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Review:kenpo says:
Here for your requested review (finally)!

And yay! I keep thinking about this story, but I have a really scattered brain and I can never remember what it's called or who wrote it, but here it is!

Yay! We're starting off with James and Mason! I'm a sucker for a good bromance.

It seems like you're having a tab bit of trouble with some of the dialogue. Make sure you're not always using periods. If you use "he said" or "he replied" or something, use a comma.

"I ate too much," she said as she rubbed her belly and let out a groan.
"I ate too much." She rubbed her belly and let out a groan.
There's a good forum post on dialogue. Rumpelstiltskin also did a great blog post about it.

I think James should probably watch his back, too... I'm not sure if I trust her...

Oh! There are some things I would very much like to say to Amy, but I will refrain because this is a review and it has to be 12+! I would like to say some not-12+ things to Amy!

Hmm. Once Felicity came into the room, I got a little confused as to what was going on and who didn't like who.

I officially am picturing Mr. Montgomery as Teddy Roosevelt. That's not a bad thing, but interesting for me...

Oh! Did she write another article about James? Am I totally right about not trusting her?

OUCH! You go, girl! Pippa's got SASS.

YES IS GINNY GONNA GO ALL MAMA-BEAR? Or get sassy? I want Ginny to get sassy. In the next chapter or two, I expect her to get sassy to SOMEONE. Please. I don't even care who it is. I love sassy characters, and Sassy Ginny is the best.

Okay. Sorry.

Haha, I liked this chapter. I'm really interested in the fic
Ew. Gross. Peter, go away.
Wait I don't know where that last line came from. I think I typed it earlier but then accidentally clicked above it when I started typing.

Hmmm... What did Pippa write?
Something about James and Mason? Because Mason complained about how he almost lost his job, so maybe it's clever foreshadowing? Or something about the entire Potter-Weasley clan? I don't know. But I'd like to find out! Keep updating! Sorry this review was so late!

Author's Response: Hehe, thank u! Time doesn't matter at all!

Haha, OMG THAT COMMENT MADE MY DAY, LIKE 15 TIMES! The fact that someone thought about my story! squee!

Eugh. Grammar is my eternal enemy. So thank u so much for pointing that out! :D Yeah, I'll go check out Rumpel's blog right away! :D

Hehe, I think you are right on that one :)

I know right. But, I love her, in a love to hate her way! My favourite antagonist character to write! :D

Ok, I will go look over that too! :)

OMG OMG OMG! ME TOO! Thats what I pictured Mr Montgomery as too! :D

Hehe, you'll have to see ;) As you no doubt will when I request a review after posting the next chapter ;)

Haha, same! SASSY GINNY FTW! :D I'm a bit high on chocolate...Thats why theres so many caps! :D

Thank u! :D Yay! Thats such a HUGE compliment! :D Haha, it's okay! I love that line anyway!

Haha, you'll have to see! :D

Thank u for the super awesome review! No probs! :D And I will definitely update!

-Curie :D

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