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Chapter: We Can Win This | Story: What If

That was another great chapter... I love it.

Author Response

Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying the story.

I loved how you wrote Sirius in this chapter. Joking that he broke of the habbit of killing people seems just like him. So they are already training for the third task. It's moving rather quick. Great work!

Author Response

Thanks for your review!

A very enjoyable chapter.  I liked all of it.  The dialogue was all good, and I really liked Sirius' line 'broke off the habit'.  Nice bit of humor, and I think it's just how Sirius would say it.  I enjoyed the scene with Dumbledore too.  He's one of my favorite characters from the books, and you've got him in character.  You did another great job on this chapter!  The descriptions were all good, and it was a very pleasant read.

One little spelling mistake - passed Dervish and Banges - should be past.

Author Response

You actually named two characters that I really love writing. As for Dumbledore, I think he'll seem a bit different in this story than in the books, I'm afraid. Mainly because he's less secretive.

Thanks for your review!

Teddy

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