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Review:marauderslover15 says:
Here with your requested review =D (sorry it took me so long!)

HERE WE GO.

I love how Lily has support and more so that you had Molly be there. Molly is an underrated character that is barely mentioned compared to Rose, Dom and Lily herself. Also Molly is usually characterized much differently usually like her father Percy. But you claim Molly as your own character, stepping out of the stereotypes fan made for Molly. It is refreshing to see you defining Molly differently.

The birthday scene slightly left me in disbelief. It seemed like Lily forgot her thoughts about being pregnant which I can personally assure you nothing would suppress those fears even presents especially when face with the father who is not even her boyfriend. That scene in my opinion was unrealistic. Hogsmade though you made it more believable especially when she wished on her birthday candles. But throughout the scene, I couldn’t connect with Lily on an emotional level until much later on during the pregnancy test. It was then I understood her feelings of fear and confusion.

One grammar mistake I saw: “I-I don’t want it to be true thought (THOUGH)”

Anyway, I am sure this story will be a success. It is really interesting and I could tell there would be lots of drama that Lily will need to overcome. Great story & chapter.

Author's Response: Hi,

It's fine, sorry it's taken so long to reply!

Lily and Molly are two of my favourite next gen girls along with Rose and Dom. I always see Molly as a bit rebellious but she isn't so much in this, more like her namesake I think. I certainly don't see her like Percy at all which is how I love it! Molly is one of the under loved, maybe that's why I love her so much :p

Having re-read I totally understand and now I've changed it slightly. Lily did have the thoughts still there, they just weren't as prominent at certain times. But I hope now it's been edited that her thoughts and worries are more noticeable.

Sorted that :)

Thank you so much dear!

-Potterfan310









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