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Its good to see Harry display leadership in a practical manner among non-school fellows.  I really enjoyed the scenes with Malfoy and Jade too.  Did you take Zauberer from the German?  And the other question was, why James and Peter digging the tunnel?  Any reason, or just a random pick of two Marauders?  And probably the best sentence in this chapter is "I'm only twenty-two" - you've convinced the reader that Greg is older, and then when you shatter that its very effective in demonstrating the difficulty that werewolves live in.  Congrats again, and I'll probably email you with some more detail sometime!

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He's gearing up for bigger and better things a little at a time, really. I'm fond of the Hospital Wing scene, too- it showed the more human, vulnerable sides of Harry, Jade, and Malfoy. I thought James and Sirius doing everything together was a little cliched, and Peter *was* a Marauder too, so it was just a somewhat random pick of the four, no reason, no big reprecussions. Looking forward to that letter, as always!

Very good.  Excellent points: Harry's tunnel vision in the opening paragraphs is an advanced concept to write about, so well done there.  The use of the word 'conversationally' when Neville asks Harry about his fire-breathing incident, and the descriptions of fire throughout are well detailed.  Now the choice: even later bedtime, or the next chapter?  Well done on getting these two up, anyway!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thank you! Actually, the two are the same chapter, but broken up because it was too big... When I was writing the tunnel vision bit, it didn't seem like so much of a challenge, but now that you've mentioned it, I wonder if I'll ever be able to write about it again. LOL, joking. I've had many people say that my writing is very detailed, and so when I got a chance to describe something that was so changeable, I jumped- also, it's a big part of the chapter, so I wanted people to notice. You're going to bed? Well, I'm getting ready for school, so you must be a few timezones away from me... night!</i></font>

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Reading through the heaven bit makes much more sense this time through, especially knowing that it is about Sirius from the start.  You had some excellent descriptive language all the way through this chapter; your command of the English language is exceptional.  Clever idea about the eyes too.  Just a few spelling issues: Carmel should be caramel (about Salem's wake as he flies off) and accommadate should be accommodate. (heaven must be big enough to...).  Most importantly, Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!

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Thanks, Schnook, corrections noted!

That was a nice way to end the story.  Well done again, although of course the original gets my vote (its longer), and enjoyed this follow-up.

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Loved the fairy-tale style version!  A new way for JKR to recap at the start of Book 7?

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Thanks for a great story.  I thought that it got a bit rushed over the last few chapters, like you just wanted to finish, and that detracted from the plot and atmosphere.  However, overrall I think you had excellent dialogue, a good plot, and the Shakespeare thing was brilliant.  Look forward to reading the sequel I just discovered existed!

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Me gusta mucho is Spanish for "I like it a lot" (literally, it pleases me very much").  So yes, I liked it.  The alcohol thing must be movie canon; the only time (that I remember) when alcohol is mentioned in school is in HBP, with Slughorn's "oak-matured mead".  Firewhisky etc is available in Hogsmeade, not Hogwarts.  Although looking at Slughorn, I guess teacher's are allowed it.  And at feasts too, because Hagrid gets drunk at Christmas (at least once), now that I think of it.  So I guess students couldn't bring it, but I wouldn't be surprised if they could transfigure it, as you pointed out.  So there we go.

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I LIKE it!  Hooray!  I had forgotten about "Harry's Room" - its been a while, and it was nice to see it back again.  I do wonder about how alcohol gets into Hogwarts - seems unlikely, I would think.  And me gusta mucho the Animagus training

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Well, Harry's Room served no purpose for a while, but it fit in here just fine, so there you go. And the alcohol? Well, there's mead and wine in the kitchens, Firewhiskey, mead, wine and presumably other things avaliable in Hogsmeade, and it surely wouldn'y be that hard for an older student to do a spell- "Something, something, halfstring hum, turn this water into rum!" Yeah? Or was that movie canon? Um... me gusta mucho... is that good or bad?</i></font>

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Anyone who takes down the serious-Sirius joke is good enough for me!  Good work, twas funny indeed

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Well done!  I like your finish - its very JKR-ish (as in, there is another book to go).  You finish on the train (YAY!), and there is a spark of hope.As to the title, I think that Sect of the Serpent is a good title because in many of JKR's books, the title is not necessarily the main feature, OotP being the most obvious example.I don't think there's much more to say, except that its been a great ride, I've loved your writing style and characterisation, so thankyou very much.p.s. Congratulations on your marriagep.p.s.  You can change the bit at the start of the story to 'story completed' now!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Well!  Somebody finally got where I was going with the title!  That was my thinking exactly.  Thanks for all your nice comments along the way.</i></font>

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I like, I like, as usual.  Or perhaps..."This sally into the fictional world doth bring me pleasure, fair lady, and I congratulate thee for thy invention".  Good creativity with the presents, but I think that quoting JKR didn't work.  Yes, its a fantastic quote, but you write well enough not to have to borrow straight from her, and I think it detracted significantly from the rest of the chapter.  Still, well done as usual!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> *Cackle* My thanks, good sir, for I do appreciate this exchange of cultured words between we two, and the critique has been duly noted.</i></font>

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You wondered why/how Emperor's New Groove fits in...Kronk sings his own theme music.  (I think its at the start of the movie when he is 'killing' Cuzco).  Anyway, I'm glad you have (started) updating your reviews, and hope you update the story soon.  p.s. I would love to know how the shopping lady does her rounds with an empty trolley (which is a stroke of genius)...are the characters in this parody thick enough to eat air?

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> YES!  It all fits together like pieces of a puzzle!  I heart that movie tons and tons.  You want to know why the characters are think enough to eat air?  Well, my friend, because stupidity sells.  Its just gosh darn funny.</i></font>

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An excellent chapter.  I think there were some particularly good quotes in there, which was fitting for such a solemn chapter.  "there is nothing half so melancholy as a battle won"...how true.  I did, also, love your wry quote "usually when you say "I love you" " or "you hexed all these people?" were particularly good.  But best of all was Voldemort playing guilt trips on Harry, which is a brilliant idea and just like him.  So well done!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thank you!</i></font>

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Coniunctis viribus Domini invenio Successori et conduco Successori comminus intus finis finium conditae celsi et antiquus solum doctrina, antebellum.Well, I know some of these words, but its a long time since I have done Latin....'something-about-life' Master...Heir and leads the Heir...finish...only doctrine, end-war.A rough translation of a rough translation (with words missing).  Liked Ginny-Harry VERY much (possibly more than JK's which was so random, and for me that's a big call).  Also loved Hermione's next run-in with the telescope.  Go Jane!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Well, that's the last time I ask anyone t translate my crappy attempt at Latin! Never again, never again... I wince at seeing how badly everyone- not you, Schnook, yours is pretty good- has mangled this. Possibly, it was my fault for writing it badly in the first place. Thanks for trying, though!</i></font>

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well, that was a plot point and a half.  I think this is lining up for the silliest fanfic ever award...keep up the good work!

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Is there actually an award cause I want it. Wooooooot. I will eventually finish this story, I promise! XD

I'm so glad I don't have Ron's ideas on a profitable way to spend an afternoon.  Hooray for random!Snape !

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Number three. Yes, I agree. And randomness is my second favourite thing apart from animals and musicals. Wait. That was three. Oh well.

*everyone winces at You-know-who's name, and then keeps on singing*I am being very entertained by this :)

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Muah ha ha ha. I wish my school would burst into song with a mass murderer. And I'm glad that you're entertained. Hee hee.

It may be dumb...but it also happens to be funny :)

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Aww. Thanks!

Woo! yeah!  Wicked ending!  That was a fantastic chapter, I really enjoyed that scene.  Although it was starting to get a bit "I saw this in OotP", that final twist...top stuff!  Waiting in excitement for the plots to be tied up (and nice French, btw)

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks!  </i></font>

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Well, I was fooled...of course, it could still be her... ;)Now I have to go and check for the clues...nice thoughts about who you truly are though.

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks!  I liked that bit.</i></font>

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Is it a Chinese Fireball crossed with an Antipodean Opaleye?  (and was my other comment too long to reply to?)p.s. Go Tristan...I think, I'm not sure yet...

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Yes! You're the first to get it right, Schnook! And yeah, that comment was pretty long... those kinds of reviews make me happy, but they stagger me as well. I just can't seem to reply to them.</i></font>

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Woohoo!  she's back!It was really interesting to go back and read the other chapters; I'm yet again impressed with your planning Jane!  I thought that the two training scenes were good (Harry and Mark; Harry and junior DA), and I particularly enjoyed the window scene.  It wasn't just suspense; you managed to convey the half-excitement of the event too, so well done.Again, I do wonder where Harry suddenly picked up all this talent, this time with sword-fighting; has he been reading again or had another teacher, or is this more mysterious random skill jumps (I've talked about this before).  Still, it was also a good moment, which leads me to Jade...Having gone back and reread, I think that the problem before was not so much that Jade was a Mary Sue, but that she was a little one-dimensional.  When she was a very minor character that was OK, but as she appeared more we needed something new, and THAT is particularly why I liked this chapter.  She 'fills out' in terms of character; there is now another layer or two to her personality and it gives explanation to why she does what she does.  I am particularly intrigued by the fact that it looks like she had been crying back in chapter whatever-it-was before the Order meeting.Well done again!Schnookp.s.  The text in "Dreams..." has suddenly gone all bold, which you will probably want to correct ;) - KZS

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* And reading through the other reviews, I agree with ladyluxury; Harry hasn't been this mean about Hermione crying in the bathroom since PS (and you know what happened that time...)  Still, top job

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> BRING OUT THE TROLLS!</i></font>

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ohoh....silly boy!Good quidditch game though, and top stuff with Ron and his game play charts.  Most of all, good fight with Hermione!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thanks!</i></font>

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Oops!  Suddenly discovered, when I went to read ch 37, that I hadn't reviewed this one!  An excellent chapter: particular highlights were Neville (waiting for developments...), and "I'll give you two guesses, and the first one doesn't count".  I also thought that Dumbledore's room was a fantasitc creation, well done for a tops idea!

<i><b><font color=#000080>Author's Response:</b> Thank you!  I want a library like Dumbledore's in my house...</i></font>

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