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I have this intense feeling to slap them all.
I mean SERIOUSLY. Geez, Dumbledore's always bugged me with his constant trust and belief and AGH. But now, after reading your story so far, I am so upset with him. What is wrong with these people? Why don't they trust Harry? He's usually always right and they're usually always wrong and in the end it gets shoved in their faces as it blows up in Harry's.
Gah!
Lupin, Snape, and Dumbledore should all just go hide in a hole.
QS
P.S. I do love this story however, and it's definitely a 10/10. I'm not ranting at YOU, because they are so In Character it's not even funny. I'm just ranting because I know this is most likely EXACTLY how JK would write it. This is a fantastic story and I've been reading it for the last hour, and I love it so far.
Great job!
Sorry for the rant.

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Feel free to rant to your hearts content! I love hearing your thoughts on characters and whatâ€™s happening. I agree, Albus does have this annoyingly horrible habit of not believing Harry when, despite all the odds, he is always right. Man can he be blind at times!

At least they are managing to annoy you in character, which is infinitely better than you being annoyed with them for being completely ooc. I am so pleased you like this so much =)

Um, not quite as good as some of your other chapters, but still an 8

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Well, as long as still enjoyed it =)

Part two :D</br></br>I adored the whole scene in Dumbledore's office (woo, I can find quotes! I was having withdrawal symptoms I swear). Snape was perfectly Snape, and present-Snape too, though I never doubted possible-future-Snape could not have grown from present-Snape, you wrapped them up in each other really well. I think I especially liked <i>I hardly fail to see how they can be applied when said student is aiming an Unforgivable at my person. Given you also have views against cursing them, I find myself entirely lacking in options.</i> Ah, I could practically hear him saying it. Also the bit immediately after <i>Forgive me, but the impression I had from here was somewhat less optimistic</i> *snigger*. I also have to say, I was immensely relieved Harry came back because then Snape had never done everything he did in the future (even if Harry doesn't see that), and I was hopeful Dumbledore would still be able to save him. I didn't think about the paradox he'd create, which I find very interesting and I hope it comes up some more.</br></br>I also loved Harry (both here and throughout). He was exactly as I imagine Harry would be had all this happened to him. My favourite thing he said was <i>Snape will return to Voldemort before the bloody year is finished though, no matter what you say, so donâ€™t look all surprised when he does</i>, perfectly sullen as one who has just had what they've said thrown back in their face and also showing his unwavering belief of Snape's treachery-to-be, which is really unsurprising. Hey, no leading to the events in HBP actually! I don't know if you're planning to cover another entire year or something, but if anything could be asking as much as what Dumbledore did before of Snape to push him over the edge, it might be asking him to kill him would do the same. I'm doubtful that's where you're headed, but I'd rather Snape wasn't a traitor twice in the same fic :p . Though perhaps you have already affected those events, since Harry has given Dumbledore Draco's warning about the cave. oo, doesn't getting your head around time start making you contradict yourself like nothing else?? I think I'll stop now before I throughly twist myself in knots and leave you to unravel the story yourself :p . I am still admiring your plot execution and characterisations, but needless to say, I did really enjoy reading this story :D .

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Eventually things had to go right for him. Dracoâ€™s part in it was (yet another) cause of anxiety too, with keeping him suitably Draco still, yet willing to help Harry even though he hates him. I do love irony though. And I couldnâ€™t resist undermining Dracoâ€™s following of the Dark Lord. I suppose it also shows the differences between him and Lucius too, as his father would never have believed Harry. Iâ€™ve never thought Draco to be braver than his father, necessarily, but without the mans influence all his life to raise him into abject obedience, I just couldnâ€™t see him continuing to serve when he found out.

I never actually considered the difficulty Draco would have sending Harry back to the exact time he left, so I canâ€™t really argue with you there as I kind of agree with you now youâ€™ve said it. Whilst I a sure, given time, it would bep ossible to claim he could figure it out that accurately, in the spur of the moment it is kind of unlikely. But, at the end of the day, itâ€™s my fic =P, and in this fic timeturners are easy to use. I picked the timing for the very Remus issue you so liked though, so it worked out all right in the end. And boy did he drive me nuts in this chapter. I have never been a Marauder fan, and have never written Remus much before. I knew what I wanted to achieve in this chapter, but he sure made me work for it. *apologises profusely for future-Remusâ€™ actions*

Huzzah for quotes too! Youâ€™ve actually quoted back two of my favourite Snape lines in the whole fic. And yes, Snape hasnâ€™t done any of those things yet (did you honesty think Harry wouldnâ€™t come back?), but now he knows he could do. I didnâ€™t realise how difficult present-Snape with the potential to become future-Snape could be to write either until I started trying to write the next chapter. The paradox actually forms quite a large part of the plot of the second part of the fic too, or at least I think it does, even if it does it subtely.

And finally Harryâ€¦poor, poor Harry. He makes such a good sullen teenager though, and he has always been hovering on the verge of â€˜Snape is evil and Iâ€™m going to prove itâ€™, now he just has a reason. I am planning to cover pretty much the entire year, but again you are making comments I cannot comment on without giving away the entire foundation of my plot. Events have been affected though, as you mentioned, with Dracoâ€™s warning. But yes, getting my head round this plot has caused me some major contradictions. My head spins quite often trying to sort it all out.

Anyway, thank you for this amazing review. Your comments and thoughts have all been brilliant and very interesting to read and comment on. I am so glad to know you are enjoying this, and only hope you continue to do so. Thank you, thank you , thank you *huggles*

*grumbles about bloody character limits* but here, review - part one.</br></br>I've a feeling this review is going to take me some time to write, but no matter, you will just have to wait that bit longer for it :p . And no, I'm not still mad at you :D (tis that inability to hold a grudge again ;) ). I feel odd starting a review with no collection of quotes that I liked to keep me on track (I figured 19 chapters worth would be too much so didn't pick out any at all, even though there were many I loved) but we shall see how I do without.</br></br>Firstly, this is brilliantly written and I was completely absorbed in it, and really, you had a tough act to follow after all the fics I've been reading lately ;) . I rate yours up there with the best of them though. I'm going to focus specifically on this chapter I reckon, because it's what I have open and can scan back, but I have things to say about lots of other bits, let's hope I can remember them all :D .</br></br>Well, all right, I believe you now *grumbles*. Snape did indeed betray them in the future, and it's credit to your writing that I didn't instantly hate your story on principle (yes, Snape being portrayed as a traitor is enough to turn me away from a story :p ), in fact, I was quite persuaded by your reasoning and the insights into his thoughts (all excellently written and leaving me in no doubt that they were ones that Snape would think). I also cannot get over how well you've woven either the title into the story or the theme of the story captured so precisely in the title (whichever happened to come first basically). Most of the time I found myself admiring a quote it had to do with Snape and trust and just the way you've manipulated the storyline and characters so well and seamlessly.</br></br>Possibly more so than Snape, Dumbledore was perfect throughout. Whether it was himself or his portrait (which I take satisfaction in having guessed as to what the item was Tonks was thinking of, mainly because I am annoyed I didn't see the Snape betrayal coming) in the scene, you write him completely spot on. I am torn between loving his character (in general, not just in your fic) completely, and unable to shake a dislike for what he sometimes does. Like that other fic said, The Absence of Unhappy, he moves for the greater cause and can lose sight of those right before him that he is fighting for. You play on this fallibility well, and I especially liked the scene with Voldemort when he showed Severus what Dumbledore had done and was doing to him, whether intentional or accidental (after all, it must be recognised that Dumbledore does not and can not see all and know all. Though undoubtedly he sometimes acts anyway, knowing the consequences and acting despite them, but sometimes he must simply not see the them at all being only human).</br></br>I love the plot you've created here you know, despite the timeturner part, it made for a far more intriguing one than I am used to and was very well thought out. I did feel the latter part when Harry was in Voldemort's lair came out a tiny bit on the convenient side, but Draco's role was so well built into the plot and foreshadowed very well that he made up for it. It was odd to think of Hogwarts in Draco's hands, and even odder to find myself thinking that they were perhaps not so bad ones with the references Draco made to it. It also reflected the power he had in that position which strangely suited him well. I liked how he was the one to send Harry back, and somehow he fitted in to everything you had him do really well, particularly how you undermined his following Voldemort by using his beliefs against him. I also had to love the irony of Draco saving Harry; you would have thought that if either of the two would ever put what was between them behind them and save the other's life, then it would have been Harry more than Draco.</br></br>Another characterisation I found myself being impressed by and also surprised by was Dudley. I loved that whole visit to Privet Drive, and a look at Dudley's family. Even the part where he threw them out and the wards fell, I don't know exactly why I enjoyed reading it quite as much as I did, but I did :D .</br></br>When Harry returned I hardly dared believe he was properly back, though I find it slightly improbable Draco would manage to set a timeturner back quite that exact to when Harry left. I would've thought, to avoid the risk of having two Harrys at once, he would have underestimated how much to send him back - what I presume to not be an exact science. But still, I liked your timing in this because of Remus :D . He was very well written in the beginning of this chapter too (finally we reach talking about this chapter ;) ). The part where he worried he'd bitten Harry was especially accurate I feel, exactly the kind of conclusion Remus would jump to, it being an act he fears committing (and I very much resented you putting possible-future-Remus through what you did, even if it was exactly the sort of thing Voldemort would think up *glares* :p ).

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Bloody Hellâ€¦.longest review EVER! Seriously, I have one shots with similar word counts, and you didnâ€™t even quote. I can see why it took long to write, as it will probably take me longer to respond. At least I have two parts to do it in though, and the knowledge that you arenâ€™t mad anymore =)

Knowing the fics youâ€™ve been reading lately I am incredibly flattered you would consider me up there with them. More than flattered really, relieved almost. I was worried it would be a disappointing read after some of those fics. I only hope I can continue to live up to your kind words in future chapters.

Now, no grumbling. I have to agree with you on the Snape issue though. Having him as a traitor puts me instantly off fics too, which I guess makes it odd for me to have written this. I donâ€™t think I could really say any longer why I did decide to write this either. The idea kind of grew and grew. And whilst the fic did grow from the title, the original concept I had for it was very different (no traitorism at all in the first plan). I canâ€™t really go into how the whole thing came to be what it is though without giving away the end. I have tried to weave the title throughout the whole theme too, so it is wonderful to have you point out that you noticed it. *squees* I am also pleased you found Snape still Snapeish despite his actions.

I have to admit to being rather proud of my Dumbledore in this, but then again I did put a lot of effort into him (and I donâ€™t know whether to be happy or peeved that you guessed the item, but I suppose I can offer you grudging congrats. And you werenâ€™t supposed to see the betrayal coming, so it makes me happy that you didnâ€™t and counters my annoyance at your guessing the item). I share your views on him, being torn between loving and disliking him. There are so few fics that show that well though (like the one you mentioned), as often when they try it descends into manic Dumbledore bashing and him turning horribly evil and the sort of extreme actions I wanted to avoid in him. I wanted to make him still essentially good, but doing stupid things because he is only human and not realising the consequences until after. The scene with Voldemort was trying to show that even those around sometimes fail to see his mistakes so incapable of them he can appear to be.

I almost didnâ€™t write this I was so worried about the timeturner issue and the clichÃ©d persona it embodies instantly. Although I have always believed it is possible to do (almost) any clichÃ© well, I didnâ€™t think I would manage it (sometimes I still worry excessively about using it). I figured it was worth giving it a go though, and I have been, on the whole, fairly pleased with how it has turned out. I also worried about the bit in Voldemorts lair appearing convenient, but it occurred to me that any possible escape back to the present would have to have a â€˜convenientâ€™ edge to it, and I couldnâ€™t have Harry running round the future forevermore.

That was by far the best Fan Fiction that I have stumbled across on this site. At one point Snape, when leaning over the sink, said, "You lack the courage of your convictions," I had yet to recall what it reminded me of until Anne Rice's 'Interview with the Vampire' came to mind. It was similar, if not the same to what Louis once said. Am I being too hopeful or was it coincidence?

Also I loved the Paradise Lost quote. I am yet to read all of it myself but so many people dismiss it when thinking of literature. The quotes at the beginning of the Chapters were interesting, insightful to the chapters events and carried on with the themes.

At first I was skeptical about the idea but when I caught a glimpse of your writing I was stunned as it was so mature. The story was well planned, brilliantly executed and Snape was described so well. You suceeded in pulling off that character's personality to admirable extents. The plot twists never failed to keep me entertained and when I read the first chapter I couldn't stop. It is now past 1am, I've been reading for God knows how long with a tempermental wireless that turns itself on and off at inconvienient times and yet I feel as if I could read even more of these delightful stories!

I can't spout forth enough compliments at you amazing talent and way with words. I linger in your shadow and you have as inspired me, as well I'm sure many others, to improve their style of writing as we now truly have an insight at what can be achievable if we set our minds and battle on the force the words squirming on the page infront of us into some kind of plot. I am forever indebted to you for producing such a captivating story and I shall only continue to read more of your works. Ten fails to capture the perfection of this story and the grace at which you pulled it off.

Author Response

Sorry to dash your hope, but whilst I have read some of Anne Rice's work, the occurence of that quote was sheer coincidence (I cannot even remember where in the book it occured, now you mention it) as opposed to any sort of tribute to her on my part.

I too was skeptical when I started writing this, painfully aware of the cliche upon which I was embarking, yet still determined to see it through and hopefully create something that went beyond the overused 'timeturner' idea and into something a little more original. To hear you consider it mature is, what I consider, a high compliment. Not that I am by any means a young writer, but sometimes I feel my writing lacks a certain something that backs that up. I did spend a long time working on the plot before I even started, too, as my plan was and remains very complicated. Your comments on Snape are, perhaps, the nicest of the review though. I do so love him as a character, and try to do him justice whenever I write him. This was a very different turn for me in terms of his loyalties and development though, as in the past I have always stuck firmly by my belief he is good. I felt the urge to explore the fact that this does not come easy to him, and that he does not always succeed in ways he will imagine.

I am flattered to know how much devotion you read this with too (tempermental wireless included here, as such a thing would drive me to distraction), and also that you would say I have inspired you. I have said it before, but there is still nothing that makes me feel I have accomplished something more than hearing that, to know that something that gives me so much joy has carried the potential of that to others. Thank you, although it seems inadequate, for this wonderful review. Your words are deeply appreciated, and I can only hope you continue to enjoy the rest as much.

Hi, I just wanted to know when you'll be updating because I like this story. Also I curious to check out your toher stories such as Imbred :) Oh, and how is my story going? I've gone a bit overdrive on it and written another 4 chapters in like 3 nights (blush). Thanks

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I meant to update last week, however I have yet to find a moment in which I can open the word documewnt, let alone type words into it. It's been a few days since I've even had time to read and respond to my reviews. That should probably answer every question you have, unfortunately. I would love to say it would be updated at the end of this week, but only time will tell and I would hate to be made a liar again. I wish I could write four chapters in 3 nights though *seethes with jealousy*

Okay, I had to just keep reading. I couldn't just stop to review. Sorry. You have a brilliant fic going here. What a twist of the summer before 6th year and its beginning. Crazy. Absolutly amazing.

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Aw, I'm flattered you got so caught up in it and just pleased to know that you did enjoy it. Thank you for taking the time, I really appreciate all your comments =)

Wow *as the steam sets* that was simply amazing and *drum rolls* I'm heavily contemplating on restarting that fic which I had abandoned a few months ago because of reading this one. Siren you are simply amazingly talented as a writer and to be quite honest you've taught me a lot about sticking to canon with characters and the like. I can't give you much CC simply because you surpass me as a writer and I can't correct something I do not see needs correcting. 

Thank you for giving me the opportunity to read this. -Valhalla Adonis-Snape

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Firstly I must say damn, do you read fast. I've barely scraped together enough time to read a chapter, and here you've finished mine! I am pleased you are considering restarting your own fic...it's nice to know that I have inspired or just prodded you into doing so....makes me feel like I've achieved something more. Thank you for all your lovely comments *blushes* I am so incredibly flattered by how much you have enjoyed this and the wonderful reviews you have left. Thank you for taking the time to read this, I cannot begin to say how much I appreciate it =)

woot! update!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Thanks and I am in the process of trying.

Stupid Harry, the idiotic prat! Severus isn't evil! >=(
~Snob

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Well, he isn't evil at the moment. But he could become so. Thanks for reviewing =)

This was a great chapter, I really enjoyed it! I couldn't help but be annoyed at the beginning with Dumbledore. He just doesn't want to believe Harry grrrr! I really enjoyed the moment between Harry and Lupin, how fatherly and loving it was! Also the whole bit where Harry tells Dumbeldore about what Malfoy said is so good. Will Harry go back into the furuture, or is he back in his present?

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I am pleased to know you enjoyed it! Writing Harry and Lupin was a nice change, if a bit of a headache. And he's back in the present now....

I *heart* Remus J. Lupin.  This whole opening scene was so unexpectedly touching.  What an amazing contrast to the whole of the story up to this point.  The way Harry just clung to himâ€¦Lupin has always seemed to be just a bit of a step off from a real emotional figure in Harryâ€™s life, but there has still been that underlying connection between them, and I thought you tapped into it perfectly here.  I am reminded of (though the exact part escapes me at the moment) the scene in HBP when Harry thinks about not getting letters from Sirius anymore and the brief thought about how perhaps heâ€™ll get one from Lupin, though one doesnâ€™t come.  And I actually â€œAww-edâ€ at the part about Lupin not being used to someone not shying away from his touch. I just smiled to myself, thinking about Tonks *sigh* It really made for the perfect transition scene back to â€œpresent day.â€

I thought you were dead on with Dumbledore in this scene. <i>Not the past then.</i> What a Dumbledore-ish remark to everything he just saw in Harryâ€™s head.  I thought his, and everyone elseâ€™s actually, reaction to what Harry was saying was perfect.  Interested, confused, unsure.  It would have felt all wrong if Dumbledore had overreacted, or if he had under-reacted for that matter.  Quiet contemplation seems to be his main game, as infuriating as it sometimes is.  

And how odd was it seeing Snape again.  I really felt for Harry.  It was too hard to look at him the same again.  You do kind of want to just shake him and ask him why it had to all turn out that way.  You expected him to still be all evil, to at any moment start killing people left and right.  But no.  There he was, same as always.  Sarcastic and detached.  I love how the first mention of him here was him â€œmerely quirking an inquiring eyebrowâ€ to Harryâ€™s accusation that he was a traitor.  Why should he act any differently? But stillâ€¦

I also thought the whole â€œparadoxâ€ reference was brilliant.  Time travel itself is a paradox, trying to figure out what in the future affects the past, which hasnâ€™t happened but will change the futureâ€¦Ouch. That hurt my brain.  But what Snape said was really true.  If you believed any of what Harry said, you had to acknowledge what Snape would become.  And that, of course, brings into question who he is at the present and can that bleak future be avoided.  

Well, I love everything about this story.  I think it is just wonderful and you have such a great talent.  Count me in among your many fans and please keep me updated with this.  It has been my absolute pleasure to review this. I do feel a bit sorry for the next person on my review list, though.  You have raised the bar on fanfiction with this piece.

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Lupin was never originally meant to be in this chapter, but I am infinitely pleased to have added him. It did give a much needed break from all the suspense and drama, and a moment for something more intimate and touching. My original plan was much more focused on the former, that is for certain, but I do like the balance the change seems to have instigated. Lupin and Harryâ€™s interaction in this was difficult, as it was a very fine line to be walking. Too much would have been out of character for them both, but there needed to be something. The distance between them in other books has always seemed kind of forced too, as there was no reason for Remus to be as emotionally detached as he was beyond his own fear. I am glad you think it a perfect transition too, as a whole new part of the fic is about to begin.

To be honest there didnâ€™t really seem to be any other reaction to Harryâ€™s events. Raging denial would have been pretty stupid given the evidence, and how can you underact to something that serious? This was the only reaction I could conceive to the whole thing. I agree, it is infuriating though. I can imagine how Harry would have wanted Dumbledore to turn Snape from the school that instant, not knowing that such an act was exactly what led to the future he experienced to begin with. And it is hard for Harry, especially since he doesnâ€™t know any of the history regarding what Snape had to go through. All he saw was a traitor, and he is reacting accordingly. Ironically enough it is his very attitude to the whole thing that most threatens the future he could create. Paradoxes eat your heart out!

I gave up trying to comprehend the true number of paradoxes in this fic though, and have instead focused on the main one. It gave me a headache too. Poor Snape though, hitting the nail right on the head. Dumbledore has all but confirmed he thinks there is a part of Snape capable of such actions simply by believing Harry, and his declarations of trust are all the more sour for it. All ready heâ€™s started a chain that could lead straight back to what he is trying to avoid, although he had no choice but to do so. It does ask the question though if the future can be avoided, since knowing about it hasnâ€™t helped in any way.

I am so pleased to know you have enjoyed this fic thus far, and honoured you consider yourself a fan (I find it odd, if rather squee worthy to use the word fan though). I will, of course, be honoured to keep you updated. Thank you for leaving so many long, thoughtful and in depth reviews. They have been a pleasure to read and respond too, and have given me much about my own fic to think about. Thank you again, I simply cannot say it enough =)

frustration!  you write dumbledore so well and it's driving me nuts!  i hate (in a good way) how he's so cryptic and obscure and so willing to trust snape despite everything harry's been through, and despite the fact that he's seen his memories and everything.  

i've pretty much gone back to loving snape (for now), as he's so angry and sarcastic and also so ...  cute?  the way he mentionned harry trying to kill him during a class was humourous and very much <i>him</i>.  love it!

also, i love the way you write remus.  the whole part with him and harry was so comforting, almost as if harry had his own dad and then, at the same time, not at all, since they are so similiar, both unable to be quite as affectionate as they could be.  i absolutely love your remus.  i feel like writing him in a ton for my next chapter now!  

great chapter, as always!

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As long as it is hate in a good way then I can live with it. Iâ€™m pleased to know you think Dumbledore well written, as he can be difficult to gets to grips with, especially given how cryptic he does like to be. 

Iâ€™m also glad you love Snape again, although he would probably kill you for describing him as cute *giggles*. Of all the words you could have picked, I can just imagine his expression at hearing that one!

Remus though, I am incredibly pleased with how he turned out, but he didnâ€™t half put up a fight when it came to getting him there. Trying to get the balance that you noticed right was a headache, but very much worth it judging by the comments I have received on him. Oddly enough I also want to write him more too!

Thank you again for yet another fabulous review. You have no idea how pleased I am that you continue to enjoy it.

Wow - I just don't know what to say.  First, it was brilliant, second it played out exactly as it would have in canon - no one believeing Harry, Dumbledore being obtuse and Snape being completely mysterious as to his true commitments.  I love how Harry woke up, and that Lupin hugged him - god he really needs that - its what I really want for Harry to be taken care of by someone. And you wrote it so perfectly from Lupin's point of view that it was hard for him to believe that anyone would want to rely on him, and even harder still for it to be Harry because it was hard for him to both show and receive affection.  That's so spot on.  Amazing amazing - I can't tell you how much I love your work.  You are unbeliveable to me and this story has become more mysterious at Harry's return!  I just hope that somehow they believe Harry, but are still able to change the future.  Thank you thank you for such hard work and for your endless imagination.  You are my inspiration.

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Wowâ€¦your inspiration? I am incredibly flattered you would consider me so! I am pleased to know the story has managed to retain some mystery to it. It was kind of sad to have the first bit of it effectively finish and to leave it behind, but I am getting into this part of it now. I am also relieved to hear your opinions on Remus and Harry, and how you have picked up on all the little complexities and everything. It made me squee with happiness. The nature of belief in this fic is always going to be difficult, right up until the end Iâ€™m afraid, because itâ€™s not so much that Dumbledore and everyone donâ€™t believe what happened to Harry, they just donâ€™t believe it will happen again. Thank you for leaving such wonderfully thoughtful reviews. It is feedback like this that inspires me to continue.

So.. If Dumbledore is of full power and not go to the cave, how will Harry learn how to find those bits of Voldemort?

And.. Is Draco capable of killing Dumbledore if he is of full power?

I'm just wondering.. Eh.. -_-

E-mail me again when you update!

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Ah, it will all make sense as things go on. Trust me, I have planned for all these questions. As to Draco killing Dumbledore, well, as was mentioned he now has Snape to watch out for him. And Harry. Itâ€™ll all work out in the end =). Thank you for the review, and I will be sure to email you again!

Good show! That was... just great. I'm sorry for my lack of elequence, but I really enjoyed that story. The whole of it. Although, I am rather suprised that you did not have Dumbledore obliviate everyone out of "necessity" or whatever he would say to justify his actions. But, that having been said, Bloody well done!

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Thank you very much! I am very pleased to know you enjoyed it, even if Dumbledore was a surprise (although I can see him acting as you suggested)

I'm well over the limit with 1,174 words, so I'm PMing you the real review.  Just know that I'm cutting out my thanks here so it will fit.

I think you did really well with Remus!!  He seemed a lot like JKRâ€™s Remus to me.  This is the first Remus Iâ€™ve actually read from you (or at least the most Iâ€™ve seen of him from you) and I really like how he turned out.  He was so calm!  Just like I would imagine him to be!  Even when he discovers blood from Harry, heâ€™s so laid back about it, though obviously worried.  And even when Harry starts going on about it being the blood of somebody else, he logically lists why it canâ€™t be the blood of any of those people.  If it were me, or anybody else, they might be wondering what on earth Harryâ€™s talking about having Dracoâ€™s blood on him, especially after the way Harry was acting, but not Remus.  It was sooo sad how he thought that it was actually Harryâ€™s blood and how he was so afraid that he had bitten Harry.  He seemed so worried and bothered and it was soâ€¦well, sweet of him.  LOL!  I liked how he took the second to recognize that James would have killed him.  Itâ€™s like he sees every tiny detail.  I suppose after that scare, it would be pretty easy for him to hear Harry say itâ€™s somebody elseâ€™s blood.  The beginning scene with Harry was wonderfully done, too.  It was so perfectly awkward (for Remus).  Because heâ€™s never really been much of a father figure to Harry, not like Sirius or even Dumbledore was.   Heâ€™s always remained a little to the side and always acted more like a teacher, even when he was no longer teaching.  He never seemed to get too close to Harry and so the awkwardness of it was perfect.  And after a second or two, Remus totally relaxed into the role and it suddenly seemed almost natural, and I thought that was perfect too, considering who he was, regardless of the fact that heâ€™d never done it before.  During the conversation with Dumbledore, he seemed politely confused.. lol.  And I loved how he almost felt guilty for saying his potion had been poisoned in front of Snape.  LOL heâ€™s such a good guy.  Definitely one of my favorite characters
  


I should probably start a new paragraph before your eyes melt, huh?  Harryâ€¦ man I wanted to smack him a couple times lol!  You handled his â€œmelt downâ€ really well.  He had all the insecurities I would imagine he would have after going through what he went through.  They were described well and they didnâ€™t seem like they were overdone.  Well, how COULD they be after everything that had just happened to him.  His hatred towards Snape was great, but after a while I was so ready for him to just get over it.  I mean, how hard is it to understand that it was the future and it never happened?  And probably never will now that heâ€™s back and hasnâ€™t disappeared for 23 years.  BUT I can also understand why he didnâ€™t get over it so quickly, so donâ€™t think I was attacking that.  After all, I doubt anybody would suddenly recover and see the traitor again and suddenly be civil.  And with the grudge Harryâ€™s always had against Snape to begin with, it would be pretty much impossible to expect him to suddenly be respectful and view Snape the way he had before his little â€œadventureâ€.  So my annoyance wasnâ€™t anything at your writing or anything you did, it was at Harry himself (because his characterization was so great, I just know its something he would do/think/etc).  LOL you know heâ€™s not my favorite so I get annoyed with him even over things that are justifiable.



I liked Dumbledore in this.  He didnâ€™t seem like he had any sudden revelations or anything huge like that.  In fact, it was the opposite.  And I know its only to be expected of him, but Iâ€™m just not used to seeing him as somebody that doesnâ€™t immediately get things right the first time.  It was nice to see that heâ€™s still human.  LOL I make a big deal of it when it was really nothing at all.  I just liked that he acknowledged that he would need Harry to better explain what had happened because he couldnâ€™t get the clear picture from Harryâ€™s thoughts.  And also that he had gotten the time travel wrong (future, not past).  That he didnâ€™t yet know about the cave and also that he said nothing could be done, they just had to wait for events to unfold.  He was right, too, nothing really can be done, can it?  But I liked it for some reason.  Stupid, yes, but I did.  And then I wanted to smack that old man for ignoring Harryâ€™s warning.  Heâ€™s pretty much welcoming death with open arms!!!  LOL!!  Good use of Fawkes, btw.  Fawkes is somebody I always forget to include when I write Dumbledore scenes, not that I write a lot of them.



Snape was good too.  LOL it was sort of nasty having to see him again.  After we finally got rid of him before (he was a nightmare once he revealed himself) now he is back.  But youâ€™ve done him justice once more with perfectly spiteful remarks that make me laugh!!!   My favorite:  <i>â€˜Given you also have views against cursing them, I find myself entirely lacking in options.â€™</i>   I also liked the misplaced sentimentality comment.  Oh heck, I liked pretty much everything he said.  I donâ€™t want to go on with it, though because I truly fear Iâ€™m going over the limit on this review.  That said, Iâ€™m not saying much more on your Snape because Iâ€™m sure Iâ€™ve said it all several times before.



The last thing I want to point out is the wizards debt.  It was mentioned so briefly, but you definitely have me curious and wondering.  Great job on this one!  I loved it!  Thanks!

Author Response

Iâ€™m well over the limit too, so I have sent you the complete thing.

You have no idea how relieved I am to hear what you think of Remus. Youâ€™re right, I havenâ€™t really written him before. It was so hard trying to get the right mix of worry, but not obvious worry. Having him keeping his feelings hidden for Harryâ€™s sake, but still letting slip that he is feeling something, not just a robot. 

And you are completely rightâ€¦Remus has never been much of a father figure to Harry. That was possibly the absolute hardest bit, having the sudden shift in their relationship without going overboard. And neither of them really being very good at that sort of thing, they kind of seem perfectly matched in this regard. But I figured it would come naturally to Remus, because I always felt it was the sort of thing he wanted but thought he could never have. It is his calm nature that would make him a much better parent figure than, say, Siriusâ€¦who would have killed Snape on Harryâ€™s behalf had it been him here.

I am relieved you didnâ€™t think Harry overdone. That is my greatest fear when dealing with scenes involving so much strong emotion. I see what you mean about him needing to get over it too, but I have to add in the little thought that yes, Harry knows it was the future and therefore hasnâ€™t happened yet, but that doesnâ€™t mean it wonâ€™t happen. All Harry knows from his trip to the future is that, at some point in Harryâ€™s sixth year, Snape returned to Voldemort. Sure, futureSnape (this is going to get confusing, isnâ€™t it) told him that he went over to the Dark Lord at the request of Albus, which is true, but Harry doesnâ€™t know that. All he knows is that Snape went to Voldemort, and Snape was a traitor. I wouldnâ€™t believe anything futureSnape had told me in his position. He doesnâ€™t know any of the filling story behind it either, or the nature of the betrayal, so heâ€™s just waiting for it to happen any day. And knowing the position of power Snape held you can hardly blame him from wanting to make sure Snape doesnâ€™t manage to achieve it again. Have I made any sense?

And Harry is annoying. But as long as it is his actual character that is annoying you, not my individual writing of him, then I can live. I can only hope that if you feel I have done something wrong or stupid with him, youâ€™ll tell me so I can change it before too many people read.

Ah, Dumbledore. As you said, there is nothing that can really be done. Dumbledoreâ€™s reasons for â€˜welcoming deathâ€™ will be explained more fully in the next chapter. He is letting Malfoy back to the school because Harry owes him a debt, which he cannot repay if Draco is killed, which Dumbledore suspects he will be if he doesnâ€™t return to the school. There is more to it, but thatâ€™s the general overview. 

There was actually a fair bit of foreshadowing with Snape in this chapter, but Iâ€™ll leave you to figure that out =P

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