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hahaha so the Dursley's rear their heads again lol! It'll be interesting to see if they are still alive, that is for sure!

So does Voldemort actually know that Snape is a traitor now? I assumed that he saw through Harry's eyes, but was unsure if he was definite in his assumption of Snape's involvement.

Ah well, will find out soon I guess! Great chapter as always!

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Traitor.  Such an interesting word, with so many double meanings. In the beginning of the chapter, we are led to believe it is referring to the traitor who's turning Harry over to Voldemort.  Then we hear Voldemort calling Snape "traitor" through Harry's scar connection, and we think differently
I can't believe that Snape would cut off his own dark mark to prove himself to Tonks.

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Excellent story so far. I particularly enjoyed slowly coming to the realization that Sanpe and Tonks were in fact talking about going to the Dursely's. You write Snape spectacularly well and the overall tenseness of the story is very addictive. Looking forward to reading more.

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Wow, thanks! I am veyr pleased you like Snape (I am kind of proud of him in this fic), and also that you thought the build up to that bit slow...I was worried it could be seen coming a mile off =) I hope you continue to enjoy

Is Snape the mysterious lackey or is it Draco? It could even be an as yet unknown third party. I always try to surprise the reader, so I expect the same sneakiness of somebody else. The fact that Snape was 'seen' by Voldemort and exposed so publicly is suspicious to say the least. Great chapter as always!

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This is the main 'surprise' in this fic, the answer to which will be revealed in what I have all ready written. Surprise seems like kind of the wrong word though, even if I can't think of a better one. I guess I just want people, when they get the answer, to think 'wow, I should have seen that coming...why didn't I?' The clues are all there, just veiled or sometimes misleading. I actually like it when people grab onto the wrong clues and ignore the valid ones. I guess I shall just have to wait and see if it works though =). And you think Snape being seen was suspicious? Thanks for reviewing, I am thrilled you are continuing to enjoy this.

Well the scene with the scar freaked me out. YES I KNEW HE WAS GOOD! *everyone stares at her as though she was crazy* :D

I enjoyed the fact that Snape was willing to sacrefice himself on the account of Harry and was still in canon. How do you do it? It's amazing. I will admit though that I am fairly tired right now and will be heading off to bed, which is why I am going to have to cut this review short.

Will be back tomorrow. -Valhalla Adonis-Snape

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You might want to wait a bit before making such a loud declaration, btw.

Keeping those sorts of actions in Snape in canon is a pain, as you have to be so careful with what you write. Generally I tend to write up a rough draft of all the speech so I know roughly where I need it to go, and then just tweak it until it sounds right for the characters, then I add in the description.

Anyway, I hope to see you again soon after you've gotten some sleep. =) Bysies.

I am really growing to love this strange alliance between Snape and Tonks.  They make for such a compelling pair.  I canâ€™t help but think of that scene in HBP when Snape says those nasty things to her about her patronus when she drops Harry off at the gate.  The way the two are just polar opposites makes for such an interesting read, particularly as they find themselves in need of each other at the moment.  You make ME want to write about these two characters!

And I have to comment on the beginning of this chapter.  These conversations with Voldemort are so wonderfully written.  You bring them in so well with the flow of the story.  They are both disturbing and mysterious.  I just know when we find out who this person is, we will not be disappointed! 

Oh, and letâ€™s not forget about the Dursleys.  Honestly, how you keep pulling in these twists and turns is just amazing.  A chapter ago I would have never imagined the Dursleys would somehow be brought back into the mix.  Wait, I think thatâ€™s it *light bulb pops up above my head*â€¦one of the things that makes this story so good.  You add in these elements we would never have anticipated, but yet when they do arise, we are at a place where we feel totally ready to be taken in that direction.  I really hope that makes sense.  I have ready many stories where unexpected characters pop up and it just feels so wrong, but not here.  Hmmâ€¦must be a side effect of that pesky talent of yours!   

*giggle*

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I have had a couple of comments thinking these two need to get together, and whilst I have perhaps grown to see the possibility of a Snape/Tonks ship in general, I cannot see it happening here as I like their relationship the way it is. They do play well of each other, as they are such complete opposites though, and that they are forced into each others company like this is great fun to write...you should try it!

The conversations with Voldemort were and remain the most difficult piece of this to write. Keeping the speakers identity mysterious, yet making sure the comments fit with the eventual revelation of who it is and well as who it could have been, was a nightmare. And you will find out who it is soon enough, in a couple more chapters I do believe.

Aw, and you like all the twists. Sometimes I worry that there are too many of them and that it makes the whole thing too complicated to be readable, but I just can't help myself. And it does make sense, and I am running out of adjectives to describe how hearing all this makes me feel. Sufficed to say I am squeeing on the inside. Thank you so much for all these wonderful comments and compliments. Really, you have no idea how happy they have all made me!

wow.  i absolutely LOVED this chapter.  harry's possession gave me chills, and it was so sweet to see tonks caring for him like that.  also, it might have been my imagination, but it almost seemed like snape cared, at least a tiny bit, for the two.  wonderfully written and a great advance to the plot!

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With Snape I feel it must have been your imagination =). This was one of my favourite chapters to write, so it means a lot to me when people say they enjoyed it. I am also glad you like where this is going. The plot on this has given me so many headaches it's not worth mentioning.

You requested a review in a thread i had opened, and I did get around to it! lol.
there is one problem, though... I have nothing to say that will help you in any way. :D This is a great story! It is very well written and organized. I can tell you thought everything out and planned it all before you wrote it (unlike me who just writes what comes to the top of my head :P ). 
I wish I could give you some advice on this, but i simply cannot. I would apologize, but i figure this is more a compliment to your story than me trying to give advice. lol. But, if you did want an apology, I'm sorry. ;P

I will read more soon, but I'm just very tired and want to go to bed. lol. So, thanks for a great bedtime story! :D I will continue to read your work! You are truly an amazingly talented writer!

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I can't really be annoyed with your lack of criticism, but as you said it is something of a compliment, so I'll be flattered instead. Thank you very much for taking the time to read such a long piece, and I am very pleased you enjoyed it and only hope you enjoy the rest as much. Yes, I am one for planning everything, and this fic really demanded I do that as it has so many twists and turns. I do admire anyone who can just write from the top of their heads though, as I struggle to do that. Thank you again, I really appreciate it.

The first part of this chapter was amazing. I sense there is so much being said, but you've so clever cloaked it that nothing is as it seems. I really felt that you choose each word so very carefully. I may have to read this portion several times to get its true meaning.

Now to this portrait issue. Was it really Phineas? Cuz if it wasn't and it was a certain headmaster starting with 'D', well that's going to completely mess up a short story I am currently working on about that portrait. ;-) Seriously, it IS interesting that Tonks seemed so concerned about it. And just as we were getting to the nitty gritty, Harry's dream breaks in. And how cool was that!! Not only the dream, but the scar physically splitting open. Genius!! Really hammers home both the intensity of the link and the power of V. You've got me sitting on the edge of my seat.

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Yes, the beginning of this chapter was very carefully phrased, and it took quite a long time to get it right. There are actually a couple of true meanings you can get from reading too, although only one of them is right.

I'm afriad, however, that I cannot comment on the portrait, although I would hate to mess up any fic of yours. =). I'm afriad Tonks was rather cut short by Harry though, but no doubt she'll bring it up again eventually. Thank you again for another brilliant review. I am quite flattered.

This is precious.....simply great...to force Harry to the place he so to get out of,,,love to see his reaction...the opening conversation with Voldemrt was interesting....first I thought of Snape...but that is way to ovious

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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. You thought Snape was the most obvious *is interested*. Oh well, thats one more for Snape. You don't reckon Malfoy at all?

Arg!  How can you do this?!?!  You give away so little and fill the chapter with so many clues that I think I'm going to go insane.  First there's the mysterious figure, then at the end there's the hiding place Tonks and Snape argue about without giving away much about it.  It really shows how amazing a writer you are if you can pull off such a thing so well.  The scene with Harry's scar was scary - I don't think I dared take a breath while reading it.  It's also interesting to see how Tonks is beginning to trust Snape in a way and he's beginning to trust her in return.  Fantastic chapter, Siren.  =)

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*giggles* Oh, I'm terrible sometimes. But thank you for that wonderful compliment, I am blushing like anything at the moment. All your questions should be answered in the next couple of chapters though, so hopefully you'll keep a smidgeon of sanity. I'm also fascinated by your comments about Snape and Tonks...you really think they are starting to trust each other? Thank you for the lovely review.

Yes, yes yes!!!!!  I KNEW it!  The second Tonks said that there was a place she could go, I got this insane idea that she was talking about the Dursleys.  And then she said it was Muggle and that pretty much confirmed it.  And then at the end, when they speak, "even if only the son remains..."  That pretty much had me convinced.  I hope I'm right, otherwise I'll look idiotic, won't I??  I am SO excited to see the Dursleys' reactions to this.  Can you imagine?  The long lost 'horrible' nephew appears on the doorstep years later and looks no older.

I was really impressed by the opening conversation with Voldemort.  I did bring it up in your "meet the author" thread, so I won't go into much detail on it here.  I did note that you seem to be enjoying yourself with it... in fact, I can picture you chuckling as you substitute "the figure" in for the persons name.  But I'm pretty sure I know who it is now.  I didn't when I first started this chapter (and when I posted in that thread, btw), but I'm positive now.  The characterization is great.  It much be hard to do that and not give away the character.

Oh, how I enjoyed the visual of Snape and Tonks sitting together and sipping tea... even if they did argue through most of it.  The portrait was excellent.  Just a great detail.  I never would have thought a portrait could cause a lot of damage, but it does make a lot of sense.

Lastly, the scene with Harry was downright disturbing.  I mean, just thinking about that scar splitting gives me a headache.  But to have him sit up in a trance and speak Voldemort's words??  Now that is freaky.  I can only imagine the panic Snape must have felt when he realized that Voldemort knew.  And the fact that Harry looked directly at him when saying it.  That is what got me.  It's like Voldemort was right there, seeing Snape.
  
Whew, it was a long chapter, but very good!  I think I'm looking forward to chapter 12 more than I am any other chapter, simply because I'm dying to see the Dursley's reactions.  If I'm right about that, of course.  Another great one, Siren.  Keep up the good work, I love your stuff.  And keep letting me know about the next updates.  =)  Take care.  Bibbs.

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Don't worry, you're not an idiot. *huggles*. I did make it pretty obvious (I think) and it wasn't intended as a surprise, although I suppose it could be one for some people (who don't read this response). Still, they have to be their yet to have a response, and its kind of risky having Snape wandering into the muggle World with no certainty of shelter to be found there.

And yes, I am enjoying it. I'm almost cackling with glee when I write, a stupid grin plastered to my face. It's quite embarrassing really, and I'll be sad when I have to reveal it. And up until I read this review I had a feeling I knew who you thought it was, but now I'm not so sure. And its not as hard as you might think...in fact it.s getting to be quite fun *cackles evilly*. And the portrait is a detail of surprising importance.

That scene with Harry was disturbing to write too, as was getting into Snape's head as to how he must feel when he hears those words. This scene has the most detail in my head by far.

Anyway, thank you for another wonderful review. I do so love yours, and the detail you put into them. It really makes my day. Take care too.

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