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Review:Secret Santa says:
Sad :(

I loved the way you wrote Marlene and Sirius's relationship. They really seemed to have a beautiful, playful love story. You wrote both of their characters really well, and I loved all the little details that you put into the story. The proposal was really well done as well. I love how he talked about her changing her soap and his amortentia scent changing. That was so sweet :*

Then it got sad :( While I really liked the little peek into James and Lily's house, I thought it kind of interrupted the flow of the story.

The scene with Marlene and her sister was especially heartbreaking, probably especially because I'm an older sister myself. I wish Marlene could have fought back more. I would have liked to see her pull out her wand and really give it her all.

That being said, I thought there was a kind of poetic-ness to her attacking them without her wand, especially since her sister was a squib.

And poor Sirius. The last line was really good, but really terribly sad. It seems like you did really well with this challenge.

Author's Response: Thanks :) I'll take that as a compliment :)

Thanks so much!! :D I quite like their relationship :) I might think of exploring it in more detail :)

Hm, I was thinking it might... I don't think I will edit it though... might be too much of a hassle :( sorry!

Aw, thanks :) I think she was so shocked that she couldn't react or do anything (there's a reason she wasn't an auror ;) ) yeah- I would like to see that too! :( and thanks! The squib idea was a last minute addition :)

Thank u so much!! :D I'm glad u liked the last line, unlike everything else, that was planned! :D thank u! I'm glad u think so!

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