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Absolutely in love with this story - I know I'm a bit late as you probably wrote this some time last year, but I just wanted to give a review and ask you to keep it up!! Really nice character building with Petunia and Lily's relationship (despite the difficulties with the Pottermore stories you mentioned) and I'm seriously excited to continue reading and find out what happens next...
Good work x

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Petunia is such a boar. Sometimes I do wish that lily was more passionate about her relationship with James though. However as per usual I am completely enamored with your writing! You are quite possibly the most talented writer I have yet had the pleasure to read on here! Please please update! If you are feeling stuck (I read something of the sort in an answer to another review) I'm sure any one of your readers would be thrilled to help bounce ideas! This one would in particular :)

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Petunia is very frustrating. It's hard to believe that she cut her sister off so cruelly!

Other people have made the same point as you about the passion in Lily and James' relationship, and I do notice it myself when I re-read this story. On the one hand, I have to stand by the way that Lily sees their relationship overall--I've always believed that James would have been the one who is more in love in their relationship. (There's always someone who's more in love.) But it's not wrong for you to wish for it to be different! And on a related note, I feel weird writing those "passionate" scenes--strangely voyeuristic, even though they're fictional characters.

I have no idea if you're still around (I see you haven't posted any reviews since last August), but I have to say, I wouldn't be opposed to bouncing ideas off someone. I was and still am stuck! Trying to figure out if I can get unstuck, though. Thanks for your offer!

The start of this chapter was absolutely adorable. I was squeeing happily and all of that nonsense over how utterly perfect your James and Lily are and how well you write them. It's just - it blows my mind, really. I'm so envious of your skills!

Poor Remus! I just want to hug him! I'm so glad that James knows the real reason and that Remus was able to get that off his chest. That must've been horrible, keeping that all to himself. Poor dear. *hugs Remus*

AH! Oh my god, I can't wait to see James interacting with Vernon. Oh, I have a feeling it's going to be absolutely hilarious and awesome!

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James/Lily feels, right? :D I'm so happy you liked that scene. It was fun to write. But come on, you have no need to be envious--you write James and Lily wonderfully as well!

So, here was where the Remus issue was brought out into the open. I figured it was necessary to somehow work in the fact that James gave him loan when they left school, although it's something that I find quite hard to reconcile with Remus' personality. It's just difficult to imagine him being willing to accept that kind of charity, you know? I think he really would have been miserable not being a part of the Order with all of his friends, though--that probably factored into it a lot.

Thank you again! :)

Poor poor Remus, I feel so sorry for him. LOL Lily says that Vernon might not be so bad. We shall see. I'm looking forward to you writing the scene with all of them at the dinner!

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Oh dear, I've somehow managed to let my reviews go unanswered for a month again. :S I'm so sorry! (I guess I was on vacation for about 2/3 of that month, but still.)

I feel very sorry for Remus, too, and for many different reasons. The thing that makes me feel worst about him is that I think he masked a lot of his struggles so as not to appear "different" or "abnormal". That's definitely coming out in this chapter.

Your skepticism about Lily's expectations for Vernon was definitely on target. :P

I'm glad you liked the chapter (and the next one), and thanks for the review!

This could be one of the best James/lily fanfics I've ever read! I love how you're sticking to facts from the books and how the characters are realistic to some extent ;) I'd love to see what you have in store for all of them next! That would be a nice way to ask for you to update soon please! :D 
I swear it's like I'm reading something jk would write herself!! Love it

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Thank you so much! I'm really flattered that you would compare my story to JKR--of course, we all know I'm nowhere NEAR as good, but it is very encouraging to hear. :D I do try to stick to the facts that she established as much as possible. It's also music to my ears that you find the characters pretty realistic, as that's another thing that's very important to me.

Your polite request worked, because I'm about to upload a new chapter! Thanks again for the review, and I hope you like the next one!

Wonderful chapter! I love the way you write James and Lily!
Can't wait for the next update! 10/10 :D

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Thank you so much! I'm glad you hear you enjoyed the chapter. I'm hoping to write more of the next chapter right this moment, so hopefully it won't be much longer before it's up. :)

I am so happy that you updated! I've been checking this so much that I almost didn't notice at first! Anyway this chapter is just as good as the others. I think you do a very good job of interweaving the romance and the war, without emphasizing one too much. I am so excited to read about the dinner with Vernon, especially to see how you write Vernon. Update soon? Pretty please?

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I am so happy that you reviewed! Sorry it takes me ages; I always start out with the best intentions of getting a new chapter done, and then get a bit distracted/lost along the way. I'm hoping to offer much more regular updates in the future!

It makes me feel really good to hear that you think I'm doing a good job of putting together the romance and the war. That's ultimately what I want to do with this story--there's such a poignant juxtaposition there.

I'm very excited to write the dinner...I think it'll be next chapter. Should be fun!

Thanks again for reviewing!

Oh my goodness I've missed this story! I was so excited when I saw you'd updated haha. You're an amazing writer and I love that you're introducing Dursley and putting more emphasis on where Lily and James' relationship is headed. I can't wait for the next chapter :D

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Aw, thank you, it makes me feel so good to know that you missed the story! (I mean, not good that I took so long updating that you missed it, but that you were attached to it, haha.)

I'm glad you're enjoying the trajectory of the story. :D I think writing the meeting between Vernon and Lily & James is going to be really fun. And Lily and James have been pretty steady for a while now, so I think it's only natural for them to start thinking towards the future--especially given everything that they've been through and are currently going through. I think they've had to grow up a bit faster than other people.

Thanks for the review; hopefully I'll update soon!

I loved this chapter and I love your story.  I can't wait until you post the next chapter! :)

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Thank you so much! As you can see, your review the other day smacked me with a sudden burst of motivation to finish the next chapter. :D This got done much earlier than I expected--it's wonderful how reader feedback can make a difference like that!

Hopefully I'll be updating soon! Thanks again!

Hello there!A wonderful chapter,as always,I really enjoy Lily-James stories!What I really love about this story is that you are trying to stick to canon as closely as possible,including the new pottermore information,and you are doing an excellent job too!The spelling and grammar are good,too.Congratulations,you manage to keep the reader's interest through it all!I assume this is a trilogy...I can't wait for more!

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Hello! Thank you so much for your review. :)

Keeping things in line with canon is very important to me, as I know it is for a lot of people. The stories I love most are the ones that stick to JKR's canon as closely as possible, so I try to do the same thing! I'm a bit scared for the new Pottermore info, to be honest--I'm hoping that it doesn't make too much of this story non-canon! I'm glad to hear you appreciate that aspect of it. :)

I actually plan for there to be four (maybe five, depending on how it goes) stories in this series--one leading up to each time James and Lily defied Voldemort, and then one (maybe two) following that and going up to their deaths. I hope I can stay committed and make it through all of them!

Thanks again for the review; hopefully a new chapter won't be too far off!

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