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Review #1, by Laura Henderson 

7th July 2017:

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Review #2, by heymjm 

25th August 2011:
Good attention to detail. High anticipation. Next chapter please.

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Review #3, by Enitsirk 

24th August 2011:
I think it seems like a wonderful story, although the first chapter was so long I took two days to read it because I'm really busy. Haha. But I like it. There are plenty of grammer mistakes, missing words, and odd spacings, but that's just mechanics. I was kinda mad that Remus didn't get to tell him, but at the same time I know that he is afraid of them turning their backs on him. That's clear. I would like to see more of other characters. Like maybe they have a few more friends than just each other. Or maybe Remus has a study buddy or something. Also, I suggest you use those division lines. They'll help with the flow, because it'll be clear that something else is going on. Overall, great job!

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Review #4, by coyote_shivers 

14th August 2011:
I love the play on "wrong" when Sirius says he knows something's wrong, and Remus shouts that there's nothing wrong with him. Of course that great bumbling Hagrid would ruin their moment! This was such an emotional chapter! Can't wait until Sirius finds out!

Author's Response: Thank you!! I hoped someone would get that "wrong" thing! It was very annoying to type Hagrid's bumble speak. I haven't decided when Sirius and the gang will find out yet, I have to draw it out over few more chapters. Hurry up and write your story so we can review Nicholas and Albus!!!

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Review #5, by sunday sunday 

13th August 2011:
i love this ! it's so good ^^ i think you capture all of the marauders so well, taking a few of the traits we see of them in the books and completely expanding them into full personalities! well done! please CONTINUE !
-sunday ./.

Author's Response: Thank you Sunday!!! It's so good to get good feedback on my story! So glad to hear you think I did a good job on the marauders, I tried really hard to get their dialogue down, the way I thought they would talk in the books. I see you've got a few stories up yourself, I'll be sure to check them out and review! :)

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Review #6, by Lady Snape of Spinners End 

12th August 2011:
This chapter is SOOO good I don't even know what the best part was! I loved the part where Sirius knew exactly why Peter hadn't come looking for him. Also when Lupin was about to tell all, I can see why Sirius would be deathly curious to find out what "arrangements with Dumbledore" meant. I really felt like I was reading a real Harry Potter book.

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