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awesome story looking forward to reading more. I love it so far!

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This is my second time reading yor story, and I absolutely love it, but please please please go through it and check your grammar. Your tenses are quite inconsistent, you keep on switching between past and present tense.

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Oh my. I didn't see that one coming. James is really... How can I put this? Dumb? He has he right to ask someone else but man did that hurt her. I really love dixie's character(: she has a very...loving personality. Keep up the beautiful work!
~Hannah

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Thank you, Hannah! I'm glad that you're still enjoying this. Yeah, James isn't the most observant of chaps. Thank you again, I loved Dixie so much, I ended up giving her, her own story (called Seven). :)

Ah, I already HATE Evie. She seem's super annoying :P If that is who James asked then I'm tossing my computer out the window. . . . then retrieve it so I can read on. There were some grammatical error's in the chapter which made it kind of hard to read :/ Maybe you should have someone read over it and point it out! Other wise is was fabulous! Reading on. . . .

PS: I'm making it my business to comment on every chapter.

WhatAboutRegulus

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Thank you for the review! I'm glad that you enjoyed this, and I'm very excited to hear about what you think about the chapter; I'll warn you now, I'm half way through editing, so there's a bit in the middle which isn't up to the par with the rest of the story. So hopefully, you'll be able to read through it :L

You're lovely :) And funny, but don't harm your computer! 
Thank you again!

Good job. This isn't my usual type of reading, but so far it is a real page turner, so to speak. Thank you for taking the time to write it!

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Thank you very much! I'm glad that you're enjoying it so much, and I hope that you like the rest!
Thank you for taking the time to leave a review!

seriously charisma?! you should have asked him who!!! =O
i don't see this going well.

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Charisma should be a little more nosey :P But then, she wouldn't be her. :D

Im slightly confused.
is Elle her friend
is Dixie her friend 
and Evie the bitch?

xx

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Thank you for the review! Yeah, you've got it right, Elle is her friend and dormmate, as is Dixie, and Evie is the mean girl :D
I hope that you enjoy the rest!

doing very well like how its not the ordinssry fall in love goo goo gah gah crap :)..ready to read some more

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Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you've enjoyed this story so far! I hope that you like the rest. :D
I tried to vary it from the lovey dovey stuff (you put it better though :D ) so I'm happy that you've noticed :D

my favorite part so far is:
I was going to throttle the keeper of fate.

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Thank you for the review! I'm glad that you enjoyed that part! I hope you like the rest of the story! :D

Ooh, I like it! On to the next chapter! =)

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thank you very much for the review! I'm glad that you enjoyed it! I hope the rest lives up to your expectations. :S

this story is awesome, good job!!! btw Charisma is so sweet :)

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Thank you very much for the review. I'm glad that you enjoy this story! :D

Wow amazing chapter! Loved the line - (if I my dog had a face like hers I would shave its arse and walk it backwards) I was laughing my head off. Most first chapter I find are boring as it is character development etc. But yours was awesome bc it got straight to the action! 
Well got to read the next chapter :) xx

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Thank you for the review! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this chapter. 
My friend (who is usually the sweetest natured person you will ever meet) said that one day about her brothers friend, when it came to writing it in to the story, I thought of it and it seemed to fit! :D
I hope that you enjoy the rest of the story. The fact that you like my character development has actually made my day!

I really like this story so far! Keep on writing! It's got an interesting plot!

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Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad that you're enjoying the story so far. I hope that you enjoy the rest. :)

I love how much everyone takes divination as a joke, I think it would be hilarious to see someone in that class taking it serious. I'm still getting some of the OC's mixed up, but I'm starting to like them more throughout the chapters. I think its funny how she doesn't even realize how much she clearly likes James though!

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Ahh, to get your wish, I think you have to go to like chapter 23 or 27 or something :P But it's in there! :)
I don't think that I can actually see someone taking it seriously thought, but I would love to give the class a try. 
it's okay to get the OC's mixed up, there is rather a lot of them. :)
Thanks for the review!

This is probably a dumb question, but is this "Lilly" the same as Lily Potter? I'm a maniac for grammar; truly, I'm sorry. Lol, I swear its a mental condition.
But I liked this chapter too. Charisma is adorable. I'm worried she might get a little Mary Sue-ish, but with this new jealousy thing, that might not be an issue. She's delightful, really.
Next chapter!
8/10

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Yeah, it's Lily Potter, thanks for the reminder, I thought that I had changed all of the chapters back. I am english too, it's just that my friend spells it with two 'L's, so I completely forget that in HP it's only one. 
Mental conditions are cool :D
She does get a little Mary-Sue ish with jealously, but it gets rectified. Thanks for the review!

Wait! What the frick? new banner? What? What? WHAT?! 
Would it be mean if I said I liked the old one a teensy bit better? I like this one but the other was cool too.

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Yeah, I thought it was time for a change. The story changed a lot from the original plan. It's not mean at all, everyone is entitled to their own opinion. I personally love this one though. :P

“Yeah I’m fine; I think that I just threw up in my mouth a little bit there.” 

OMG! At that line I was laughing my butt off!  And at the same time I was wanting to slap both James and Evie!

Keep up the good work :)

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Hehe, I'm glad that you liked this chapter. I hope that the rest lives up to your expectations. :P

:)  Lovely and I am a bit curious about why James asked out 'The Queen of Mean" in the first place!

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Thanks for the review. I'm glad that you think it's lovely. :P James asked her out because she was always lovely in front of him - I think that it's explained in later chapters.

good story so far... but when you say "defiantly" do you mean definitely? That's kinda confusing me lol

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Lol, sorry. Yes I do mean definitely. :P Thanks for the review, I'm glad that you're enjoying it so far. I hope that you like the rest.

Damn you James! hahaha. Me = Loving your story. It's very original (and VERYVERY addicting).

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Thank you very much. I'm glad that you love my story :D Best comment of the day. 

The fact that you find it addicting makes me a very happy person.

i love the relationship between Chic and james and how you have made her 'part of the family'.
this is really the first time where we meet Evie and i HATE her already! you did really well portraying this character.
keep up the good work.

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Thank you very much. Evie is such a meanie. She should be punished! I will try my best to 'keep it up'. :D

I don't really understand that first part...You might want to go back, reread and make it a little clearer. Other than that...it was really good!!!

~K.K~

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Thank you for the review. I'm glad that you enjoyed it - besides the confusing beginning. Thanks for telling me. I will take a look at it. XD

im not only liking this story but im loving it :D 
oooh like james and "wolfy" :p one thing though i don't really get is the differences between dixie and elle but maybe that's just me being weird :o :p
reading on ;)

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Thanks ;)

I am really happy that you're loving my story. James and Wolfy are awesome, totally silly. Elle and Dixie's differences are huge! They are hardly the same in anything, I hadn't noticed that before actually. Thanks for the review.

heheheh, i like the ending, well i liked evrry part really, well done you!
11/10! :)

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Thanks again. I love Dixie, I think that she is the character I wish that I could be. I'm glad that you liked all of it, your review has made me smile. XD

Wait but did he kiss Evie? I wanna know!!!

xoxo
~Marcia

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You'll have to wait and see. XD

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