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I love James' ability to piece together three or more words into one piece of gibberish. This was super charming and promising for a beginning! Keep up the fantastic work!

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This is pretty well-written. I can definitely tell because of the fact that you're twenty, so that is a big help! I really liked how Remus describes the girl. Where was he when he was staring at her? She did not notice, so I am curious!

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Thank you!

*hands you a cookie in appreciation* ^^

In my imagination (scary place that xD), he was standing just inside the doorway of the dormitory. Sirius' bed would be the one to the right of the door. She doesn't notice him because of the plot I'm contemplating for the novella. I'd give you a proper answer, but I don't want to give away the surprise. Lol.

That was so good. I haven't read something so amazing in years. Scarlet was perfect!

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Aww, thank you so much!

That is so kind of you, I loved writing Scarlet as it really got me out of my writers block funk thing.

And in YEARS?! Wow, that's a great compliment! 

thanks for reading and reviewing :)

The ending really made my day. Oh dear, Viola is experiencing the blunders of being a man…That came out sounding extremely weird.

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Haha, that did sound weird. :P but it's true. I was bound to make it a bit more difficult for her, since the being a boy thing is easy (polyjuice potion, gotta love magic). ;)
Thank you for reviewing.

Awesomeness yet again! If I were Hermione, I would have dumped Ron instantly for wearing all that orange…he has red hair…that doesn't go very well...

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Well Hermione has to put up with Ron and Ron has to put up with Hermione, it all evens out. Glad you liked it!

I really like this. So is Scorpius unaware of the fact that he might be "in the closet"? This is going to be awesome!

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Hehehe, no. Scorpius knows. I would say he's selectively out of the closet. He wouldn't lie, but he doesn't go out of his way to make it apparent. That'll be more evident as the story progresses because you'll notice that people he's close to are aware while strangers are not. 
Thank you so much for reviewing! :) --Jenna

Haha, I really liked this. It's a lot more verbose than the others I've read and there are almost no grammatical errors. It really is developing too! Within two chapters, the plot has already sprung and extended into the school year. I hope that she'll pass potions!

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Hi!  I'm glad you liked the story!

I know I tried not to keep things stuck in the beginning of the year because the plot picks up later on. 

Thanks for your review.

Always going to love that tension between Dessie and Fred…just saying…

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Me too. it's tons of fun to write (:

OMG! I am so sorry I haven't reviewed in such a long time. I have been reading the stories but I didn't have the time to review them! Marching band (yeah, I live down south and we do love our football), college applications, school, AP english, and Student  Congress….a really cute guy (but that didn't happen D:)
I can't wait until the ball…..I'm hoping that Candice will look like a complete knock out and she'll turn heads. Lawlz, the halloween chapter I still read over one time or another. The story seemed pretty good this time around- I loved the awkwardness of Lucy having to sit on her crush's lap. If I was her, I would have been the same way also. 
It's cool how Candice can get along so well with her parents and that one of her friends is her NEIGHBOR! So does Owen know that Candice is a witch?
It doesn't matter if this story is 80,000 words! The longer, the more exciting and better. Will James be there with Effy at the ball?

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It's alright ! I'm so glad you decided to review now! :D But whoa your life has been busy o: sorry about the guy xd ahah, she'll look good that's for sure ! ;) ahah, i love putting my characters into awkward situations :P Yeah Candice's home life is pretty normal no scary secrets there :) And no he doesn't he just knows that every year Jordan and Candice go off to their boarding school but he doesn't think much about it because a lot of other kids go to boarding school too in their home town. :P

Ahah I'm glad you feel that way ! :P And yes James's date to the ball is Ettie . ;)

Thank you for the review dear ! :)

Keep up the good work. I recently took a break form reviewing and reading the HPFF novellas and this is one of the few that I have to say is very well-written. You should definitely keep on writing. I'll be sure to give you a review next time. Your grammar is great by the way and that's something that makes a story a ton better.

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Thank you so much! I will most definitely keep on writing, and I very much look foward to your next review. Again, thanks. Your review was so wonderful,it really made my day, thank you! :)

WHY CAN'T ALL GUYS BE LIKE JAMES? WAH!

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Haha, I ask myself the same question. It sucks he only exists in my imagination!

I loved the whole convo between longbottom and freddy!

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I am glad you did :)

My gosh, that was possibly the hottest make out session that Fred and Dessie have had yet. I can't believe how they managed to not get caught red handed by other people in the gryfinndor house. Out of curiousity,  I was wondering if Heidi will give up the kids for adoption? I mean, seriously, Tosh is in no way able to become a suitable father within the course of six months and it would require a miracle for him to sprout a brain of a twenty-two year old to do so!

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Haha well thanks ;) and i can't give out such information at the present time. you'll have to read to find out (:

Haha, this is very cute! I love the fact that she can't speak english that well and her brother is helping her out, but not really! Will she eventually get better at it? And will she make it into Gryfinndor with Dominique?

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I am glad you like it! The rest will have to remain a surprise! Thanks for the review :)

One hot chapter! I mean seriously, this girl is the woman I would love to be when I grow up! She writes a 4500 word article, manages to get a super hot guy to ask her out and then practically makes love to him (AND HE STARTED IT)! And wow, Athena got engaged? Seriously? Is there going to be drama in the next chapter?

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I'm glad you liked it! I thought that since I had given Pen such a hard time (I mean I was embarrassing her at every turn) she deserved a little action with a hot guy, and he had to start it, if I left it up to Pen she would have just looked at her feet awkwardly.

I wouldn't say drama for the next chapter, but you will get a different POV.

Haha, great job on this story! The whole thing about the subway makes me wonder why Pen didn't try to apparate in a metro restroom (on the train that is) or something!

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I know, sorry about that. I just thought it would have been funnier if she had to take a taxi and almost missed her appointment.

why does this sound like quotes from the movie "500 Days of summer"?

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I don't recall putting any qoutes in there, I'll have to check again. I did like that movie though!

nice, i almost thought that i was taking a glimpse into my dysfuntional family when you opened up with the first scene. wow, this was really funny and honestly, i couldn't stop laughing at the scene where she mentions that she thinks that her nephew Henry is "on the other team"!

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I'm glad you liked it! I realized that on HPFF you get too many uptight/I hate magic muggles and I just thought it would be interesting to write a abnormal/normal family that happens to have a witch in their midst.

YES! Finally, the chapter is out! You do not know how long I was waiting for this! I had band camp and that was great, but this is even better!

Oh wow! For writer's block, i'd have to say you really pulled this puppy through. Out of curiosity, how is you summer going? Mine is going fine, but this 100 degrees everyday for forty straight days is killing me. Every time I go outside for five minutes, I come back in soaked to the bone in sweat. It's CRAZY!

Any who, I'm really happy that this chapter came out? did I not already say that?
Wow, I have never seen Candice go through so many changes in one chapter. like her emotions went from mean and grouchy to revengeful, and happy. Haha, I liked the scene with Ettie. I know that Ettie isn't aware of Candice's knowing of what's going on between her and james, but Ettie shouldn't be doing things like that, especially when James has a girlfriend. 

I like how Candice has become a procrastinator in a way- she traded essays for a snowball fight. SHe's living a little finally! James pulled her out of it too. I really liked the scene where he stuffed toast in her mouth when she was about to say something that wasn't very nice! Kudos to Potter! 

The last event was the best! Candice just held her head high and didn't let Luke bother her! He deserves it too. What is unbelievable is how he still acts so mean even after he got smacked up by James. Doesn't the guy know any better? Candice has a boyfriend who will hurt him. Oh well, she's gotta fight her own battles!

Hey I noticed at the end about some person with the name of Ramita? Is she a beta reader by any chance? I really need one or at least a website that could provide beta readers? I can't find the one that I used to go to and I have a new story coming up which kinda sucks and needs some editing!

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When I saw the review I think my jaw dropped. o: In a good way. (:I hope you liked band camp ahah and I'm glad you loved the chapter! :D

Ahaha, I decided instead of writing the end why not right what happened before the snowball fight? Then it just came to me! :D My summer is great its been in the 90 F (32C) (just had to do a lot of math to figure that out xD being canadian and all) and I've been dying so I fave no clue how you can even breath in that heat! o: My summer has been insane, I got my first job I have to keep bouncing back between family and friends went to the hospital (nothing serious), turned 16, tried to figure out my feelings for someone, fireworks, water parks so many things ! :D 

Yes you did but its fine! (: Shes in a strange state, keeping secrets does that to someone. ;) We'll be figuring a lot of stuff out soon about Ettie, James and such. :P

Ahaha, living is important! Plus who could turn down James ;) I've always wanted to do that with someone! :P

That's what everyone should do, its the best way of saying "I don't care". Yeah he does. Ugh and it sucks that there are so many guys like him in real life my best friend was going out with a luke and when she said no he was worst than the luke in this story D8 And luke won't say anything to candice with people around he's a coward hell wait til shes alone. 

She's someone who read my story and loved it and then offered to edit it so yeah a beta. :P But just go on the hpfanfictionforums and you should be able to find one! (:

Thank you so much for that wonderful review! :D

Awwe, it's getting so cute! When are they going to meet the adoptive parents?

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Thanks! In either the next chapter, or the one after

You know what's really weird? I was just listening to a song and the name of the singer happened to have the same name as Astoria's sister- Daphne! Haha, i found this very coincidential. Now that I've got your attention, I can't believe that no one's reviewed this chapter! It's really fantastic in the manner that it isn't so romantic/ angsty all the time like the other stories. It shows love that you get when you're in your family. Her dad sounds a lot like my grandfather- he never showed a single strain of struggle with his ailment. No. Complaining. At. All. Why doesn't she just stay and live at home with her parents? She has a perfect excuse too- her dad is passing away and her mother needs help taking care of him.

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Somehow I feel like I can relate to this girl…a lot. She loves the boy (in my case…"likes" because i am a teenager), but he doesn't love her back. You can really get the image in your head..she on her tiptoes trying to get a kiss from him and his head wrenches away every single time she attempts to do so. I can't imagine what it would be like to be in a loveless marriage, especially when you know that the girl Malfoy is attracted to is a loose girl who doesn't care for others. Man, it must be awful to sit in a restaurant and not talk to the person you're with. That's embarassing. At least state the "captain obvious" like "it's raining!" What's next on the radar? Is Astoria going to run into that old flame? haha!

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wow, pretty good for a first chapter. sheesh. it's good in the sense that you can see from ted's viewpoint- you know the alienation part- people want to include him in activities, but they don't know how to act around him. he's a part of the family in an intimate/emotional way, but he's not bloodrelated. He doesn't have anyone except his grandmother and she doesn't count for much. Harry's kind of like his dad and Ginny, like his mother. And that's how Teddy wants it to be, and he wishes that everyone would see him as the godson of Harry Potter and not the offspring of the Lupins. Great job! it really hit home!

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Wow, that is literally a bang on analysis! A lot of what you mentioned there comes into play a lot in the second chapter, especially the Harry and Ginny being pseudo-parents thing. I hope you'll stick around and read it! But, yeah, you literally got my complete message of the story down to a tee, and I've only written the first chapter. XD Haha! Thanks so, so much for this lovely review, and I hope I'll see you on chapter two! ^_^

first off, happy birthday!

Secondly, my gosh, that was the hottest snow ball fight ever. I liked the part where Lily pours icy cold water all over Tosh. His little dance made me laugh like crazy!  Wow, poor Dessie, she had to be the victim and take off her tank top. That's awful! Haha, Toshie was her knight-in-armor in the end! Hmm, i wonder how the elves would react to a half naked girl!

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The elves would probably like it...creepy pervs. (: 

And thank you :D

“So what’s new? How are you doing in school? How’s Tosh? What did you want to tell me about him? Is he still getting into trouble like every single day? Hey, you’re wearing the clothes I got you! How are Roxy, Heidi, and Sydney doing? Are you still fighting with Fred? TELL ME THINGS!” 


At first, Mason kind of reminded me of a super excited ten year old! Haha, I loved this chapter. Her older brother seemed like a sibling that everyone would want. He looks out for you and at the same time, he's like your best friend- you can tell him anything. What's the deal with Tosh? Is there a chance that Dessie's little hermano, Toshie, is going to start getting the hint that he got Heidi pregnant?

Great work by the way! You're an awesome author with good taste in banners (m, Taylor lautner….yum!)

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Haha Mason does seem like an extremely hyper ten year old at first and that's one thing I love about him. And yeah, he's kind of like Dessie's rock because when their parents died, he was always there for her. I think that's why they are so close. 

Tosh is pretty much an oblivious idiot so no, he has no idea that Heidi is preggers. 

Thank you so much! The absolutely amazing banner was made by the genius that is dream_BIG. TAYLOR LAUTNER IS A BOSS!

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