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mmm interesting, not to mention mysterious and cliffeish! Time turner maybe? though I couldn't possibly guess what the reason for it could be.

Still, you have certainly intrigued me and I look forward to what you come up with for your next chapter!

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I must warn you that these and most of my other reviews will probably consist of disjointed observations from throughout the chapter, unless there is a major overarching theme I want to talk about.
First off, the title of this chapter amused me to begin with, and when I heard it used in context, amused me even more.  The thought of Harry thinking Lupin to be "his own personal teddy bear", even under the circumstances, is amusing.
Next, Snape's arrogance at the fact that he could brew better in his sleep than many other accompliced Potions Masters is interesting, mainly because I haven't heard it very often.  I mean, it usually is a generally assumed fact in most fics, and sometimes other characters even say something to that effect, but it is a bit rare that Snape says it.  Not that I particularly mind.  Arrogant, sarcastic, snide, yep, that sounds like Snape to me.  
Just one small thing: I think Lupin's potion is spelled "Wolfsbane" not "wolfsbain". I know I'm being anal with things like that, but I just thought I'd point it out.  Also, it always annoys me that Snape and Lupin (and Sirius until the end of Book 5) can never seem to get over their childish habit of bickering. They're grown men, for Merlin's sake!  
Hey, Lupin can do sarcasm too! 

â€˜Naturally, because as an unconscious werewolf my means of communication are innumerable.â€™

One thing I take issue with in this chapter is how Harry calls for Kreacher "get out here and fix this mess before I iron your hands".  Usually, Harry seems to be a little less.well...Malfoy-esque, for lack of  better term, when dealing with house elves.  This manner of treating house elves is a bit too reminisent of both Lucius Malfoy and Sirius Black for my liking
Finally, I like the way you described trying to Floo into a residence which had been warded against you.  Actually, I'm suprised we didn't see it sooner in canon.  After all, the Hogwarts fireplaces (hopefully) were warded agains Voldemort.
"The Boy Who Bloody Lived"
THAT was bloody brilliant!

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Often I will write a chapter, and then pick a line or a couple of words out of it that strike me as fitting for the title. In this instance, there was no question. The second I wrote that sentence I knew I had my title. It fit, whilst being completely and utterly contrary to the seriousness of the chapter itself.

Snapeâ€™s potions abilities strike me as something of which he is very proud, but not in a boastful sort of way. He just knows he is damn good at what he does, and sees no reason to downplay his genius. Arrogant it is, in a way, but since it is true I think he can be forgiven. Besides, he only says it in defense when Dumbledore suggests he might have made a mistake. He is just laying the issue to rest once and for all, in his usual Snape way.

Lol, yes the spelling of the potion is wrong. I thought I got all of those, so thanks for pointing it out. Snape and Lupinâ€™s bickering isnâ€™t as bad as Snape and Siriusâ€™, and I think in the case of the former it is more Snapeâ€™s fault than anything. He winds Lupin up something chronic, the way Sirius used to wind Snape up. Kinf of ironic, since Snape hated the way Sirius spoke to him, yet does exactly the same thing to Remus. Perhaps he considers it punishment for having been Siriusâ€™ friend.

As for Harryâ€™s little moment with the house-elf; I blame this on stress, irritation, anger and a touch of fear manifesting themselves as Harry being a complete git. Heâ€™s possibly a little hysterical at this point, and Kreacher is a constant that shouldnâ€™t be able to fail him unless things are really bad. He knows this, so when he fails to summon the elf he resorts to threats in the vague hope they will work since the alternative can only be bad. That and it gives him somewhere to aim his emotions. I didnâ€™t really mean for it to be so Malfoy-esque, but nevertheless I still quite like it there.

I never really considered seeing failed flooing in canon before, but it is quite an interesting idea now you mention itâ€¦what exactly was Hogwarts floo warded against, since whilst I am sure Voldemort couldnâ€™t enter through it, Lucius Malfoy certainly could as Governor in earlier books, and no doubt as a students father in later ones. Could Dumbledore legally have kept out the parents of his students, even if the were Death Eaters?

I like how you've got everyone very in-character. :]

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Thank you, I am pleased and flattered you think so =)

You write dialogue very well - it's believable and flows naturally and Dumbledore's diplomacy and Snape's temper were perfectly pitched. I've just finished writing a story, but my style is very different from yours in that mine is (too) descriptive. It's refreshing to come across a story like this.

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I haven't read your stuff yet, however having seen it in recommended lists it is on my list of stuff I do intend to read. And for you to be that popular I cannot imagine your writing is too descriptive. I am flattered that you are enjoying mine so much, and that you like the more dialogue heavy approach. Thank you for taking the time to review =)

What a great twist. I love the sarcastic banter between Snape and Remus. Good job. My only concern is Snape talking back to Dumbledore. He knows better than to do that.

I'll review some more chapters tomarrow before I go to work.

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You see, when you say Snape knows better than that it immediately makes me think that Dumbledore must be some sort of tyrant, which I don't think he is. I've always believed Snape can and does talk back to him, even if he isn't listened too, in the same way that Minerva does. Everyone needs someone to argue with tham and remind them of their faults and failings, and Dumbledore is no different. Talking back doesn't necessarily mean a l ack of respect either, and I have tried to keep Snape respectful. Thank you for reviewing, I really hope you continue to enjoy the rest.

Something givesd me a gut feeling that Snape did poison the Wolfsbain potion, but I do not want to make assumptions just yet. Another well written chapter. I felt a lot of suspense in the conversation between Dumbledore, Lupin and Snape which was in my opinion up to professional novel standard because it wasnt done in a corny way like some authors have done it(I think I'm guilty of that one btw)

imprisoning me in my chair to read the rest of your story? That doesn't sound that bad but how do I get about with my University readings. :P

I liked the title of this chapter and how you sneekishly inserted it into the conversation. Well done. -Valhalla Adonis-Snape

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oooo, I like hearing about gut feelings and suspicions, they make me happy whether they be right or wrong. And I flattered you found it genuinely suspenseful (I'll have to comment on it when I read yours, since people normally aren't guilty of half of what they think they are).

Why would I want you to do your university readings? My fic is far more important than any life-making, career defining lessons you could be learning. Thanks again for another wonderful review =)

Oohâ€¦a mystery! Very exciting.  I love how there are several things going on at once hereâ€”missing Harry, secret intruders, poisoned potions.  The multiple POVs in this story are starting to make sense now.  If there are going to be two realities going on simultaneously, then we readers are going to need more than one guide through this story.  I really enjoyed how you broke this chapter down.  At the end it was a neat concept to sit back and think that the events could really have been happening at the same time if Harry has traveled in time or wherever he has managed to land himself.  Oh, and I have to comment on the line <i>No one could manage to get an entire life story into a single look quite as effectively as Severus Snape.</i>  I swear I have thought the same thing when reading the HP books, and I remember thinking how glad I was Alan Rickman picked up that trait for the movies.  Great, great line!!

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Ah yes, there are a couple of mysteries spread through this whole piece (you'll meet the biggest of them all in a few chapters). Unfortunately, this is the only chapter in which you see two different timelines happening at once though. Also, after this, the POV's will start to sort themselves out a bit too. The effect you noticed of living two timelines at once was too confusing to keep up for any length of time in this manner, although it will be explored in a slightly different way. It was a shame, since it was an interest plan, but it proved to be too impractical. It was something interesting to explore though, even if only briefly. And other people have commented on that line too. I am somewhat fond of it myself. And it is nice to see it picked up by Rickman, as it portrays such a big part of his personality. I am so thrilled to know you are enjoying this so far, and await eagerly to hear what you think of how the plot develops. Thank you again, your reviews are absolutely brilliant!

quite the mysterious chapter!  i think i have a vague idea of what's going on, and i'm excited to see if i've guessed right!  as usual, this is well-written and intriguing.  once again, though, i'm finding snape's rudeness a little over-the-top.  i never really imagined him being such a prat around dumbledore.

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So, did you guess right? I guess, with Snape, I just figured he would be very sensitive about people insulting his potions skills. Even if it is Dumbledore. I suppose I saw him as more irritated than rude, and I never figured him for someone who hides his annoyance purely for the benfit of others. All through the HP series we see flashes of Snape being blunt with Dumbledore, but as it is all from Harry's POV we don't see much. Without Harry around I see no reason why Snape wouldn't be annoyed, and show it. Thank you for the review =)

Now this is certainly mysterious!! Harry's either in the past, or some AU. Or can a timeturner send you to the future?? Don't know, but heck, it's going to be a fun ride either way!

Seeing Snape get a tad pissy at being accused of bumbling a potion was fun -- you can tell that really cuts him to the bone. And the little bit about Dumbledore being amused that Snape didn't understand the whole reverse psychology thing with Harry . . . very cool.

I'm especially amused to think of Harry popping into Diagon Alley in his jammies; guess he'll deserved all the embarrassment he gets! Once again, and excellent chapter. Keep the fun coming!!

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Well, you'll just have to wait and see where Harry has gone. I can imagine Snape is very proud of his potions, and would hate for anyone to believe their could be a fault with one. And poor Harry *giggles* with all those people seein ghim in Dudleys cast off pyjamas. He really should t hink a bit more before running off places. *sighs* I am so pleased you are continuing to enjoy this.

Interesting!!!  Did he go forward in time?  I think this is the best chapter yet.  They get better as you go on.  Iâ€™m really curious about Lupin and how he was poisoned.  Iâ€™m sorry, this is a very short review, but Iâ€™m looking forward to finding out what happened, so I must move onâ€¦

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Ah, all will be explained, as you have no doubt all ready read. I'm afraid the answers about Lupin won't be coming for quite some time though...have to leave something for you to wonder about. Thank you for the review, I am incredibly pleased you want to read forward that much.</i></font>

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I know I said I'd only review one or two chapters, but since you have few reviews for these chapters and I'm enjoying it greatly, I'll review from here to the last.First, about the plot. You have created a most fascinating plot from the start as I hadn't seen in a "whole year fic" for some time. Your choice of words and hints of humor from time to time give the story a nice flow that keeps the reader, well... reading. =)The only negative thing I can see is that sometimes one or two paragraphs can be confusing, but I gladly overlook that for the amazing plot and characterization. Good job!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thank you very much for taking the time to read, and review. It is very kind of you to do so, especially since I wasn't expecting it....it is a wonderful surprise. I am very pleased you are enjoying the plot thus far, as the whole thing has taken alot of working to get it to a stage where I think it will work to achieve the ending I want. It is also very relieveing to know that the hints of humour are being picked up on, as they are supposed to be there to help distract from what can be a very heavy plot line, and make it more readable. I shall have to take a look to see if I can find and correct the confusing paragraphs, and I do have a tendancy to create overly long sentences. Thank you again for the lovely review, your thoughts and comments are very helpful :)</i></font>

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It's great to see that you're adding to this story, Siren.  I really enjoyed this chapter, especially the beginning  part between Remus, Severus, and Dumbledore.  That conversation was wonderfully written - perfectly to character for all three of them.  The second part was also very well done, but in a different way - the descriptions were so clear and vivid, as was Harry's confusion and final decision.  I liked the touch with the floo powder not working correctly - it added some suspence, making me wonder what's really going on.  Thanks for continuing this story.  =) 

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thankyou for your lovely review Violet. I'm also pleased that I started writing this again. I did enjoy it when I first started it, but after HBP I feared it would remain floating in unfinished limbo forevermore. But when I opened it it seemed to flow quite easily *knocks wood in the vaue hope I won't hit another block again for a while*</i></font>

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Wow, you updated! :D I was wondering if you were ever going to again or not, lol. Great chapter, wonder where Harry is and if he ever did manage to get to Diagon Alley? Obviously I'm going to have to wait for the next chapter but hopefully that won't be too longer wait will it? Thanks for the update.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> No, you definately won't have to wait long as I have just added the next chapter. I hope you enjoy it as much as the previous. Thankyou for the review, and I am so pleased to know that you have picked it up again. I was getting worried I had lost all my readers.</i></font>

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