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Your story is really fantastic. i can't wait to read the rest of it and your other ones too. There's just a few things that should really be fixed. Just typos really, but one is very awkward. 

I sat up and climbed out of ben.(you meant bed i assume, i thought i'd just point it out.) I tiptoed towards the open doors at the other side of the room. If I can get out there, I can run for it. (you should put something like "she thought" after this) 
  See? No big deal, really.
I love Libby she's a fantastic character. Good job.

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Thank you. :)
However, It Was Only A Kiss is in first person, so really it is ALL her thoughts. But thank you for all the tips. :)

I love your story.isn't Sirius going to be curious that she's supposedly Jewish and is celebrating Christmas?

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Thank you :) Lol, Sirius is kinda slow, and prolly wouldn't think about it. ^^

what happened to morgan's parents ?

Author Response

There is going to be a chapter on that coming soon.

this is clever but why would malfoy come to something called smuggle the muggle that was invented by a blood traitors family ? 
 oh well i like this any way !

Author Response

He was bored? lol i dunno. :D Thanks for the review.

haha, this is great. 
 One of the fangirls should make a plot to kill Hermione or Cho or both. I really like your story but i think the girls shouldn't all be in gryffindor, or in all of harry's classes. Also, you could put romilda vane in the club.

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I just made all the girls up cuz it was a one shot. HBP wasnt even out yet! 

Omg thats an awesome idea!!!! Gracias!! Im so using that. :D

Thanks for the review!!!

good beginning! you can make a banner by going to edit story and putting the html in the summary box, i 'm pretty sure correct me if i'm wrong!

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Thanks, maybe it's my html, but when I put it in, it showed in the summary as the code, not the banner. :(   anyways, thanks for the review.

wow, i think people may have over reacted

Author Response

Much as we all do without the whole story.More important is their reaction when the have heard both sides.
hubris

" My potter sense is tingling!"
haha 
he's just like spiderman
 what happened to malfoy ?
 good story as always 
can't wait to read more 
 update soon!

Author Response

"Tingling" due to my imagination's shortcomings.I played in my head with a number of descriptive verbs and this one offended me least..and it was simple to use, and easily indentifiable for the reader, I hpoe.(Nice run on there,hey?)
Chapter in for validation yesterday...up by Tues or Wed.
hubris

i love your story 
i hope you include some neville fan girls, too 
 i mean he did kill the snake and all 
 can't wait to read more!

Author Response

He did kill the snake, but JKR says he and Hannah are a permanent item.I don't argue with the goddess of the Potter world.Neville does stay in the story line.
To me,he and Luna are the two most interesting character evolutions.Although we met Luna so late,she may have been that strong,flakey young woman all along.
Thanks for reading.
hubris

wow this is pretty good, unlike most other just after the final battle stories, this could most likely have happened. If i were harry i probably wouldn't have told about the horcruxes to everyone though.  this is really good i can't wait to read more

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Thanks.I debated that with myself for a good while.
Hope you read on.
hubris

i like the way you described godric in this chapter, he gives the impression of filling up the room,
 it's a wonderful story
 and i can't wait to read more

Author Response

Thank you. I really wanted to capture his change from boy to man. I was going to give him a full lion-like beard but i thought it would be too much of a drastic change!
Thanks for reading and reviewing again!

why can't helga go too ?
 once again i love your story 
it's very well done

Author Response

This is a journey Godric has to undergo alone. It's his past. But, don't worry, it won't be all that bad :)

wow the king can think up his own dastardly plans as well. all it takes is a little goading 
very good story! 
 i can't wait to read more

Author Response

Yes, he certainly can. Thanks for reviewing! :)

I really love your story. Did you use the name Benedick because it
s  like Benedict Arnold? If you did, that's clever. If you didn't what a coincidence!
Really good so far !

Author Response

Thank you. No, the name Benedick just popped into my head. Glad you're enjoying it, thanks for reading and reviewing!

i really like your story so far 
but i think you may have gotten the words to the song mixed up at the beginning  i think it goes
And it came to me then that every plan is a tiny prayer to father time
  i really like it so far especially how sirius isn't a player

Author Response

I'll be sure to fix that. I must have read it wrong.

They have a really easy time finding stuff, don't the?
 The first house they look at they get, the first dress May tries on they get The first suggestion for a honeymoon spot they go to . It's funny how Sirius was looking for food and whining about it! All my guy friends always do that. When Lily put the note down did she leave it over James' face ? Cause that's what it sounded like. iT'S A GREAT STORY! I really love it !

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Oh my gosh! Lily isn't petite! 5' 7" ?
  Or maybe  I'm just a midget. I 'm only 5'1/2"! It was really cute where Sirius and Remus were so nice to Mrs. Potter! Great Story!

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Just to let you know there's an awful lot of random Ks in here an some weird signs like this Â§ too. Great story!

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I really love your story! The sweet parts keep making me cry. I think you might use the words as well and as yourself too much though. People in the real world usually say you too. But seriously wonderful story!

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Three is kind of young for a girl that escaped from the malfoy's manor 
 and can speek so elequently 

i liked your story so far

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eh, not really, i know a two year old that can speak better than erin.

doesn't cho have black hair ? but it was still cute

Author Response

in the books its blonde :]

you're story never fails to make me cry 
 it is so good 

 when did the scene in the hospital happen after she ran way  o rbefore and between which of harry's previous  visits?

Author Response

Thank you! It happen when she was in the hospital and it was Harry's last visit while she was in there.

wow this is really well down
 i love the sabriel triology but i haven't finished it yet 
will there be spoilers from the abhorsen ? i only made it to lireal

really good start! i'll keep reading !

Author Response

Thanks! No I won't put spoilers in for the last book. The plot will be entirely original, I'll just be borrowing characters and concepts so it shouldn't really give much away about those :)

did jimmy die ? or did  loagn heal him and how did he do it, if he did ?

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 Why would they be unsure abotu learning from an american wizard?

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