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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! Me, once again. :) So, let's go over things:

Plot: Wow! This is definitely dark! I wonder if you're planning on continuing it? I really liked that you showed the different ways that characters were dealing with the end of the war. Everything was really believable. I wasn't actually surprised that Hermione was the one to refuse to put up a front about it. And poor Harry living day to day in a lie. :( I think it was all really cool and I hope you'll write more on this.

Great Lines: Just one in particular to mention--"You don't," he answers suddenly, at once, and his voice is sad and soft and not Harry's voice, not how it should be. "But you try, and if that doesn't work, you pretend."

Characterization: I really liked that Hermione wouldn't pretend just to make everyone feel more comfortable. She was a little combative which surprised me and the fact that she misses fighting so much that she's almost lost herself was scary. But she saved Draco. She could have let him die, but she didn't. And I think that proves she's still Hermione and she's still a "good" person. I wonder how she'll deal with the letters and the revolution and how she'll battle people that are actually trying to advance Muggleborns (from the summary). It's definitely an interesting dilemma.

Descriptions: You really showed a lot of detail when Draco arrived. That was gruesome (in a good way). I would have liked to see the same amount of detail for how things looked, smelled, sounded, felt, etc. throughout the rest of the chapter. :)

Emotions: Is "nothing" an emotion? Because that's how I feel Hermione feels. I feel like she's just waiting on the edge of something and she's like...in hibernation. It was really neat, haha. I think you wrote that very well. I'm interested to see if she'll be more alive now that she has something interesting in her life. But I even think that that's sad that she has to have tragedy to be alive. Maybe she'll heal from that.

Interactions: The conversation with Harry was really moving. The fact that she knew he was gone before she was done qualifying herself shows everything that they've lost. It was really sad. And the facade with Ginny was just...pathetic. I definitely understand why Hermione is so upset about how everyone else is acting. Sometimes you can't just "move on."

Style: Perfection, as always. I'll read more stories as the House Cup moves on and after it's finished. Maybe I'll favorite-author you. In fact, yes, I think I will. :)

--Emily

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