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I still think it's James. Oh god, the tension with Sirius and Ana and now James and Lily seems to be pissed off with him, so if they hypothetically break up, then Ana would be home free and then they could go out if she really wanted to and if he was the actual Mr. Midnight, but it might not be and oh. my. god. *breathes* 

It's a little sketchier than your previous chapters, but that's alright. The plot has furthered and I SO want to find out what happens next. I want to see who the actual Mr. Midnight is (I'm still calling 'James'). And why did Ana lie about the fact that the pearls were real? Does no one bar Eben and Nat know that she's well off? What's with that? Anyway, yay!

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i actually dont think i meant anything by her lying... just sort of... not advertising that she has them, you know? it wasnt really important to the sotry line...or was it???
lol.
thanks as always calex! i'll try to get the next chapter up soon!

*snicker* Oh how I love the little rivalry between them. And it's only natural that Sirius would be intrigued by Ana. I really am starting to love all of this. Is it wrong that I had to catch my breath when Sirius started reciting all of the stuff he found out about her? I found that strangely hot and flattering. She's so stubborn. I'd love to find out how she one-ups him. Brilliant work, as always.

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teehee... no idea how fun it is to write! and you crack me up!!! 
thanks so much!
(you should see my grin...)

*grin* I love Ana's madness. But why oh why won't she say her name? *shakes head* Silly girl. Also... James mentioned a girl at the wedding. So was it James that she was feeling charitable to, talking in the darkness? Or was Sirius there as well? Who was the mystery man that Nat keeps badgering her about? I love the Sirius/Ana interaction. It was fun and lighthearted and funny. I still love her and her idosyncracies. Can't wait to read what happens next.

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havent you ever trapped yourself like that? said no and then you cant just back down? backing down would be letting him win and ana doesnt like that (like me) 
and anyway it was an interesting way for them to meet...
next chapter ihope will be up soon. (all is written because i CANT STOP!!! - my mind is constantly going over the story... eee eee eeeh) 
and anyway thanks again!
(oh and any other of those questions i didnt answer...i'm not going to. all shall be revealed!!)

*grin* I love it. It's fun, funny and snarky. What's not to love? I adore Nat. When you first introduced her, I thought she'd be a more uptight Lily, but then I just absolutely adored her. I love Ana and Nat's friendship, how sarcastic and crazy they are. Eben sounds interesting as well, and I liked this portrayal of a girl and her best friend over relationships. Wonderful work, I can't wait to see Ana and her mystery man meet! (because they have to meet, right? Right?)

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oh yeah...they will. teehee.
thanks so much. and i'm glad someone likes nat, coz i think she is a lot of fun (well fun to write) but someone said she was annoying! well true but a fun annoying!
thanks again!

All I can say is... much love. I've been reading this story all in one go and just...gah! It's wonderful, crazy, frustrating, beautiful and just so infinitely fulfilling to read. *grin* 

And holy god. I though Oliver was sexy before but you've <i>really</i> made him sexy. He's beyond sexy now, actually. He's just... and I'm just... incoherent at the moment, obviously. *grin*

I adore seeing how their friendships gradually drifted to more mature things, loved seeing the development of the various relationships and how that affected  the friendship of the group. Finally, I adored seeing how Oliver warmed to Yssy, to see hints of him fancying her when she herself was so oblivious to it. Wonderful story, absolutely. It's fun, funny, frustrating, excruciating until I was caught between the desires to laugh and to tear out my hair screaming at Yssy to just kiss him already. But that's already been done. *grin*

Am absolutely impatient for the next chapter. Brilliant work.

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...guh...and...gah! and.

*whimper*

You've made me incoherent. You actually have. You've... oh holy god, <i>Draco</i>. I was nearly hyperventilating when the Weasleys were all just standing there going to let him go through that spell. Thank god Ginny pulled through. There's a girl. Oh wow. *shakes head* 

Very, very good chapter. Very good. I loved seeing how Draco confessed, but still had the good grace not to spill everything out in the Weasleys' house. Very classy and discreet of him, very Draco. I loved Ginny's poem, where is that from? Is it from an existing poem, a song or did you write it? Very pretty, in any case. 

You explained their outrage and her heartbreak beautifully. Very much so. The owl with I love you sent to Ginny. The corruption of the government that didn't want to prosecute Malfoy for who he is, so just sent him off with a warning. The anger the Weasleys showed towards him when he returned, humility so foreign to him. 

But the best, BEST part was how she finally gave in to him, finally over there in her house with her family watching, to save him from pain he would inflict on himself just to prove how much he loved her. But I am SO angry wtih Arthur and Molly, though. I'd have thought they at least would be rational, despite the fact that Arthur WAS nearly imprisoned. The rest of them probably wouldn't have any idea of the consequences of the truth spell, but Arthur must have done, yet he allowed it to go on, even after Hermione told them what the effects would be.

Wonderful chapter, and a far too rambly review for me. The gist of it was...I LOVE. And, you know, waiting for the update. *grin*

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ahhh I love long reviews so here goes my (not as long) response. Thanks a lot for all the positive feedback...I wish I could write fanfic all day...*sigh* anyways...I'm really glad you like it and just a side note: I love it when people review for chapters because it gives me a long of encouragement to write *hinthint* I've actually gotten chapter 10 ready to post as soon as another oneshot gets validated though. Thanks again for the review and because of your very nice and very positive review I feel like writing some more of my current chapter...must go and write now!

It's very intriguing. I like Ana, her no BS stance, her nihilistic viewpoint, her bitterness over her life. She's not very nice, and she doesn't try to be. But she's likeable. I don't know if that made any sense at all. *grin* Anyway, fabulous story, I really liked this. Her witchy Grandmother is absolutely priceless. Loved her. And just who is the mysterious stranger that she spent her time with? Obviously a wizard, from the mentioning of the giant squid. Like I said about Letters to Lindsay, you have a very clever and subtle way of giving us information, or developing your characters, while still making a story entertaining and lighthearted. But you also manage to write the underlying sense of cynicism and bitterness very well. Looking forward to more of this.

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hmmm...intriguing huh? thanks muchly. glad we have an ana fan. i like her but i like her friend more (later...) shes got some problems but deals. and yeah no BS.
so subtle??? moi??? say what? i have never been described as subtle... thats funny. my sister is currently on the floor laughing.
i guess writing brings out a better side of me... lol
hope to hear from you again, and major props for noticing the squid comment...winkwink

*sighs happily* I do so love reading a good story, which this was. Good. Seriously. I loved your dizzy, crazy, strange, mad Lindsay and the different side to Lily. I loved seeing how Lily started to become closer to the Marauders, the friendship that she forms with Sirius, how that gradually grew into something real. I loved the portrayal of Lily's gradual softening to James, and how he slowly gets jealous. Very subtle, but very effective. I adored also the trumping out of all those fabulous ghost stories and urban legends. God, I haven't heard them in years. Brought back some memories of spook fests of my own. You have a brilliant way of writing. It's deceptively silly and fun and humourous, but you manage to develop the characters with a subtlety that makes it almost impossible to spot. It's very clever. You know how to show the characters' changing moods and mix them with moments of hilarity. 

The scene with Lindsay and her mother...<i>humanised</i> her for me. She was loud and fun and crazy, but now she's real, with problems. I love how un-"look at me, I have EMO problems and I'm going to cry about it and whine". She's strong, but she's got a limit. I adored how real you made her character in this chapter. 

Well, needless to say, I can't wait for another chapter of this brilliant story. I'm very intrigued, and I do hope things go well with her... And to see how her relationship with Sirius develops as well.

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hey thanks! firstly have to say, i love long reviews!!!
you described lindsay well! lol. glad you like the story and my ghost stories, we used to seriously tell them around the campfire. good fun. 
thanks for reviewing you really know how to compliment a gal!

Oh god. Things are really starting to be tense, there. I feel so bad for Draco. Ginny's going to hate him, the Weasleys will never trust him, and you've managed to make us see that despite helping Scrimgeour, he's a good guy, and that he didn't mean to make this happen. I really hope that things work out for him and I'm keeping my fingers crossed for what will happen in the next chapter!

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lol thnks a lot! Just to let everyone know, I'm actually not being lazy and updating slowly...it's just that I'm waiting for a one-shot to be validated and as soon as it is, I'll post chapter 9. Thanks for all the reviews!

*grin* I love that James had been added into the Top Ten list. And his surprise at it, as well. And Sirius' ire over Lyre, which has not disappeared. It's almost a case of "methinks the lady doth protest too much" with her about Lyre. She's painfully stubborn, and you've written her to be a wonderful mix of her parents, and what we know of James Potter snr. as well. Wonderful chapter, as usual. I'm glad that you've not abandoned this story and I can't wait to read the next chapter. I'm especially curious to see what their punishment will be like, and how they'll handle it. *smirk*

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I'm really quite excited about this. You've really hooked me into the story, and I do absolutely adore the twins. While the use of the names Sirius and James have become quite the norm for next-Gen Harry Potter's kids, this is quite different in how your James acts more like other people's Remus, and how Sirius is the seeming de facto leader of the group. I like that you haven't made their rival Slytherins the children of Draco Malfoy etc. and I like the idea of their punishment. I'm very much looking forward to finding out what happens next.

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Oh Lord, I don't think I've ever laughed as hard, as continuously as I did when reading this story. Absolutely perfect. I adored this completely. The best parts that I have to mention: the Holy Grail quote (I'm a die hard Monty Python fan), the April Fool's prank, Harry's observation skills when it comes to the kids, Snape getting his comeuppance in <i>twelve</i> Potter/Weasley children, the reactions of <i>all</i> the professors at the "Nightmare Dozen".... God, far too much. I enjoyed this story tremendously. This shall be the first story that I've read that I've given a 10 rating. Well done.

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Perfect, absolutely perfect. *sighs happily* I'm glad Ginny finally got her head out of her arse and told Draco she cared for him. Now if she only realised that she <i>loves</i> him... *grin* But Suzon and Harry? Perfect. I love how understanding he is with her, though it does make me miffed on Ginny's behalf. I love how you've given us scenes of both couples, like little snap shots. It's a wonderfully surreal, movie-like effect. Have fun in the UK! And if you weren't planning to already, go to London! It's a fantastic city.

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Thanks for reviewing! Yes When I wrote it I did picture it like in a movie, I think I do that a lot :-) Glad you liked it.
Ginny and Draco, yes, they are very challenging to write, it's difficult cause I myself don't know whether I want Ginny to be with Malfoy or with Harry. I have two possible endings to this story in my mind, so  let's see where the story takes us... I'll update Chapter 24 later, so keep checking back and thanks again for your review!

To be completely honest, I wasn't too sure about this fic when I first started reading it. It had seemed too choppy, didn't really flow very well. But I was curious. The thing is, the more I read, the more I was sucked into the world that you had created. I found myself rooting for Suzon to get Harry, I kept wanting to slap Ginny over the head for being blind about Draco. I love the development of his character, here, the progression from when he first returned to now. 

Your writing style has improved over the chapters, becoming much more confident, the characters becoming more 3 dimensional. The story flows much better, and I have to admit that they way that you're currently structuring your story makes reading it much easier. It was a bit too cramped and grouped up in the earlier chapters, making it quite difficult to read, and it wasn't very clear who was speaking, at times. 

However, as said before, this story has definitely improved and I find myself caught up in the plot, and wanting the best for Ginny and Draco, and to Harry with the Horcruxes. I'm really intrigued with the direction that this fic is taking, and I'm glad that the relationships are starting to smooth over. I can't wait for the next chapter.

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Thank you very much for your detailed review, that's fantastic. I'm glad you stuck with me and kept reading. 

It' s beautiful for me to read that you got into it and are now feeling involved. Also I 'm happy someone is actually rooting for Suzon, as most people don't like her :-)

Thanks for your review, it's very much appreciated!

Ah hell, Camilla. She's starting to fall for Severus, I know she is. But why is she still delluding herself over this? If she gets close to him in that way, only to go with Lupin, who she <i>thinks</i> she prefers, Severus is going to feel far more hurt and...a whole world of badness will ensue.

Wonderful story, so far. I love your characterisation of Severus, and the alternate look into his life. I love your portrayal of him, he's still the same caustic, sarcastic git, but somehow you've made him likeable. You've humanised him. It's wonderful to see Camilla learning that he isn't so bad after all.

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Aww, thank you. I'm glad you like him, because I happen to like him. It's hard making him so rude all the time... =)

Thanks soo much for such a fantastic review!

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