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Chapter: Can And Can't | Story: An Issue Of Trust

well I certainly hope that you update soon. This is so good, and I cannot wait to see which way Snape turns in this time frame should be exciting!

I know it is how you have characerised him, but is Harry supposed to act like a brat? I mean, are we supposed to think that he is an arrogant toerag or are we supposed to feel sympath for him? Because at the moment I am not feeling a lot of sympathy lollol!

PLEASE UPDATE SOON! this story is so good and I can't wait to see what you do with it!

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Wow, this story is... amazing doesn't even begin to cover it... just wow... The concept of time travel into the future instead of the past is original and what a future it is - bleak, cold, grimy and so very, very wrong and yet I found myself buying it almost instantly. The story is so well written that I could put myself in Harry's shoes and experience his anxiety, fear and helplessness in this new terrifying reality and I actually felt relief when he came back to the present. This helps me to understand his current actions (if not approve them, but then again he wouldn't be Harry if he wasn't stubborn and quick to draw (often wrong) conclusions) - he's been through too much to let it go so soon and that makes him blind, but luckily he's got Hermionie to help him out. I also love how Snape was written, you truly did his character justice - I don't think I've ever read a fanfiction where he was so accurately portrayed. Even his future self is completely beliveable - where the books only hinted how thin the line he walks on is, this story describes in great detail just how heavy his burden is and how much it took to finally break him, so when I realised he has fallen I couldn't find it in my heart to hate him for it. Dumbeldore, Lupin, Ron, Draco (present and future one ;) ) and the rest were great too. I am very happy to hear that you intend to continue this story and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. 

10/10

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very intense story so far
hated how the 'future' SS turned out much less how he died, worse yet I hated how Minerva was killed (or at least implied) it was HORRIBLE!! 
can't wait to read more

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um... hi.  So I only just now remembered that I haven't gotten to your newest chapter yet.  How long ago was it you told me you'd updated?  A month?  Why didn't you remind me???  I feel like a big jerk!  I remember telling you I'd have to get around to it at a later date, and then it completely slipped my mind after that.

But anyway.  I really got into this chapter :)  After a few minutes of reading into the confrontation between Harry, Hermione and Draco, I found myself leaning closer and closer to the computer screen.  haha.  It was good, and I liked reading the argument between them, especially once Harry threw it in Draco's face that Dumbledore knew (as well as Harry himself.)  Draco was really great, with all of his sarcasm, and Harry came off as an arrogant bullheaded jerk.  I thought he was characterized perfectly.  Nothing against Harry, but when he thinks he's right, he doesn't let it go, even if he goes about it all wrong.  I think my favorite line was Draco's insult... glorified excuse for a wizard.

I would have liked to see Harry succeed in pursuading Draco against his plans (though I know that if he does, it wouldnt happen in on chapter :P)... but leave it to Snape to come in and ruin things and reassure Draco.  argh.  Of course, after reading the second part, I know why... I think. So when he says other people would be put at risk, people on Harry's side, I assume he's talking about himself?  As he will die if he doesn't fulfill the vow?  Or was he talking about somebody else?

Anyway.  I really enjoyed the conversation with Dumbledore also.  Maybe I have just been away from this story too long.  But I had forgotten the vow and the effects it would have, and I really loved the conflict in Snape - save Draco, or save himself.  

Im really curious about the Phoenix Tears at the end.  For some reason, my mind immediately jumped to... removing the Dark Mark.  Remember how gruesome that was in your earlier chapters?  

I know this isn't as great of a review as I usually do.  it's been a long time since I reviewed, so bear with me :P  Plus I find it harder to review chapters with lots of dialogue, because there's not much to comment on.  So sorry for my lateness again...

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Gah, you're not a big jerk! But you know this already =P And a month is nothing compared to how long I can take to do things. But you probably know this also. But yay, you reviewed! I have always loved your reviews.

Kk, I am glad you liked the Harry/Draco interaction. It was the hardest bit of this chapter, and the reason it took me so long to finish the damn thing. It was just - hard, you know, to get them to shout at each other and say what I needed them to say wihout it sounding forced or contrived. Also, 3 way person arguing is hard to write, especially when one of the people isn't really invested in the arguement. Hermione tended to just fade from the scene a bit too much.

But yes, Snape is referring to himself - not that he would ever admit that to Harry. Mainly because Harry wouldn't care if he thought he was putting Snape in danger, and would just carry on regardless. Threatening him with the safety of other people is the only way to control him, as far as Snape is concerned. So yes, you were right. If he doesn't fulfil the vow he will die, and Harry almost messed it up royally for him. Reassuring Draco was the only way to stop the vow from killing him.

The vow is kinda difficult to write. I almost regret rephrasing it now, as I have left it a bit too open for my liking - but it was the only way I could get later bits to work. Oh well, I guess sometimes you have to make sacrifices for stuff.

You jumped to the Dark Mark with the tears? Huh. Yes, I do remember the chapter, but no, the tears have nothing to do with it =P. It's to do with the request Dumbledore made of Snape a few chapters back, asking Snape to help him survive the protections on the ring so he could destroy it. There is a clue to that in this chapter, but its only obvious if you read that past chapter recently, as the clue is a flashback or sorts. This is what you get for taking so long to update, I guess.

This review is still awesome though. Thank you for writing it =) And see, I can occasionally respond. Now stop apologising.

Great chapter... well worth the wait. Please update soon 10/10

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