | Story: What If

Glad you made this part fast...I wouldn't like having to reread it haha loved it

Author Response

Great job on the third task. I loved how Cedric's Boggart was a Blast-Ended Skrewt and the little conversation they had afterwards. So Cedric is alive (for now). I have to continue reading to see what happens next!

Author Response

Thanks! I thought this wasn't one of my best chapters as I felt I rushed through the task a bit fast. I'm glad you liked it nonetheless.

Oh, I liked this chapter a lot.  It's another one of my favorites.  I loved the action.  It was fast paced, so it felt like they had one problem after another, just the way they should.  Your descriptions were great too.  I just wanted to keep reading!  Great job.

A few little word or typing mistakes:
That illusion was scattered by Professor Dumbledore who had raised from the staff table - I think you mean shattered?  And raise should be risen.
His injured leg bend - should be bent

Author Response

Thanks for your comments, especially the one about my descriptions, because I have some trouble with that. I love writing dialogue and find that quite easy, but I realize that I could describe more and better.

Thanks for the tips about the language. They're really helpfull.

I hope you keep enjoying the story as it progresses.

Teddy

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